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    I fought the law (Inspired by the song of the same name by The Clash)



    I’m going to tell you how I lost my girl and how I lost my fun.

    Do you know why? Well my fun it used to be to rob people with a six gun; I would hold up anything, banks, trains, stagecoaches even lone travellers. Man that was a good life.

    It was a hoot, I made so many dollars I couldn’t even think of turning straight, before that I had needed money, cause’ I had none. After a while though I got bored of just robbing folks, so I would shoot them instead. I like to see the surprised expression on a tough guy’s face when they played the big man and I would plug them. I rightly don’t know how many men I’ve shot, I stopped counting after twenty-two, never shot a woman though, a man’s got to have some principles.

    Hell yes I was a bad man, the only light in my life was a girl, prettiest girl in three counties, Jane-Ellen, what a woman. I could have given up the robbing and killing for that woman, but in the end the fun was always in fighting the law.

    Yep, I fought the law, but the law won.

    The real funny thing is that Jane-Ellen was the prison governor’s daughter when I did my last stretch, she was the best girl I ever had, it used to tickle me real bad, when her and me used to get up to stuff in the governor’s office.

    On his desk no less!

    She tried to make an honest man of me, I even practised a trade in prison, I became a stonemason’s apprentice, but breaking rocks in the hot sun was no choice I was ever going to stick to.

    The worst of it was I found out my girl was pregnant, that was just before I finished my time in prison, her father found out, he hit the roof and had her bundled off to have this con’s baby somewhere nice and quiet. How could he do that, his own flesh and blood?After that he sent a couple of heavy hitting wardens in to beat the living hell out of me, they did a good job too, I was in the prison hospital for six weeks.

    When my sentence was finished I tried looking for my girl, but I heard she died giving birth to my son, so I went and visited her grave, she was eighteen years old, I swore there and then that her old man would pay. When I found out where my son was I went to take him from the new folks he was with, but the law was already waiting for me, the town sheriff and a whole posse waiting for me to make my move so they could shoot the crap out of me, so I had to leave my baby and that felt real bad.

    I went back to the prison looking for Jane-Ellen’s father, I waited all day till he came out of the prison and headed for home, I followed him until we came across a deserted street and then hit him over the back of the head with a weighted cosh, and then I beat the cold hearted scum bag to death.

    It was better than any killing I had made with my six gun I can tell you. After that my race was just about run, I had tried to leave town before the sheriff and his posse had found the body of the governor, but they hunted me down with bloodhounds, beat me, stripped me, bound my hands and hung me from a tree.

    You might ride by my decaying corpse swinging gently in the desert breeze from the branch of the tree on your way to work or to church on a Sunday, if you do say a prayer for my girl and my baby son.

    It’s too late for me partner.
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    OMG!!!!!!! This is horror!!!!....RA now can you tell me how can I sleep tonigh? ....Expecially after the last image of "T-Shirt underneath and its loud and proud florescent pink logo legend of ‘Lady Gaga rules!’"..........a fan of Lady Gaga!!!! AAAARRRRRGGGGGHHHHHHH! NOOOOOOO!!!!!

    My dear you are a great Master of Horror! .........+rep!


    How much I love the Metal Tales!!!!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Rex Anglorvm View Post
    I fought the law (Inspired by the song of the same name by The Clash)
    I’m going to tell you how I lost my girl and how I lost my fun.

    Do you know why? Well my fun it used to be to rob people with a six gun; I would hold up anything, banks, trains, stagecoaches even lone travellers. Man that was a good life........................It’s too late for me partner.
    Great story, a sad one, but......there is glory in the desert breese.....RA, this story is a little jewel, simple but intense, many emotions reading the text, I see the scene like in an old movie, in black and white, this is an hard story but......even in the Damnation there is Glory.......Thank you Rex!


    'I Fought the Law' by Stray Cats Paris 1989 (I've found this old Rockabilly version quite suitable), Again:Thank you bro!!!!

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    Live the Clash nobody like them!

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    And, relax...

    Not scary enough though, in the end dream, should be wearing... MLP Love -t-shirt

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    Quote Originally Posted by Diocle View Post
    OMG!!!!!!! This is horror!!!!....RA now can you tell me how can I sleep tonigh? ....Expecially after the last image of "T-Shirt underneath and its loud and proud florescent pink logo legend of ‘Lady Gaga rules!’"..........a fan of Lady Gaga!!!! AAAARRRRRGGGGGHHHHHHH! NOOOOOOO!!!!!

    My dear you are a great Master of Horror! .........+rep!

    How much I love the Metal Tales!!!!
    Thanks, a nice comic twist at the end I thought, glad you found it scary, but hopefully fun too!

    Quote Originally Posted by Diocle View Post
    Great story, a sad one, but......there is glory in the desert breese.....RA, this story is a little jewel, simple but intense, many emotions reading the text, I see the scene like in an old movie, in black and white, this is an hard story but......even in the Damnation there is Glory.......Thank you Rex!

