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    Rome wasn't built in a day.... and neither was this duel - but you cannot rush perfection...

    ...so hold on to your seats...

    for the duel between:

    algirdasu

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    Tigellinus

    Note the order of submissions may or may not be in the order of the authors.



    Submission 1
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    My name is Arifis Sorrow and this is the story of how I died, I had done a grave many bad deeds in my life but going to the Desert of the Damned was the biggest mistake of my life. Tell me friend have you ever made a decision that cost you a friend, everything you hold dear and your very life? Tell me have you ever been tormented by the feral unknown’s of this world? I have and may I tell you something friend?

    It wasn’t worth it.


    I wrapped my veil around my mouth, in hopes to halt the sea of sand entering my crusted mouth. The sand baked down upon me and likely my friend as well, Mickael I had known him for three years, not as long as I have known most but he is a good man, a good companion and above all else a good friend.

    Now Mickael hoping to find some fun in this damned desert seemed to be cradling the sun, his arms outstretched in a semi circle engulfing the sun.

    I shaded my eyes as I looked up at the fading sun, dark would fall soon and when it did terrors would befall upon me.

    If only then I had known that this night would be my last.

    ‘Mickael, come on let’s find a place to rest, dark will fall soon’

    Mickael turned to me his face smiling and cheerful he enjoys this so, his light brown eyes seemed to glow as the sun shone vividly behind him, giving him a seeming glow.

    His green tunic was faded and covered in sand that had been blowing since the sun had risen earlier this morning.

    ‘Ok Arifis whatever you say mate, here will do as good as any I think’ he spread his arms in wide questioning gesture with a cocky smile placed upon his lips ‘It is after all just desert’

    I didn’t smile, I felt uneasy and as if I was being watched, you know when someone is looking at you and you get that uneasy feeling and you turn automatically to whoever is staring at you? I feel like that but when I turn there is no one there.

    I nodded in response to his question; our spot was covered on all sides by sand hills apart from north, I decided to set our tent so that the opening was facing north with the fire just outside, I set two blankets up for us to sit on instead of the sand and began to cook what little food we had.

    I turned the rat over again as I saw the flames tickle it’s dead corpse, I must admit rat isn’t tasty folks.

    Along with the veil over my mouth I was lightly dressed in a tunic and leather pants, I was armed with a old revolver pistol and a dagger. They would do against sand snakes but not very good against much else. But there are things that I am trained for, things that they don’t teach in the army anymore, I was taught how to survive, I was taught how to find the solution to a problem, to see a weakness in a enemy and exploit it.

    It was simple, I was trained for survival.

    Night fell quickly after the last meal of the day, and with it I fell quickly into a sleep that would soon be disturbed. I awoke eyes wide with terror as I head a snuffling noise, a noise like a dog with its nose flattened on the ground in search of a scent. The fire was out and I saw its ashes as I got into a sitting position, sliding my dagger from its scabbard and revolver from its holster.

    ‘Mickael get up, there is something outside’

    Michael moaned and got up rubbing his eyes ‘What the hell man why’d you wake me up?’

    Then he heard it the snuffling sound and then movement and his eyes filled with terror ‘What the hell is that?’

    I glared at him as I moved closer to the entrance of the tent ‘Be quiet’ I hissed at him.

    I leaned out of the tent and saw something that chilled my bones, a Wolf like thing standing on two legs, wings in its back, hooves on its legs and talon’s on its hands, It’s mouth was large and brutish with wolf like fangs.

    ‘RUN’ I bellowed as I swivelled my revolver around and pulled the trigger before running for my life dagger in my hand and revolver in the other.

    The beast staggered and I turned to see Michael out of the tent and behind me, I grabbed him as the beast swiped at him, he arched his back in agony as the talons dug deep into his back.

    His scream of agony ringed in my airs as we ran into the desert ‘Come on’ I yelled at him, but he was falling behind now that gash in his back must have done more damage than I would have thought.

    In the distance I caught a glimpse of something that made me falter for a second, a cliff there was a bloody cliff in the way, how the hell would we cross that?

