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    Default ToTW 121 - Did you see my bread?

    Did you see my bread?



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    Default Re: ToTW 121 - Did you see my bread?

    Wow. I love that quote.


    Invincible

    "Horus! Horus! Horus!" I heard them chant.
    "Horus! Horus! Horus!" I was ready.
    "Horus! Horus! Horus!" I clutched my shield, sheathed my sword.
    "Horus! Horus! Horus!" I put on my hawk-helm. I strode forward, exiting to the stadium, to their roars. I was the best.
    "Horuuuuuus!" They screamed with joy. I approached the center, nonchalant. I was the best.
    From behind me a monstrosity entered the stadium, a giant of a man, his deformed body had been scarred from countless battles, and to the gasps of astonishment of the audience, he was lead in by two soldiers who held chains to his neck.
    "Unleash the beast!" A cry came from the stadium.
    "Let the fools fight!" Who dared call me a fool? I was the best!
    The giant smiled and shattered the chains theatrically, much to the dismay of the soldiers, and they fled. "Pathetic", I thought to myself. I was the best.
    "Horus! Horus!" The crowd started chanting, I felt amazing. I grabbed my sword and began my sprint. I was the best.
    The beast slammed his foot forward, lunging at me and sending me airborne. How could this be?
    The crowd roared with joy; "Beast! Beast! Beast!" I was betrayed... I was their best!
    He approached me, his foot above my head. How could this be?
    My eyesight darkened, my chest narrow, I couldn't breathe...
    I'm the best, I can't go down. I tried to rise, but my body failed me...
    I was betrayed by my people,
    I was betrayed by my body...
    How is this possible?
    He slammed his foot down. I was the best...
    This is impossible...
    I'm invincible...


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    Default Re: ToTW 121 - Did you see my bread?

    My Teacher
    He spoke, patiently, like a parent to an insolent child, of wars and battles, anger, and violence. He spent, with abject pleasure, time to explain the intricacies of the body, the heart and lungs, the blood, and bones. He imparted, with practical demonstration, each crumb of knowledge, of beheadings and hangings, murders and treachery. He incited, with dark intent, a lust within my soul, the gold and fame, the power and pleasure. He took, with every sibilant word, my innocence from me, the morals and scruples, the honour, and conviction. He left, within my very being, a great hunger, for freedom and rights, for peace, and love. He spread, like a stain upon my mind, his pain and malice, confusion, and hurt.

    He brought me, at great cost, to the height of my career, to kill and save, to steal, and give. He is now, what he once was, yet I, I am the one who has changed, I am both victim and criminal and he is both judge, and juror. He is nothing, I am everything. I, the start, and he, the end. Like night and day, dark and light. Different, we are, yet the same, also. For I am life, and he, he is my teacher, death.
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    Default Re: ToTW 121 - Did you see my bread?

    The mirmillo
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    Cato smiled, basking in the cheering crowd, the deafening noise of the packed arena filled him with excitement and pride. He raised his crimson sword in salute and turned on the spot, had he not been wearing his mirmillo helmet the spectators could have seen the wide smile splitting his scarred face. He had defeated the Thraex and was alive and soon to be rich. It would be slaves of his own, piles of gold and villas by the sea from now on. He kept turning on the spot and ignoring the bloody mud at his feet , the gaul 's corpse had been dragged out of the pit a minute ago and all that remained of this brave fighter was a few lumpy blood pools on the sand pit. Mere stains on the canvas of glory in which Cato stood taking in the crowd's cheers like a lizard in the sunlight.
    He flexed his arms lowered his sword breathed heavily more out relief and fulfilment then exhaustion from the fight. Only now did he feel tired from the fight, he was high on success but knew his body would not take any more efforts he would make.
    Horns blew, barely audible under the chants in his glory. He turned to the imperial stands and bowed as the purple togaed man was now standing. He saw him speak rather than heard him and only moved when the arena guards came over to fetch him back. He know the promised reward was his now, no more fighting over bread crumbs or dried meat with the others, he would only have the good life now. That he deserved for all his training and years of constant struggle for survival.
    One of the guards escorting him back turned to speak to him:
    « Nice work Cato, can't wait to tell my boy I saw you beat Gallius today.... ». Cato
    smiled in fake modesty back.the second guard added
    « Yes wonderful...when do you plan on waking up? »
    Cato raised an eyebrow at that remark « Sorry? »
    «Well you did raise your hand but you're clearly not with us Jason....will you please, wake up and pay attention? » Said the teacher amidst a concert of laughter from his classmates.
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    All right, submission in. Good luck everybody!
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    Silence...
    Silence! Night had fallen long ago and everything was still, silent, nothing seemed to be alive in the middle of the forest. The hooded man knelt by the small wood pile and lit a small fire, trying to chase away the cold. He huddled close by it, his back against a large rock, trying to shield himself from the wind. He looked up, towards the full moon that sent beams of white light everywhere. Everywhere but where the man sat, as if trying to avoid him. The wind picked up, its howling resembling the howl of a hungry pack of wolves.

