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    Default [M2TW BR] Rise or Fall

    This is my new AAR, it is based on the battle of bannockburn and another battle that will be disclosed later. I really hope you like it and please comment






    "Daddy! Daddy! tell me the story again!." Catherine asked George, tired from his days work.
    "Maybe sometime later, daddies very tired."
    "Bu........waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa" Candy started balling, crying and kicking and screaming. This had gathered the attention of Abbigale, who had been sleeping, tired as much as George from her work.
    "Just tell her the story." She said, pushing her pillow up against her ear to try to sleep.
    "Okay, okay, i will tell you the story, but only if you go to sleep right after, okay?" Catherine immediatly stopped crying and sat next to George and just smiled.
    "It was midsummer in the year 1314............


    Edward had taken a troop of horsemen to the countryland surrounding Stirling castle, his brother had made a deal four years earlier that he would stop besieging it as long as they gave it to them in four years if no army came to fortify it. Edward believed it as a stupid deal to make, but he needed the English king to feel affended should his plan work. He found his hiding place he had been using to scout out the area for two year now, hard to believe that they had gotten this far against the English in this short of time, but he needed them to send their army here to fight him.



    He looked out into the forests below him and saw what appeared to be a forward camp, he took note of this and told his cartographer to make a map of the land. The cartographer finished in about an hour and showed his maps to Edward.







    He's been getting better at this Edward thought as he looked at them, he was about to tell his men to return home when he heard the sound of battle music, he looked back towards the camp and saw a huge army coming towards it.



    "They have come" He muttered to himself, he recollected himself and ordered his men to go back home and...............

    "Catherine? You awake?" George asked, after a moment he picked her up and tucked her in bed, the story always puts her to sleep. He looked at the clock and thought to himself, dear god, its been a hour. He got into bed but couldn't sleep because Abbigale was snoring.

    How you like it? please tell, also, my next updates will be larger than this but i wanted a setup update
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    Default Re: Rise or Fall

    It is nice, a fresh new style TrueGreek!

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    Default Re: Rise or Fall

    you need to add one "Good but not the best" cause the other one seems too condisending cause this looks good so far
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    Default Re: Rise or Fall

    i noticed that myself.........

    sorry for the lack of updates, been at my dads

    can you please tell me if there is anything i can improve on? this is a test aar so to speak and if there is anyway i can improve myself it would be nice to know
    Last edited by TheTrueGreek; September 14, 2008 at 05:08 PM.
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