    And then the horrible truth hit me, we wouldn’t cross we would die.

    ‘Come on-‘ I said as a black beast slammed into Michael, he was thrown to the ground as the beast stood atop him striking, ripping and biting at his flesh.

    His agonizing screams filled me with more dread and terror then the fear of death it’s self.

    I had to do something I knew that much, I swung my dagger as hard as I could into the beasts flesh, It howled in a horrible manner of agony and anger of having been interrupted while eating it’s meal. I got my hand around it’s throat and dug my blade deep into its flesh, giving it the same treatment it gave my friend.

    For minutes I was lost in psychotic rage of sorrow, terror and anger as I stabbed again into the beast’s chest, throat and stomach. By the time I was finished it’s entrails were mixed in with Michaels.

    His body was torn to pieces his heart and lungs were ripped apart, blood splattered the cold sand, his throat had been torn out, his left eye and the left side of his face was gone to be replaced by mushy, crushed skull.

    His legs looked surprisingly untouched, still with blood soaked pants and body he could well have been a walking blood donation.

    I knelt by my friend ‘I’m sorry’ I whimpered ‘I’m so sorry Michael wherever you are forgive me please’

    A old memory came to me that I had read when I was doing research on the desert of the damned When someone dies in the desert of the damned they come back, lost, cold and bloodthirsty at the time I thought it a hoax but now..... now I wasn’t so sure.

    I looked down at my beaten friend soaked in blood and tears, sand and sorrow. His right hand reached up and clutched at my throat and I gave a shriek of cold terror as the three remaining fingers coiled around my windpipe.

    I sliced at the hand wildly and was relieved as it came flying off, it’s nerves dead it fell to the ground with a thud.

    I heard footsteps now heavy footsteps, like the ones of the beasts. I turned and ran towards the cliff. The footsteps were louder now as if thunder was roaring. I heard the sounds of bone’s breaking and flesh being torn off and knew that they were eating my undead friend as well as hunting me. It was close now to close, I knew I would have to face it soon; I couldn’t hide from my fate forever.

    Now was the time to shoot.

    I swivelled my revolver as the beast’s mouth engulfed my hand, I pulled the trigger, On reflex the beasts jaws clenched shut cutting off my arm from the elbow downwards.

    A searing pain hit me like a gunshot but I knew what I had to do. I ran, as fast as I could to the edge of the cliff, armed with a dagger, half a arm, my wit and my training. I honestly which would help me least. I turned to find several of the beasts in front of me snarling and snapping their jaws at me. At that point I was insane with both grief and agony and maybe that is why I did what I did.

    It was time for me to die.

    I stepped backwards into the thin air and sank into the abyss of death.

    I was forgotten in that desert, they sent no one investigating, our families went on living never knowing what happened to us.

    And so my friend now you know how I died and you may be asking yourself what happened to my soul? It’s still there at the bottom of the cliff and every nights those same beasts sit at the top of the cliff snarling at my bones.
    Remember this my friends always be true to yourself, never look back, know who you are and when you die have.... no regrets.
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    Submission 2
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    “I had her in these hands Karl”- I said, while looking at my clutched hands, like I was desperately holding on to something – “But she...slipped away. No matter how hard I held on she still managed to slip away and dive back into the sea”

    Karl put his fatherly hand on my shoulder and smiled with an all-knowing smile.

    “And that is precisely why we are here!”- He said, extending his hand towards the paintings that were hanging on walls all around us – “Modern art my dear child. It is exactly what you need now. There are plenty fish in the sea and you need this pit of shallowness, stupidity and materiality to wash that knowledge down with. This is the place to get away from all spiritual problems. As a wise man once said – one needs materialism to realize what spirituality is.” – He said, happy with his own words, tapping his slightly visible belly with pleasure.

    Karl. He was a little taller than me and older by fifteen years, even though somehow his face gave off a strangely elderly aura, like here is a man who has gathered plenty of knowledge and experience on life. But thick dark hair could still be seen on his head, accompanied by a youthfully shave and a slightly playful glitter in his eyes. His fatherly hand has always guided me through life and helped me get through countless hurdles.

