Re: Having Trouble Getting Attention with new AAR
First of all, let me applaud you for looking for feedback here! I always appreciate the work of those who want to improve their writing.
I think MIDN Mainolfi picked on an important point about the story depth/pace, so I won't comment on that further. Let me just add a few other general observations.
- It takes some time for most AARs to develop an audience. Even some of the most successful writers here weren't that successful in their first attempt. At first everybody is just a random guy, so give it time. If you update regularly and keep people informed about your project, they will see that your story is alive and come back to it. Also, many people read who never comment.
- If you have a campaign that is not unexpected, exotic etc., try to develop a plot which makes it interesting. Family infight, rebellious generals, perspective of the common man, an interesting diplomat/spy/assassin etc can give you plenty to work on within the game limits. You can also temporarily take your campaign to an unexpected direction, fighting an enemy nobody could expect. In other words, you can spice it up without a major revision. A general can react to a failed marriage in Rome by taking his army and go against somebody in Africa or Northern Europe. Or anything else. Just give your characters a personality based on ancillaries, traits or just what you think about them. People like to identify with story characters.
- Create conflict and suspense. If an AAR is just a series of victories, people will appreciate the campaign but not so much the narrative. Most people can beat the AI, it's no big deal. Lose a few battles, and suddenly the campaign gets interesting. I'm not saying you should lose on purpose, just don't always overpower the AI. It also gives your characters interesting personalities. Once I lost a general in a battle I won. His son came of age next turn, and I developed him to revenge his father as a rogue general. He lost his first battle as a youngster (hardly escaped), then over time he looked for his father's killer, eventually revenged him (even if that battle was not in my campaign plan), and on the way back he was ambushed and killed too. It made a good story.
- Consider submitting your AAR to MAARC or a battle from it to BAARC. Even if you don't win, it will give your work publicity.
- Finally, read a lot of other AARs. See how other writers do it. Leave comments there. Chances are that many of them will read yours and leave comments.
Hope this helps.
Good luck!