    'I Fought the Law' by Stray Cats Paris 1989 (I've found this old Rockabilly version quite suitable), Again:Thank you bro!!!! Live the Clash nobody like them!
    I was hoping to tell the tale from the viewpoint of a man with a basic education and a flair for violence, hopefully I achieved that end, I will write more punk for you my friend

    Quote Originally Posted by ybbon66 View Post
    And, relax...

    Not scary enough though, in the end dream, should be wearing... MLP Love -t-shirt
    What!? Not scary enough! A lady gaga shirt? Blimey what more do you want...blood?! well....maybe next time

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    Quote Originally Posted by Rex Anglorvm View Post
    You wake screaming and my job is done, now it’s someone else’s turn, is it yours dear reader? I do hope so….
    Excellent effort, Rex! It certainly evokes a mischievous atmosphere, filled with dark humour. The ending is quite unexpected.

    These kind of tales seem to bring out the best in you as a writer.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Maximinus Thrax View Post
    Excellent effort, Rex! It certainly evokes a mischievous atmosphere, filled with dark humour. The ending is quite unexpected.

    These kind of tales seem to bring out the best in you as a writer.
    Hm, I think its the british scene/penchant for black humour that comes out in me, take something dark, horror filled and foreboding and then end it with a twist that brings out a laugh. I wanted to make the sandman somebody that you would fear and equally like.

    I hope I achieved that Thanks for the positive feedback

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    Ybbon66 posted a good oldie, so being muuuuuuuuuuuch older than ybbon66 now I feel obliged to post this Ancient Version (maybe the first?) of the wonderful 'I fought the law';
    So dedicated to RA, to the young Ybbon , and to all you readers of the delicious stories of Rex Anglorum:

    Ledies and gentlemen, I'm proud to present you
    Bobby Fuller (has been Bob murdered?) 1966 (Diocle was 3 years old!):

    I Fought the Law!






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    Don't fear the reaper (Inspired by the song of the same name by Blue Oyster Cult)*


    ‘Seasons don’t fear the reaper, nor do the wind, the sun or the rain, we can be as they are, but we won’t be. For our fear and our hatred of the last great unknown blinds us. As any man knows all our times must come to an end, nobody is immortal, the last great step, the final challenge, the abyss of black defeat and the heavily weighted chains of mortality bind us to the inevitable.’

    ‘We are here, but now there and then finally gone, we are less than a speck of sand in the celestial beach of the universe. Love too is fleeting, when Valentine’s arrow pierces our hearts, it is only for a few mortal years that it remains a subtle gift too us, but we too can be like Romeo and Juliet, and we can be as they are together in eternity. Come on baby, take my hand and let’s take the chance of eternal happiness together.’

    I needed to convince the young woman, I a scientist and a scholar, a man empowered by my Government to take the mortal lives of forty thousand men and women every day to find a remedy.

    A remedy for mortality my task to find the holy chalice, to find the most sort-after of medicinal mirages, to find the grail known as immortality.

    I repeated the mantra I had rehearsed and spilt from my tongue so many times that day and so many day before, ‘don’t fear the reaper; don’t fear the reaper. You’ll be able to fly, to go past the realm of the average human being, you have won the prize, you are a ‘life’s lottery’ winner and ever lasting life is yours! I’m your man, trust me!’

    The young blonde woman’s pretty and delicate features looking at me with a mixture of love, respect and reverence, and why not!?

    After all I am a mechanic of the reaper, the machine that takes your life and rewards you with eternal bliss.

    Only it doesn’t quite work like that, we mechanics have been searching for a breakthrough to give us the formula we need to provide eternal life for our most sublime and glorious leaders for nearly three hundred years. The reaper actually sucks mortality straight out of your body, leaving you a dried up desiccated corpse, however the winners of the state lottery or ‘life’s lottery’ as its better known or told that they will be awarded immortality and a life without work, poverty or pain.

    Sometimes we have inquisitive relatives or friends, they poke around looking for answers, the solution is quite simple, we have a whole department dedicated to corresponding with winners relatives, when the reaper takes your mortal being, it also sucks out your memories, personalities, quirks and so on, and these are used by the correspondence department to fool the relatives.

    Occasionally the odd one gets suspicious; these individuals meet with small accidents….we have another smaller specialist department that deals with them. I hope to work there one day.

    The woman is still looking at me with a smile on her face, so young, so beautiful, so delicate and so stupid….

    Like all the others, the sheep of our civilization, she believes that the mechanics are the good guys, I stifle a laugh, people really are such cretins.

    Composing myself I recite the poetry that we give all winners before we cast them off of the edge into the reaper itself.

    ‘Love of two is one; here but now they’re gone.’