    The man hardly moved, trying to find some solace in the small, hope giving fire. He was tired, for he had ridden for five days without stopping, until his mount had died.

    Hopeless, tired and alone, the man fell in and out of counsciousness. He didn’t even feel the cold anymore.

    Why does the moon flicker? Silence... Why does it flicker? Ohh, I understand...where did you come from? I can remember the way your hair fell over your shoulders, if I close my eyes... Silence... I have no eyes to close nor open... I feel you...Your gold hair lights everything around us, but why do your eyes remain hidden? Silence... Answer me! I can’t hear you... I have no ears to hear, I can neither hear nor remain deaf to your pleas... I feel you, I feel your words, I feel your wicked smile... Silence... They hurt you know, your smiles hurt me, they hurt me more than I ever hurt you...But I can still remember...Do you see red? I have no eyes but I can FEEL it, do you understand? It is your blood, red hot, full of Life, full of Truth, simply Full. Everything could be and it was, yet I found you and stopped it all. Silence... What is that? That, growing in the center of my soul? Is it you? I can feel it growing larger, stronger but I... Aaargh! Nooo, not that! My color, my Life, my... Silence... The...the stain, it grows from within, it darkens my soul, it...CONSUMES me! YOU...I know it is you, stop hiding, show yourself... Hope... Yes, the prayer, I have to remember and recite the prayer but...I have no mouth to scream, to pray, to plead... Hope... I am the vessel of the Teacher, he welcomes his children by his side, he teaches and shows you the path... Silence... Nooo, he...he awaits, I...BEGOOONE, please let ... Thunder... You are but a spec in the Beyond, a grain of sand, nothing but a crumb, a small, insignificant part of the Whole...Nothing! Nothing! Nothin...! Noth...! No...! ...

    Morning came and everything was still, silent, nothing was alive in the middle of the forest.
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    First time I have done something like this! I am looking forward to more of these kinds of competitions.

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    It was early in the morning and I woke up having a Roman guard standing in front of me shouting, telling me to get dressed. Two Roman soldiers, both of them wearing the mark of SPQR on their shields, waited for me outside my cell. They were to escort me to the arena.

    There was an offensive stench in the air, a stench of corpses, blood and sweat. As we walked towards the arena the stench intensified. I walked through the huge entrance leading in to the arena, where so many people before me had walked. A gladiator teacher greeted me. He told me I should prepare for death as today I was facing the three of the emperor’s most skilled guards.

    I was lead to the armory by my gladiator teacher and I was given a shortened Gladius, a small sword with a handle consisting of leather. The Emperor was attending the gladiator fight and I was therefore doctored with a custom made helmet to appear less barbaric. The helmet had bloodstains on it from the previous user who faced the same death sentence I was facing now.

    The Roman soldiers I was about to fight saluted the emperor and were greeted with a cheering crowd. The moment I stepped in to the arena the crowd was throwing their food at me, booing. The senators were sitting in their chairs, eating their bread and greasy food, leaving the crumbs to their dogs.

