The Thirteenth

Hey all!

This is a taster of a literary project I'm working on It is not in any way historically accurate or accurate from a religious point of view - the only thing it uses is the names of locations and characters which are all from Catholic sources.

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The steps of the three Archangels reverberated around the corridor as they approached the huge double doors to the Choral Chamber. The doors opened noiselessly and all 396 other Angels stood, for into their presence stepped the three wisest and most powerful Angels - Gabriel the left hand of God, Temeluchus the wise and respected elder of the choir and Michael who had singlehandedly crushed the Angelic rebellion over 10 millenia ago where fully half the Angels had split from the grace of god and gone to war, trying to rid themselves of their perceived slavery - Michael had stopped the rebellion in battle himself his spear singing in the ancient baroque halls of the Choir.
Today was a day of celebration for after 40 days and 40 nights of prayer the three leaders of the Choir had received word from the good lord, one final Angel was to be created bringing the numbers back to the 400 they had been 10 millenia ago, before the rebellion.
The Three stepped into the hall and as all eyes turned to them they went into the middle of the colossal room. Angels from all the 9 orders where there - Seraphim and Cherubim, the other 9 Archangels, the Thrones and the Principalities, the Powers and the Dominions, the Angels and finally the Ambassadors, the guardians of the Underworld the most respected of Angels after the Archangels - and they where buzzing they knew what was going to happen!

It was at that point I came to understand everything, I knew what was happening in the world and I had a consciousness. There was a severe bright light that was all I remembered of my birth into the world of the Angels, that and the welcome I received it was spectacular. I never understood then just what I meant to the other Angels, I always thought of myself as the youngest one of a brotherhood of 400 but to everyone else I was the completion of an order belonging ten millenia ago that I was never a part of at all.

The newest Angel stepped forward, stunned and shocked into silence by the rapturous applause he received. He had not been named and he didn't know who he was but he was reassured by the three smiling figures above him although there was something about their stares that penetrated deep to his soul.
"I am Temeluchus, I lead the Angels in the Choir. To my right is my brother Michael he is a warrior without peer and a noble and just companion and on my left is Gabriel the most noble of our kind, the messenger and the one above all Brother Gabriel is the purest in the service of God."
"Come with us", Gabriel motioned across the hall to an antechamber and preceded to head that way, flanked by the other two Archangels.

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What does everyone think? I am going to be writing a lot more on this as I do have a good 15 pages of notes and research on the topic im writing on + I'm speaking to my local vicar about Angels on Sunday.

I had thought this was going to cross over with my idea but it has a distinctly more grandiose perspective than my plans.

I like it, especially the image of the gathering of the angels. I cant wait to see how the character of God shapes up

Edit: - The symposium needs saving!

Yeah hurry up. Get writing.

Is this fictional 'God' character going to end up like a spoilt child as shown in rez' thread that was unfairly posted in the SYMPOSIVM so I couldn't post in it?

Well I had a clever plan for God.

What happens is that the Angels - although foremost amongst his creations never actually meet him, you will end up finding out that was what caused the last rift in the Angels, although like this it means that basically Michael and Temeluchus try an interpret God's will - does that sound like anyone on Earth to you?

Originally Posted by GrimSta

What happens is that the Angels - although foremost amongst his creations never actually meet him, you will end up finding out that was what caused the last rift in the Angels, although like this it means that basically Michael and Temeluchus try an interpret God's will - does that sound like anyone on Earth to you?

...nope

and don't give away the ending!

Crap!
Believe me or not I had a very similarly themed short story going on. I've been writing it in and out for about a week.... well, I won't post it here now or people will call it a hoax! :wink:

Just because you're scared Grim's is better

meh I wont care - unless it is better than mine then you should watch out Mr M

seriously, post it! the more writers and authors we have on TWC the better

Nah. If the theme was different I would post, I dislike p.i.s.sing contests. :wink:
Anyway, here is something I wrote and posted on Ana:
http://s11.invisionfree.com/Anagenne...showtopic=1084

tis a good story that

Yes!!! Finally after weeks and weeks I've found out what ana is!

In your faces everyone who refused to tell me! (therussian )

Thanks Manji!

Oh and sorry for going off-topic.

EDIT: It's a bit dull really... (ana, not your story)

I don't feel right logging on to Ana.

I thought it was an exclusive community for special old TWC guys. Can you post it here Manji?

Keep it coming Grimsta! i need my fix

Im working on the conclusion to that chapter as I write this.

but i need a fag first

sorry for the double post
This is designed to literally follow on from the previous part, its all part of the chapter. I'm going to write this bit at a time and publish it here then maybe send it off to a proper publishers :laughing:

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The youngest of the 400 followed.

Michael looked over to the new Angel, "Kneel young one, and offer your prayers to the mightiest of us - the unseen lord of each one of us", the young Angel knelt and offered his first prayer up to God, it was a prayer of hope and thanks expressed by more than just words for as the foremost amongst God's creatures they where also the greatest and most advanced.

He heard no response.

"Come, you are to learn your name the second greatest gift from the lord" said Temeluchus as he beckoned over towards the newest Angel. "What is the first?" responded the newcomer, "Why....your life",. and with that Temeluchus, Michael and Gabriel went through another door into yet another great hall.
"Beyond there is the holiest of all the many rooms of Heaven - The hall where God himself walked among us over 10 millenia ago - only a few of us remember him in person. Lucifer was counted amongst the greatest companions of God but you can talk to him later! For now you must go into the chapel and receive your name", and with that Temeluchus and the other two Archangels turned and went back into the antechamber.

The young Angel's steps reverberated around the hall as he reverently made his way to the chapel's double doors, the old wooden door creaked open slowly but noiselessly for it had been well cared for by the Angelic Choir. The room was as silent as the grave but it was not uncomfortable, although quiet you could sense, touch, feel, hear the memories of the chapel, the memories of the Angels, the memories of God.

The Angel headed over towards the alter in the middle of the chapel and knelt before it, closing his eyes he suddenly felt tired but the weight of his mind had been relieved, he felt as though he had no cares in the world that everything would be fine, he knew the secrets of the cosmos and the secrets of life but one word came to him amongst the myriad of thoughts

Phenex, I am Phenex

The revelation hit him like crossbow bolt, he knew who he was! He had his purpose now - to be Phenex the Angelic, Phenex the Angel and Phenex the Pure, and above all - Phenex the Free...

Here: http://www.twcenter.net/forums/showt...200#post979200

Keep it coming Grim :wink:

fantastico! Write more!