    ‘Come the last night of sadness and it was clear she couldn’t go on, then the door was opened and the wind appeared’ this was the signal for the reaper to be switched on and the heavy thud of machinery to start up, it always created a swirling blizzard of wind around both the mechanic on the reaper platform and the winner on its very edge, as a hydraulic door to the heart of the machine opened up, leaving a yawning chasm of one hundred and fifty foot below.

    Time for the next part of the poem; ‘the candles blew and then disappeared, the curtains flew and then he appeared.’ Small lights blinked on and off either side of the doorway, as two metallic curtains rolled back to reveal the shape of an angel seemingly hanging in mid-air.

    A voice echoed from the angel ’don’t be afraid, come on baby’ and the young woman ran to him, for a few seconds they seemed to twirl, dance and fly in the air, she looked back at me and smiled, as they always do, and then she took the angels hand, she had become as he had and then the screams always start.

    For the angel is no angel, he is the reaper, metal and death in angelic form, to clasp his hand is to fly to the other side, as all winners must do. Right, time for the next one, who knows maybe one day we will stumble across the answer, until then I’ve got a job to do.


    *The actual song, is uplifting. Meaning that people should not fear the reaper as he comes to everyone, howver I had to give it a rather dark turn as I could not resist it.
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    Very good stuff here, reminds me of a film I watched...eeeeerrr...nope, can't remember at the moment.

    Anyway, loved all your tales thus far and this one especially, as I'm quite a big fan of BOC myself. Can tell you're a Brit from a mile off, just has that vibe methinks, inbred in us all as islanders and sarcastic nuts.

    Have some rep!

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    Damn machines! Sorry Rex but suold be so nice the woman?...If she was less beautiful my pain would be less heartbreaking!

    Great story, and great work the Metal Tales....+ rep!

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    Quote Originally Posted by McScottish View Post
    Very good stuff here, reminds me of a film I watched...eeeeerrr...nope, can't remember at the moment.

    Anyway, loved all your tales thus far and this one especially, as I'm quite a big fan of BOC myself. Can tell you're a Brit from a mile off, just has that vibe methinks, inbred in us all as islanders and sarcastic nuts.

    Have some rep!
    Glad you liked it, I wanted to take it past the obvious ah here somes the big bad grim reaper type of horror and show the horror of man/machinery instead, I think in the back of my mind I was tipping my hat to a couple of sci-fi's made in the 70s/80s but can't recall the names either.

    Yes, I think that dark humour is a very british trait, although I hope non-brits like it too!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Diocle View Post
    Damn machines! Sorry Rex but suold be so nice the woman?...If she was less beautiful my pain would be less heartbreaking!

    Great story, and great work the Metal Tales....+ rep!
    I's so sorry Diocle, but as I'm sure you know, in every horror story there should be at least one gorgeous woman

    I need to start thinking of another tale now ....

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    I read "You’ll be able to fly, to go past the realm of the average human being, you have won the prize, " as "You'll ... , you have won the pizza"

    Pay attention old chap!

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    Quote Originally Posted by ybbon66 View Post
    I read "You’ll be able to fly, to go past the realm of the average human being, you have won the prize, " as "You'll ... , you have won the pizza"

    Pay attention old chap!
    You must have been thinking of buffalo cheese A new metal tale should be posted by the end of the week

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    Excellent story! Is this a reference to Mengele and his crazy experiments?
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    It reminds me of the Cybermen in Dr Who - they are created from people, though not a chosen elite, then their brain extracted and put into the cyberman body with a machine. There was an episode with David Tennant(?) and Trigger from Only Fools as the man who invents the Cybermen.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Maximinus Thrax View Post
    Excellent story! Is this a reference to Mengele and his crazy experiments?
    When writing this myself I wanted to be sure that I could make a evil character with no redeeming qualities whatsoever, I guess that that fits him quite well. I was well aware when I wrote this that it could so easily have slipped into a tale of the holocaust, but its a serious subject that I would not want to write lightly about.

    Quote Originally Posted by ybbon66 View Post
    It reminds me of the Cybermen in Dr Who - they are created from people, though not a chosen elite, then their brain extracted and put into the cyberman body with a machine. There was an episode with David Tennant(?) and Trigger from Only Fools as the man who invents the Cybermen.
    Indeed. I was trying to lean towards some of the sci-fi of my youth, and some early films that had this sort of plot line.
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    It's a good thing I have a habit of stalking Shankbot's profile in order to harry him with wall posts; otherwise I might not have noticed this thread. Wonderful pieces. I love the first two stories. I think we have similar tastes, REX.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Rex Anglorvm View Post
    Paranoid (Inspired by the song of the same name by Black Sabbath)
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    Night Crawler (Inspired by the song of the same name by Judas Priest)
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    Whole Lotta Rosie (Inspired by the song of the same name by AC/DC)*
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    Enter Sandman (Inspired by the song of the same name by Metallica)
    I have read the first four, and like everyone I am worried about you.

    "Night Crawler" was my favourite, but the darkest was "Whole Lotta Rosie" I think... This is indeed some great writing, but I will never see you in the same way.
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