Victory text...errr

[Kalos]

I was just looking in expanded_bi.txt and noticed the victory text

"The royal house of France have been blessed by god and your inspired leadership! Victory is indeed sweet, and all French can sleep safely knowing that we rule a big Empire and protect them from all enemies. "


Ok..."knowing that we rule a big empire"????

"protect them from enemies"

WHAT?? Is it just me or could this be improved on GREATLY? At least using more descriptive words, mabye change it to "all the French people can sleep soundly with the knowledge that we rule a vast kingdom and will defend it from enemies"

[drak10687]

.....right.....
um, we didnt have too much time to worry about english for this release, in fact right now, its still probably the last thing on our minds. We do appreciate though any DEDICATED volunteers who wish to help out in improving the quality of written english in our mod. (luckily, we seem to already have one)

You have to remember that for most of the team, english is our second or third language. In fact (and correct me if I'm wrong) none of the current ACTIVE team was born with english as their first language. I guess I dont really count though, since I've spent more than half my life in North America, but I'm not the one who works on text files. In fact there is no dev. dedicated to descriptive text files. And the dev. who is responsible for most of the "funny" english, is also responsible for pretty much every piece of coding/scripting/balancing/leadership/etc. for this build, so you'll have to excuse him as he was quite busy, and he is quite german, lol.

I hope I dont sound like I'm ranting, but I just want to "excuse" ourselves, and remind people that if you want to help out, but dont know how to mod, helping us improve small yet important aspects like this would be greatly appreciated, and can be your first step on your way to becoming a "full-fledged" modder and getting some experience.

[DaVinci]

lol, ok. Not completely correct, what Drak mentioned above, we have had recently devs (volunteered beta testers) for the text files, but correct is, that probably none of them are native english speakers:

Text files

quotes - Palatinae plus TK with some corrections (TK = Grandmaster on TWC)
expanded bi, eventstrings, diplomacy and strat.txt - (basicly 0.34) then me and then Zombimode and Palatinae
descr_campaign - (basicly 0.34) then me and then TK
export_units - (basicly 0.34) then me and then TK recently
export_buildings - (basicly 0.34) then me, and here are for sure a lot of language gambles :tooth:

[Garnier]

I'd be glad to work on text files such as this victory text. I am a native english speaker, and I like to write. I also have a bit of experience modding for myself. Just email me the files that I should work on ( garniermtworg at fastmail . fm ) and I will send them back when the text is rewritten. I'm quite happy to contribute to this mod, as it's definitely my favorite and until/if C2TW comes out, its definitely better than M2TW.

[Elohim]

I second Garnier. I am also a native english speaker, a prolific and appreciated writer. E-mail text you want changed to elohim@hotmail.co.uk, along with the meaning, and I'll sort it for you. Might be delay of a couple of days, as I am in a major exam period, but I'll do my best.

Keep up the good work

[Gavmundo]

I dunno some people are never happy lol. I think i'd prefer good gameplay in oppose to good grammar.

[drak10687]

but why not have both, lol?

Thanks for your offer Elohim.