    “I don’t know. How is modern art going to help me forget that I will probably never catch a fish like that…”

    “The prices my dear Robert. The prices”- Karl quickly interrupted and guided me to the nearest painting with a happy smirk. – “For instance - look at this painting right here” – He said, pointing at the painting in front of us.

    It was a picture of a misshaped figure with splatters of paint all over. The painting made zero sense and didn’t show any skill at all. Honestly it seemed like the work of a five year old - who was given a paint-brush to play with.

    “Now look at the price-tag”- Karl added, after giving me enough time to drink in what’s in front of me.

    I turned by gaze towards the price tag and after reading the numbers my eyes went wide open and even my mouth opened up slightly.

    “See?”- Karl said satisfied by the effects of his idea – “It’s so ridiculous that it’s funny. Hysterically funny!”

    I stared at the price-tag for a few more moments before replying, unable to believe what I am seeing.

    “What does this mean? Do people have too much money? Or is it that some have too little of it…? “- I wondered aloud, slowly raising a hand to my chin, getting into my “thinker” position.

    “Desperation my child. Desperation”- Karl replied, with even a brighter smile shining on his face, like he enjoys these little lectures way too much –“You see, art has reached such a stage when barely anyone can think of anything …original and interesting. Everything has been touched and felt from every possible side and people are now forced to turn to stuff like this.”- Karl finished, lifting his chin towards the mentioned painting with a slight frown.

    But before I could add anything another individual decided to join our little adventure in the uncharted waters of modern art.

    “Oh stop it you all knowing clown”- a round shaped man said, while approaching us. He seemed to be at least in his sixties - grey hair barely covering his head, with a mop of it growing from his jaw as compensation.
    “You just don’t understand the path modern art has chosen. There’s no desperation in it. Only hope! A hope for something new and unusual”- He added, and smiled defiantly at Karl.

    Karl turned to this “intruder” and starred at him for a few moments, with narrowed eyes, but all that was soon replaced by an overjoyed grin.

    “Friedrich!”- He said loudly enough for everyone around us to hear and hugged the round man happily, with the recipient replying with the same warmth and happiness.

    “Glad you decided to join. You are just the navigator we need to guide us through these tricky waters!”- Karl added after that warm hello.

    The words pleased Friedrich and he happily accepted this task that was given to him, thus guiding us to a nearby room filled with photographs, while exchanging pleasantries with the two of us.

    “This is what you truly need my friends”- Friedrich said, extending his arms towards the walls around him, littered with plenty of pictures of various sizes – “And what you need is hope, not a chance to mock human stupidity and feel better about yourselves”

    “Like here”- He guided us to a nearby picture – “This picture here has hope written all over it”

    I observed the mentioned picture. Within it an individual was standing in a desert while placing his hands in a way that made it look like he was holding the sun, with a city visible in the background.

    “Can’t you feel it? What does the held sun represent? It represents a hope for a new, better day. That the mentioned hope is in human hands and that we ourselves can create it. The city in the background shows just that. It is standing there tall, in a desert in which normal life is impossible, like a beacon of hope it provides a quality life with comfort and safety for people. And it was humans who built it, proving that even in the most hopeless of places, they are capable of creating that hope and paving the road to a brighter future”- Friedrich explained.

    “Oh you naïve old man”- Karl replied with a sarcastic grin –“It’s not hope that you see here. Its’ overconfidence – the thing that is plaguing today’s society to a dreadful extent. First of all look at that individual holding the sun. It’s like time is frozen and the sun is stopped in its’ tracks…unable to rise or descend, stopped by those overconfident human hands. All of this reflects the mentality of the human race, how they believe that they are able to accomplish anything they wish. Anything is possible as they say. And obviously the city in the background proves my point, giving off another sign of that overconfidence. You were right in a way of what that city symbolizes – that the human race is able to even shackle the desert and bind it to its’ will, creating a comfortable spot for people even in such a harsh environment. But in truth they are unable to defeat nature completely, as life there is still as harsh as ever, with plenty of different problems present. Ah but does that matter to our “all-mighty” race? Doubt it. Overconfidence indeed” – He disagreed, waving his arms energetically in the process, with shining eyes.

