Ccllnply World (The Unpronouncible Realm)

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I wasn't too sure where to put this so I'll put it here and hope a mod moves it if its in the wrong place.

So basically this is about a fantasy world that I'll try to tell a story about. It will sound a lot like Lord of the Rings but thats what I get for watching it 600 times. Anyway I'll start off small

Prologue:

In the days of creation Oralis, Ruler of All, sculpted the Earth. In it he placed large mountains, fresh and clean rivers, massive oceans and forests of great and powerful trees. He looked down on what he created and saw that it was empty and silent. So he gave the light of the heavens to the Earth. Then on the final day of creation he began to create life. Althought, at first, the life he create left something to be desired, Oralis never gave up. Nor did he destroy life. He believed that all deserve life, no matter what problems they cause. Oralis could look on the Earth and be satisfited with what he had done. But the greater the work the more problems it will cause. Houdar, Oralis' eldest son, also saw what his father had created but he was not as happy with the result. He could not see anything on this planet based on himself. Although he agrued with his father, Oralis would not create something that belonged to Houdar. Oralis had always seen Houdar as selfish and if he gave Houdar that kind of power he would no doubt abuse it.

So Houdar, knowing that in heaven he could never match his fathers power, waited quietly for his chance. And as the paradise that Oralis had created began to slip into chaos, Houdar saw his chance to strike. In 152 A.C(After Creation) Houdar entered the Earth in mortal form. His followers? The first life that Oralis had created had been rejected by the "perfects" as they callee themselves. After years of breeding they changed to their harsh condition until they became more beast instead of beings. Larger and stronger then men, elves or gnomes they could kill with their bare hands. Most called them orks. but they lacked inteligents and thats how Houdar recruited them. Now he will start the first war that this world will ever see. A religous war.The followers of Oralis against the followers of Houdar.

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The First Day of Desention:
As Houdar walked though the dark, wet caves of Mount Uhlar he noticed a foul smell coming from the back. Unfortunatly he had to walk to his smell as he was meeting with the Orc Leader, Ukgar. He and his company, could hear the beating of the Orc drums. The sound was the only thing that guided them, for the darkness did not break. Houdar, although a God, could not believe how something once completly mortal, could live in such a place. The walls of the cave were covered in some sort of slime. The ceiling dripped hard water. And although they could not see it something was moving around their feet. Just then they saw a glimmer of light, which for once in his life Houdar was greatful to see. They had final reached the Orc cave.

His company were scared to go any further. Houdar walked straight in the Orcs, he had nothing to fear, they were only living. With all in the room looking at him, even his company, who were still hiding at the enterence, Houdar climbed the steps of the thorne and stood in front of Ukgar.

-"Who this be that wish to die?" An Orc shouted

-"I am Houdar, Lord of the Heavens! Your leader knows me."

Although the Orc leader had never seen him before, he had a small feeling that he had met him.

-"Lord of the Heavens? That is an enormous title you've given yourself" Ukgar seemed to be asking him to explain himself

Houdar could see why Ukgar was the leader. He was clearly more intellegent then the rest.

-"Yes, it is an enormous title and it is true!"

Houdar then took off his belt and seemed to give his sword to Ukgar



-"This is the Sword of Og Lindil the greatest Metalsmith in heaven, it can slain giants and kill armies of thousands single-handedly"

-"Army? What is this? And what is this tool you bring for?" Asked Ukgar.

-"You will see, because that is where I need you. Come let us deal"


Houdar and Ukgar talked all night and when the Sun rose it did not shine on the Mountains of Uhlar

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