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I see. What you say about how the characters got there makes sense, just remember your readers are trying to understand this too. I'm not sure what alternative word to use for the 'movable...
I really liked it. I think your grasp on the English language is excellent and this piece reads as if English is your first language. I also got some Lovecraftian vibes from your prose, I think this...
Voted. Good luck fellow writers.
Hello, it's been awhile. Here's my submission for Tale of the Week 294 - Word Count 274.
Patrick ground his teeth. Every splash of his paddle burned his knuckles cold. He shivered. River mist...
Thanks, glad you enjoyed it :)
No way! I always thought that 'oooooh, oh, oh, oooooh,' sound was a singer, lol.
Here's a great James Bond themed music video...
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Congratulations! Well done everyone :thumbsup2
Nice, that was very interesting. I've never seen that instrument before.
Epic video...
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Thanks Alwyn, glad you enjoyed it.
Wow, that is one hell of an instrument. A nice blend of raw engineering and music.
This is great! The video made me go...
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Diocle - Nice, I like this one a lot. If I had not seen the video I would have thought there were at least two harps playing. She's very good. I bet she's deadly in a thumb war too.
Dreamy...
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Ferdiad - Cool, I have heard this song before but not seen the video. Simple but great!
I like this song. I think the 2001 Space Odyssey footage goes well with the music, though the music...
Hah, well done Alexander.
Should have devoted some time to swimming lessons.
Note: This story was originally intended for ToTW 286 but it was too long to meet the word count.
Memories beside the Fountain of Life
Asger’s chest heaved as his grey hair hung lank...
Oh great, I'm looking forward to this. A few months ago I was reading up on the Diadochi Wars. Does this campaign include Alexander's generals in his army? I look forward to seeing your battles...
I don't have Patreon experience but I am on the verge of self-publishing my first book on Amazon. Finding an income to support further writing would be great. Excluding this forum, I have no audience...
Congrats on the win! Well done Kilo for getting into the tie break too.
Comments on the structure would be great, thanks! I do appreciate you spending your free time on my writing.
Hey San Felipe, here's my reply...
Yeah, I agree. There is something about the word 'as' that I find dislikeable. I don't know why. I feel the same about sentences that have too many words...
Apparently its been just over a week since you posted your critique. Sorry for my snail-paced response.
No problem. I like your comments you mentioned about pacing (style) in my Stalker story...
Wow, a double whammy of critique! :thumbsup2
Many thanks to you both for taking the time to read my story and write down your thoughts. I will reply in a couple of days once I've had time to...
What about a film called Ironclad?
Great finishing post and I enjoyed your closing thoughts. Is it possible to keep playing after the end turn? I quite like the idea of playing a long game myself because those rebel stacks looked like...
Ah yes, I see what you mean. The new version has very different pacing. Now you've pointed it out, I do like the original pace; the rewrite speeds into the story much faster. But there is something I...
That is very interesting to know, thanks for the thoughts.
Once the story has flushed out my mind I will return to it and re-read with fresh eyes and compare the two pieces. I feel I have found a...
Many thanks for taking the time to read my rewrite and share your thoughts.
I've learned a lot from participating in the TotW here. With those stories I have been forced to make brutal edits in...
That's great. Looking forward to it. I will be rewriting my S.T.A.L.K.K.E.R story as well as this Starship Trooper story soon; using the improved prose techniques I have learned from participating in...
Here is my entry for the creepy season. 489 Words.
Misandry
“Shh." Detective Kelly jabbed his finger to his lips. His eyes transfixed upon the basement's doorknob.
“What do you hear?”...
Really seems fine to me. So long as the key info in Morn's dialogue is clear and understandable, the accent won't obstruct and break immersion.
A thought - you could always use Matt's reactions...
Nice. Enjoying your story. Don't leave us on a cliffhanger for too long!
Hey Kilo, sure any feedback would be great, thanks for the offer. I hope you feel better soon (maybe llamas will rescue you?)
I am itching to write another one of these short stories but I am...
Congratulations Big War Bird! An excellent win :thumbsup2
Nice, the horde is hungry! You have about half the map already.
I like the historical tidbits that pop-up in this game. I seem to remember one that details a group of pilgrim children who get...
That's great, you have instinctive writing skills. A word wizard :)
Yes, I can relate to that. My favourite part of writing is when I return to a draft to polish it up and make it sound nice....
Great article Alwyn, thanks for taking the time to create it.
Many thanks for the votes. This was a fun story write.
@NorseThing - I got the potato idea from SilentKiller's intro to the competition, 'Space is dangerous --asteroid belts, space pirates, large...