Im not sure if this is the place to post this, but lacking any other audience, i need some feedback concerning

an essay i had to write for ENC1101. I'm pretty satisfied wiht what i have so far, but am having trouble constructing

it using the MLA format. Also the book quotes have as yet to be imbedded into the essay, and will probably be considerably shortened.

We need to go farther than the historical evidence behind the capitalistic ideal of the free world market and add to it a perspective on basic human nature. Sociologically the argument could be made that riches are not merely a market effect but also a phenomenon that is often interpretated in terms of status or power.
Here i will have to quote thompson as explaining politics as an extreme trip, a kind of power high that is as intoxicating as anything that is smoked or injected in houses of very, very ill repute. This is because the game of politics is power. Power has its own aura, that tends to dim down other unimportant things like ethics, justice, or right, all very fine things but ultimately in great part divorced from actual human experience. The glow of possibilities and sheer power blinds us to our conscience and pierces the thin walls of 'decency'. In a society driven to consume, money has that same alluring aura. We no longer buy to sustain and endure, but to improve and make comfortable. Luxury items are commonplace. Big gas-guzzling monsters roam the streets like stylishly designed gleaming black behemoths. Smaller shapes, bullets on wheels, predators zooming among the SUVs and sedans and pickuptrucks, middle aged men with sunglasses driving, listening to the beatles.

Money has long since ceased to be a factor of pure survival and has become even more necessary as a result: Now money is also the driving force in the hierarchical structure of society. Since the capital is always flowing, the nature of capitalism, it means money is constantly being injected into the economy, nowadays by means so uncomprehensible that a dabbler can perhaps make sense of some the jargon, but not even start to comprehend the ramifications and effects.


"God bless you Mr.Rosewater"-Kurt Vonnegut Jr

"-You mean shame about not knowing where the Money River is?
-The what?
-The Money River, where the wealth of the nation flows. We were born on the banks of it-and so were most of the people we grew up with,
went to private schools with, sailed and played tennis with. We can slurp from that mighty river to our heart's content. And we can even take
slurping lessons, so we can slurp more efficiently.
-Slurping lessons?
-From lawyers! From tax consultants! from customers' men! We're born close enough to the river to drown ourselves and the next ten generations
in wealth, simply using dippers and buckets. But we still hire the experts to teach us the use of aqueducts, damns, reservoirs, siphons,
bucket brigades, and the Archimedes' Screw. And our teachers in turn become rich, and their children buyers of slurping lessons."
-I wasn't aware that i slurped
-Born slurpers never are. And they can't imagine what the poor people are talking about when they say they hear somebody slurping. They don't
even know what it means when somebody mentions the Money River. when one of us claims that there is no such thing as the Money River i think
to myself:"My gosh, but that's a dishonest and tasteless thing to say"



If we compare capital to a flowing river, this means most people have a relatively
easy access to at least a foothold on the riverside to drink. The problem is that there are a thousand kneeling down in the mud drinking water from the shore
for every man suntanning in a yacht in the middle of the river. This is very much due to a social event called 'social reproduction', a concept developped
By sociologist Pierre Bourdieu, which is so vast only a brief, synthetized version can be used: Basically an individual will, in terms of riches, education,his place of residence, bref, his entire social environment (an array of factors that is gigantic since it must borrow from every humanistic science in order to create a valid argument) in most cases be a reflection or an obvious product of his parent's own social system. In other words, poor people tend to raise poor people, and the rich tend to raise rich ones. His studies have shown that success stories from the demographic considered under the universal minimum wealth bar were few and far between when considering the sheer numbers of other poor who remain so. It was also rare for a child raised by rich parents, who attended school and eventually higher studies to somehow lose his social status or monetary power.
In today's society, it is therefore only fitting that the display of wealth is a greatly important symbol of power. Romantically, power/money has been extensively argued on an obscure internet site to represent some 50% of the interest from the opposite sex(http://www.intellectualwhores.com/masterladder.html, though the arguments sound like they come from a very bitter man.) . If this had even a shred of truth, which i believe it does, when you dig deep, it is reason enough for any male to connect the dots and decide to leave asside the chancy risk of being found un-ellegible by the majority of the female sex.
As an intimidation factor always a plus in such a competitive society as the american one, money also works wonders. People are leery of getting messy with big money, as they know the repercussions should they fail (this is somewhat offset by the fiendish american tradition of suing anyone,whenever possible, especially if a big wad of cash is involved. This is turn makes big money hesitant to make overt signs of hostility towards individuals).
And then the whole Creosote thing has been around since humans started thinking that perhaps killing each other constantly might be counter-productive. History is riddled with examples of sickeningly rich men, who made a point of displaying their power for the world to see. This has been moderated by a stronger middle-class than ever before, but it still doesn't offset the wild excesses of the top tier. It is also a part of the American Dream. The whole of american society could be said to be striving for a spot in that powerfull elite.


"God Bless You Mr.Rosewater"-Kurt Vonnegut Jr:

"When the United States, which was meant to be a Utopia for all, was less than a century old, Noah Rosewater and a few like him demonstrated the folly of the Founding Fathers in one respect: those sadly recent ancestors had not made it the law of the Utopia that the wealth of each citizen should be limited. This oversight was engendered by a weak-kneed sympathy for those who loved expensive things, and by the feeling that the continent was so vast and valuable, and the population so thin and enterprising, that no thief, no matter how fast he stole, could more than midly inconvenience anyone. Noah and a few like him perceived that the continent was in fact finite, and that venal office-holders, legislators in particular, could be persuaded to toss up great hunks of it for grabs, and to toss them in such a way as to have the land where Noah and his kind were standing. Thus did a handfull of rapacious citizens come to control all that was worth controlling in America. Thus was the savage and stupid and entirely innapropriate and unecessary humorless American Class system created. Honest, industrious peacefull citizens were classed as bloodsuckers, if they asked to be paid a living wage. And they saw that praise was reserved henceforth for those who devised means of getting paid enormously for commiting crimes against which no laws had been passed. Thus the American dream turned belly up, turned green bobbed to the scummy surfacee of cupidity unlimited, filled with gas, went bang in the noonday sun. E pluribus unum is surely an ironic motto
to inscribe on the currency of this utopia gone bust, for every grotesquely rich american represents property, privileges, and pleasures that have been denied the many. An even more instructive motto, in the light of history made by the Noah Rosewaters, might be: Grab too much, or you'll get nothing at all"

P.S: This is also meant to launch a debated based on the subject, so i can syphon all your interesting ideas for my own profit....
bwahahahaha.