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    A Gallic Mistake, corrected by Roman Arms

    It’s the year 240 BC. After gloriously defeating the Greeks, the 2nd Legion returns for a well deserved period of rest and retraining in Rome. These men have become hardy soldiers in all the years of their lives they have spent in Greece, fighting for the glory of the Empire. After a few years have past, they start to long for blood, eager to serve again on the expanding frontiers of the Empire. The emperor is glad to have such faithful servants. Immediately they are prepared and re-armed for a campaign. This time they will conquer the rich regions of Cisalpine-Gaul. The Gauls are easily killed, and their cities belong now to Rome. Civilisation and wealth will flow to these new regions of the Empire. Because the Gauls are still fighting at the borders, some cities are given large garrisons and a few forts are built to protect the western passes through the Alps. A new legion is recruited from the Italian cities; its task will be to defend the borders.

    Gaius Valerius Messalla had never thought he would serve in a legion of the mighty Roman army. Until then he had just lived peacefully in Ancona, but now he would be part of the glorious 3rd Legion, that would defend the North-Italian borders. His Cohort was sent to a fort protecting the pass leading towards Massilla, which was just conquered by the Gauls. It wasn’t expected to come into danger, because armies of their foes hadn’t been seen for ages. For a year, they just trained, watched the region and had a good life. Gaius hoped it would stay so.

    But it wasn’t so beautiful like that. Totally unexpected, a great army of Gauls stood before the gates of the fort, which could be closed just in time. One of their best cavaliers was sent out to get help from another fort, but it was far away. They hoped they would be able to survive until the reinforcements would arrive. After a few months, the war-horns of the Gauls threw their terrible cries into the air. Three rams stormed the fort’s walls, and quickly the troops deployed to their positions. Gaius, together with the most of the infantry, was placed before the gate. At their sides the enemy put down the walls, and flew over the ramparts like waves. But then horns cried! The reinforcements would arrive in a few minutes, through the other gate that was still in Roman hands. The enemy’s that were attacking the gates flew in terror, but then the troops were flanked at both sides. The Gauls that came through the walls were attacking them. One moment, Gaius thought they would loose this battle, but then a horn sounded. The Italic Cavalry came storming into the enemy. Oblivious to the rest of the world, they fled away, together with the others that had seen the reinforcements coming. The gateway was red of blood, and all hurried through it, killing the fleeing enemies. Scorpions shot the enemy general, fleeing away, after which most of the Gauls were killed. A Glorious victory was made real by Roman arms, which had beaten these Gallic fools.

    After this glorious victory, the 4th (Italian) Legion marched through the Alps, led by praefect Gaius Valerius Messalla. He conquered great parts of Gaul, but forever held in mind this great day of his life.


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    Dear people,

    This is my very first AAR. I'd like you to give comments on the story, so that I can learn from it.
    Further, I would like to thank you for reading it!

    P.s. It was made with the help of RTR Platinum 1.9 Ex.RM

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    Thes style of writing is nice , and it's a good favourite topic - Rome vs. Gaul. I like the title too, v. original, but it's a shame about the pic - can't it be any bigger?
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    Thank you very much! The picture can be solved

    Any idea for a new subject?? (which faction(s), region, situation)

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    This was a great start (+rep for your first AAR), I hope you continue!



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    For I'm not as experienced as some of you are in these things, it's my plan to make a few short stories first, and then continue making a larger AAR. I'll keep updating this or maybe another threat to let you people know what I'm working on.

    P.s. Thank you for all nice reactions!

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    An update, in order to introduce my main characters to you:


    4 years later, making a swift career

    236 BC. Four years after the battle, we come back to Gaius Valerius Messalla. He has done well, and made a swift career in the army. He marched into Gaul with Flavius Maximus, commander of the 2nd Legion, and after showing great leading qualities in a battle that had nearly become a disaster was made Centurion. Now, after years of conquering the Alphs, he’s been made Tribunus Militum, or ‘tribune of the soldiers’ and got some cohorts plus the order to throw the Gauls out of Massilla.

    It’s a cold spring evening. Gaius is sitting in his tent, warming his cold hands by the fire. He thinks about the great responsibility he carries. The lifes of all four cohorts, the fort and the task to conquer Massilla, it all lies in his hands. For one moment he shivers. At that moment his secundus, Quintus, comes in. ‘So’, he sais, ‘it’s nice warm inhere! Would you mind me come and sit next to you at the fire?’ Gaius made place, and invited him for dinner. Eager to know what plans he had made up, Quintus asked all possible things about the comming campaign and by that comforted Gaius a bit.

    'Gaius'

    'Quintus'


    For a time they enjoyed their meal, consisting of a loaf of bread, some good wine and a delicious part of gold-roasted rabbit, which Quintus had shot that afternoon. After they had filled their bellies, they sat back with their feet pointed towards the fire. ‘Have you thought about feeding all those men?’ Gaius exclaimed. ‘How can we ever be able to find food in these desolate lands? I won’t be able to do this, Quintus. I’m not the great leader everyone believes me to be…’ Quintus stood up, saying: ‘That’s the greatest nonsense I’ve ever heard. Who lead the men to victory, capturing the village? Who was it that came up with the idea of walking around the enemy to flank them? Not me! It was you, and when you don’t stop brawling such talks, I’ll punish you like the first best recruit!’ A smile came on Gaius’ face. ‘Like this I know you, Quintus. Thank you for getting me out of my hopeless thoughts.' ‘Now,' he said with a stronger voice, taking a map of the surroundings of Massilla, ‘You and a group of Principes and Italic Cavalry will fight on the left flank. While I and the main army try to take the gates with ladders, you’ll do the same with the left wall. When you take out the enemies on the walls and the towers, we can quickly march into the town and capture the place’. Quintus nodded. ‘Good plan. When will we go?’ ‘Next morning’, answered Quintus, ‘Make the men ready.’ With a ‘Yes, sir!’ Quintus walked away.

    The next morning the troops broke down the fort, and started the march to Massilla.

    In a next update I’ll handle the march to Massilla and the battle to capture it.
    Last edited by Maurits; May 07, 2009 at 09:24 AM.

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    A few grammatical errors:
    ‘Like this I know you, Quintus. Thank you for getting me out of my hopeless thoughts.
    A quote is needed after the "thoughts."
    ‘Now’,
    Comma should be inside the quote.
    Other than these and a few other very minor details, good update. We get a better feel for the characters (the depression of Gaius, for example) and a good general background
    Last edited by Julius Barca the Great; May 07, 2009 at 04:01 PM.
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    Thank you for looking at these things, I hope it won't happen in the next updates.

    p.s. I think 'god' should be good

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    You're welcome! Maybe I thought your work was godly? lol, yeah, my bad. I'll fix it now!
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