    But before Friedrich could reply, with him already in an attacking position – his palm lifted and pointed at the picture, mouth slightly open and eyes reflecting passion and interest, I unintentionally joined in.

    “All I see is the price-tag” – I said, with my gaze still locked at it– “I mean it’s ridiculous how much it costs. This is clearly a desperate attempt at filling one’s pockets while using an easy and overused idea” – I finished and turned to look at my two companions, who exchanged looks and smiled at me warmly.

    “Fantastic! It seems my plan worked. You have swallowed enough materialism for today.”- Karl said in a solemn tone, with his lips twisting into a smile, not mentioning a word about the passionate discussion he just had.

    Thus we decided to leave, slowly drifting away from all that art, passing multiple groups of snobs who expressed their excitement about one painting or another with voices too loud. But none of that reached me as I was preoccupied with sudden realizations that came naturally, like stream that flows without any effort.

    “You know…you’re right. Somehow after all this I feel that it doesn’t matter that the fish got away. The journey is more important than the destination as they say. And I can always go fishing some other day, since the sea is surely big enough to catch another fish if need be”- I slowly explained aloud, more to myself than to my two companions –“Oh and I’ll remember how slippery they are - the harder you squeeze, the faster they slip away”
    And all the reply I received was a light pat on my shoulder from Karl and words of wisdom from dear Friedrich.

    “Now all we need to do is wash all that down with alcohol! To the bar I say!” – Friedrich announced happily and received heated approval, accompanied by cheers, with a new destination now set for us three sea wolves.

    Thank you friends. Life is a bearable journey with you.
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    Default Re: [DUEL] algirdasu vs. Tigellinus - VOTE NOW

    I have voted on this majestic duel of Titans!

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    I'm scared, I just read Algirdasu's and I am having doubts about my ability to win this, Hey Shanks can I vote or not?




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    There's no rule from stopping you.
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    Default Re: [DUEL] algirdasu vs. Tigellinus - VOTE NOW

    or double posting...

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    I so want to use the wag finger emote.
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    Hm, two very different tales, I enjoyed both however.

    It was hard to choose in truth, although the writing of one what 'artful' I find the 'gory' tale equally enthralling.

    Bah.....I have chosen.


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    Not an easy choice with two very different approaches, despair and hope, hmm. Still, I have voted, in truth it was a close call and I could vote for either. Well done chaps for an excellent pair of tales.

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    Default Re: [DUEL] algirdasu vs. Tigellinus - VOTE NOW

    Thanks Ybbon!

    Oh and I was kidding before I'm not going to vote cause I want to win this by everyone ekses vote




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    Default Re: [DUEL] algirdasu vs. Tigellinus - VOTE NOW

    Um I have a question for you modders that can see the votes, has anyone apart from Bousto and Ybbon voted

    maybe a tie breaker?




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    Ah we cannot give away poll results until the voting period has ended.
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    Default Re: [DUEL] algirdasu vs. Tigellinus - VOTE NOW

    Quote Originally Posted by Shankbot de Bodemloze View Post
    Ah we cannot give away poll results until the voting period has ended.
    Haha I thought you might say that.




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    The smell of fear brought me here. Tigelinus, is it your fear I'm smelling? If you're worried, why don't you vote for your work to win? Heck..if you ask..I'll even give you my own vote as well
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    Quote Originally Posted by algirdasu View Post
    The smell of fear brought me here. Tigelinus, is it your fear I'm smelling? If you're worried, why don't you vote for your work to win? Heck..if you ask..I'll even give you my own vote as well
    I'm not that low to vote for my own piece of work, and I am definately not low enough to ask for YOUR help




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    Voted. My eyes hurt from the OP SHANKBOT!

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    I was wondering when someone would mention it.

    I tried going for something artistic.
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