    The announcer made a speech, saluted the emperor and then the game begun. The Roman soldiers were approaching me, the sun shining at their armor made by pure gold. They made a circle around me, surrounding me. The crowd went silent, waiting for someone to attack. The silence was ended by one single shout from the crowd and the Roman soldiers charged me. I threw my Gladius at the soldier in front of me, killing him instantly. I kicked the other Roman soldier in the chest and ran for the great sword laying on the ground. I hit one of the soldier’s shield with all my strength, breaking his arm and forcing him down to the ground. The soldier screamed in agony. There was only one Roman soldier left. He charged me, pushing me down to the ground. He swung his sword at me and made a cut in my right arm. I grabbed his ankle and pulled it, making him fall. He lost his breath and I picked up the shortened Gladius and held it to his neck. The Roman soldier was unarmed. If I have learned anything being a gladiator it is that valor and honor comes above all. I told him to pick his weapon up, but he would not do it. I turned around and as the crowd cheered The Roman soldier saw his chance and stabbed me once again. My hands felt numb and my body went cold. I dropped my sword. The crowd went silent. A gladiator’s death.

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    The love of a Father, and the love of a Son.

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    The love of a Father, and the love of a Son.


    You always have been and forever will be, my teacher, but why must things always come to this? You condem me for my convictions, yet you would equaly slay me in a instant if I did not stand behind and uphold my beliefs.

    Even though I would destroy and anihilate in an instant, anything that came against you, seemingly, in your eyes I am only fit for the wayword crumbs that cascade towards the ground from the chin of some ignoble, backward, peasant. No matter what I say, irrespective of relevance, you will not even consider giving me the mercy of acknoweldgement....."How can this be?"

    Gold nor jewels, nor treasures of the flesh do I seek. Soley the love of a father for a son, and the most meger of acknoweledgements of my own existance....

    Nay will I stain my tunic, with your blood nor mine this day. If it is not within your soul to be merciful... Then you shall forever be cursed with this bond that cannot be broken....


    The love of a Father and the love of a Son...




    Epiloque: There have been throughout the history of time many many instances where fathers and sons were estranged because of misdeeds intertwined with misunderstandings. Seemingly, and far too often, not until the end of their lives do they choose to let go of their petty differences. Sadly when this occurs their only recourse is to seek forgiveness and reunion in the great beyond.
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    A Heroic tale of love and a Modern Gladiator but mostly about the Gladiator

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    "Death or Glory!" I shouted.
    "Whatever kid" was his simple reply. Then he punched me straight in the gut.

    Freddy Crumb was my foe today; he was three years my senior and resembled his fifty-five year old dad, even down to the beard. I on the other hand was a small geeky kid who liked history and math but mainly history: Roman history to be exact. So it shouldn't be a surprise that I now find myself being hauled from the ground and flying across the hallway like a rag doll. So far so good I thought let him tire himself...then I'll finish him off with a knee to the crotch - just like in the movies.


    "Fight back!" shouted the growing crowd of students. Even the teachers were there watching and laughing. The American education system at its finest!


    "Fight back!" they repeated. Fools, I was fighting back, just not very well.


    And as I struck the concrete wall with my head first, my mind seems to lapse out of conscientiousness, then I saw sand, bright golden sand. And women. I guess this was heaven; no it couldn't be, for there was blood everywhere. Then I saw them, books and films did them no credit, their blood stained armor and bulging biceps were truly awe inspiring and kind of depressing when compared to myself. Nevertheless, the Gladiators looked amazing even in my semi-blurry state of vision. Yes, this was heaven alright, a historian's heaven that is!


    "This is wonderful" I said

    "No, you’re getting beaten boy" said someone.

    I turned around to see a Roman man sit beside me

    "Your ancestors fought like warriors and you’re letting yourself be beaten while you sleep! Show your Roman heritage and win that fight!" said the phantom
    "But I'm Chinese" I replied
    "Use your -" said the flickering image. Everything around me was flickering; light was rushing in and out. The voices of students and teachers were beginning to filter in.
    "Wait, I want to meet the Gladiators"

    Then I woke up. Disappointed and in terrible pain, I saw the smiling face of Freddie as he kicked away at my curled up body. What the Roman guy said was true! I needed to show my inner Gladiator and beat this guy. So I leaped into action, and struck him in the chest. He then struck me back to the ground, but I stood up and closed my eyes and attacked. My limbs flailed everywhere. And then it was over. Freddy lay on the ground with his hands to his crotch. And I stood alone within the ring of onlookers, bloodied and hurt.

    "I am a Gladiator!" I said. Then everyone left...
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