The Great Plaines: an apachean AAR

[Skyler]

This is an AAR of the Apachean people. While I know Fuzz already wrote an exellent one about them, I was writing this AAR anyway for my personal use (I always wanted to that) and thought I might as well throw it on the site.

The game is on vh/vh with ''no adoption'' rules.


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The date is 1521 and this is the tale of the Apachean people under the wise leadership of Chief Alosaka, a noble man, who seek to bring his people a strong and united great plains where the Apachean nation can flourish and prosper. His rule is strengthened by his son Helaku, a brave young warrior who has been given the task to subjugate the western part of the plains, it is a move that could bring down this fledgling empire for Helaku’s loyalty is, to say the least, certain…


1521

Whilst sitting in the shade of his favourite old tree, Chief Alosaka the Great warrior pondered at the choices he had made in the past and reminisces days of glory and honour long past.
His worries were aplenty but none of these worries troubled him more than his vivid dreams of strange white men riding strange creatures of ancient familiarity. For the power these white skins possessed, could conquer all.

However, these dreams did not come sudden; for they troubled him longer then he cared to remember. He looked into the distance and saw a blurred figure making great haste towards the large Apache encampment and although he knew it could be any one of his people he jumped on his feet and ran towards the menacing individual. As he got closer his breathing began to climb, before him defiantly ran an Apachean warrior. 50 meters…. 40 meters…..30…. 20…..10 . The Chief came to a halt when he recognized the man as the scout who was sent away two years prior to the south, home of the savage slave traders known as Aztecs, to discover if the dreams were valid.
The man spoke only a few words as he gazed at the mighty Chief, he said ‘’It… it is true, those men are ...’’
The Chief stood there for awhile until he noticed something about his hands. He held his hands in front of him and saw his hands shake…. His hands never shook!

Meanwhile, to the west stood another troubled man, overseeing his men’s movement across the Plains Helaku, the chief’s son, thought about what his wife, Makawee of Pitic said to him earlier. ’’I cannot… I cannot betray my father. Not now, not when he needs me the most.’’ He quietly spoke.
His wife spoke of betrayal to a man of pure thought and it is in this man that the seeds of corruption now reside. Time will tell if those seeds will be fertilized.


Later that day the Chief assembled the elders and told them about what the scout said and the elders spoke words of wisdom and knowledge upon the Chief, telling him that uniting the Great Plains would be key to their survival, for the demons, as powerful as they are, could not hope to stand against the scorching heat of the burning sun on plains as inhospitable as these. The Chief agreed and sent word to his son to the west, to make haste in conquering the west. Whilst he sent an army to the east, the War Chief amassed another which he would lead personally to conquer Chihuahua and went off…..

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[Kiki52]

I guess everyone really likes the Apaches. I am looking forward to it, especially since there is more dialog and talking. It seems more like a story. Maybe you can make it a story of archetypes.

If Spain or France is coming and destroying you, give it some drama. Maybe you can tell how horrible it is to see them massacring innocent Native American men, women, and children who want nothing but to live in peace, and then there are some good Spanish/French citizens who secretly help you (the Apaches) to survive and see how evil and horrible they are (Spanish/English/France). It would really bring tears to people's eyes and show many people here that the Native Americans truely were a people oppressed by colonialists.

Also, if you decide to do occupy a city rather than exterminate it, you can tell about how merciful the Apaches are and compare them to other events in the past within your AAR.

You can also make use of imagery, also very effective. Like when you are battling the Spanish or English, you can make your forces like in the movies. The clouds will be dark overhead, but upon your army the light shines and sunrays cast down upon your army while upon the enemy the clouds above them are dark and their faces grim and sinister. Then a final charge as the forces of good and evil clash. While the pictures of ingame using FRAPS doesn't show that, you can use your imagination.

Just some suggestions for good AAR story writing. You could win an Oscar then don't you think