Hey, I like your prose style. It has a poetic rhythm to it. I have been trying to learn certain writing techniques and it is great to recognise them in your writing.
- I believe these sentences are a form of
Isocolon.
...
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Alliteration
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- Sentences like this seem to just roll of the tongue (or brain, so to speak.)
Currently I am reading Cormac McCarthy's
The Road and his prose has a lot of these techniques. Here is a quote... 'The boy turned in the blankets. Then he opened his eyes. Hi, Papa, he said.'
McCarthy seems to often end his paragraphs with three short sentences like above, and it works to grab your attention. I tried this out recently in a project of mine but it did not seem to work right. I think the trick is to choose your moments carefully, such as at more poignant scenes or for the build up/release of a scenes tension. I also noticed how he can have a paragraph with lots of short sentences and then ends on an unnaturally long sentence, which again works to grab ones attention.
Anyway, nice work. Can you recommend me a Terry Pratchett book, I think that will be my next read.
(I tried to read that Starship Troopers book by Heinlein but I bounced of it pretty hard and stopped reading.)