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    Quite happy with myself; nearly breaking the 100,000 word point. We're on 99,361 words, and I'm just about to start writing Chapter Thirty!




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    Quote Originally Posted by Tigellinus View Post
    Quite happy with myself; nearly breaking the 100,000 word point. We're on 99,361 words, and I'm just about to start writing Chapter Thirty!
    Great, so judging by "standard practice" you have now reached 400 pages.

    Standard practice is when a book has approximately 250 words per page, which is what most books have.
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    Thirty-Six Chapters.

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    Eleusis - Chapter Sixteen
    Eleusis
    Chapter Sixteen



    The stench of burning bodies filled my nostrils. A mountain of corpses and devastated limbs looked at me, watching me with cruel anticipation for when I would join it. I touched my arm, and my hand came away red with blood. Are they still after us?

    From above me, hell rained. The sky was streaked with red and smoke. The resistance had broken hours ago. The defense had been torn apart by the enemy’s bombardments. The attack had been swift. Ruthless. Indiscriminate. More civilians died than soldiers, and when the troops had finally landed, they didn’t care if they bombed them too.

    Kaldratos. I have to find Kaldratos. That was what father said. That was what he told me to do. Where is he? I’d been separated from my brother at the Headquarters. Father sent us t different locations, just in case a precision strike took any one of our positions out. The House of Vixiua would live on, even if only one of us lived.

    I had been taken away to some remote outpost in the mountains, surrounded by a forest. My betrothed, Lady Lelliana Octarna, had accompanied me, as was befitting. Her face none of the fear that dwelled within me, nothing that hinted at even the slightest bit of premonition or dread.

    The outpost had been invaded by a battalion of soldiers, but what House they served I honestly had no idea. As far as I knew, there was no Armada or Fleet within the Imperium that could have possibly orchestrated something like this.

    But, there was no other option.

    “Come on!” Lelliana grabbed me forcefully and pulled me along, past the pile of bodies and the burning buildings. This area hadn’t been bombarded from orbit. No. This work was the doing of those animals that descended on my home. The ones that come here just to kill.

    “Where are we going?” I asked her, my voice weak. A quiver of dread shot through me as I thought of us encountering those mad dogs that had done this.

    Lelliana didn’t answer me directly, instead she pulled me along, and then randomly ducked down whenever she believed she had heard or sensed something. Her pulseblade was gripped tightly in her hand. What good will it do us against trained soldiers? Look at what they’ve done!

    I tried to tell her this, but she shot me an angry look.

    “This is our home!” she snarls at me, “I will not let it fall. Not without trying to fight. My mother and father wouldn’t be running from the enemy, and neither would yours. It is our duty, as the children of our parents, to fight too! As Nobles should.” Her words were strong. But I gulped down my retort. We saw your parents get killed three hours ago. My father was captured when they died, Lelliana. But maybe her mind had just blocked it out. Whatever the case, I needed her now.

    “It’s safe, let’s go.” She rushes from the hiding spot, still holding on to my hand as she nimbly makes her way across the burning town. It’s as if she doesn’t care that so many people are dead. Or that this battle is already lost.

    We cut through the burning ruins of the town and into the forest again. My feet squish in the mud, and a sharp log cuts against my leg. I don’t complain. We run, faster and faster. We’ve been running for hours, ever since the outpost fell and our guards sent us into the woods. No protection. No escort. Not even a single Knight! It was insanity. Did nobody but me realise that we were royally ed?

    Nobody ever listens to the one who’s always right.

    I hear a rustle, and Lelliana stops. She shoves me against a tree, her pulseblade in her hand, she thumbs over the activator. All she has to do is think, and blade of death will appear from the ornate and beautiful hilt.

    She dives, taking me tumbling down with her as a flurry of plasma bolts shoot into the tree beside us. She rolls, and comes up, pulseblade in her fingers. We’re gonna die! We’re gonna die! I put my head in my hands, I feel my finger nails clawing at my skin.

    “Wait, hold up. It’s just a little girl!” One man calls out.

    “Little girl? Do you see the blood’ weapon in his hands? She’s a Noble! Kill her!”

    “But, she’s a child.”

    “Do I give a ? You know the orders. We kill the-“ He never gets a chance to finish his sentence. I hear a sickening hissing and burning sound as a pulseblade cuts through flesh. A man curses. He screams. Silence.

    A few moments later, I feel warm arms around me, someone hugging me. “I’m not going to let you die.” A small voice whispers to me. “No matter what. I won’t let that happen.”

    We stay like that for what seems like an hour. I notice a tear rolling down her cheek, and only then do I realise the gravity of what just happened. She killed two people, to save me.

    When we get up, and she drags me along again. I no longer complain. I don’t feel the pain. I push past it. If she can show such strength, such determination to keep me alive. Then I will be stronger for it. I will not be a burden!

    Everything flashes, and I’m standing below another outpost. Lelliana is deliberating on whether to risk asking them for help or not. I’ve been following her this whole time. This time, I’ll decide what we have to do. I’ll save us.

    I pull her along, gently at first, but then I start to run. Happy to be back to people I know, to have people who will protect me, and who won’t let me die. With them around, Lelliana won’t have to kill for me. And I can use them to go and find Kaldratos!

    As I get closer to the base, it becomes larger and larger. The pure white walls and gun turrets speak of safety. That death will befall any foe that tries to attack it, to attack me and Lelliana. I feel a warmth in my heart, happy that we will be safe.

    I am panting by the time I reach the gate, and three guards step forward, rifles raised. “Who are you?” One asks.

    I blink in surprise. I hadn’t met every single soldier in my lifetime. But every soldier on Saldeth should know who I am, if not on looks, then by the pendant attached to my neck.

    “He’s a lordy. Probably the son that’s still alive. They’ve been searching for him for a while now.” The man beside him notes.

    I’ve lead us into a trap. The guilt and fear hangs on me like soaked clothes. But Lelliana quickly stands between me and the troops, pulseblade activated. It hums lightly. She can kill two men who aren’t really aware of her ability to kill. But these three are prepared. In an instant their out of reach, their weapons raised and aimed at her and myself. From above us, one of the infantry turrets swivels and locks with Lelliana’s body. A single move out of line, and we’ll be blown in half by the repeater.

    “Listen here. You’re coming with us, or we can kill you. Those are your options. And I’d really prefer not killing anyone else today.” The man seems genuinely unnerved by the death he’s seen, but he still has his rifle trained on Lelliana, ready to pull the trigger at the slightest provocation. “Boy, what’s your name?” He asks me.

    “Eleusis Vixiua,” I answer. My voice is as strong as I can make it. I want it to sound authorative, commanding, like I know my father would. But I am no Magnus Vixiua, I am only a scared little boy.

    One of the men off to the side clicks his fingers. “So it is him.” He looks to Lelliana and then me. “We’re not going to hurt you two. Give your weapons to us. You won’t be getting them back, but at least we’ll know we can trust you not to try kills us all.” He looks at Lelliana, and then the turret repeater. “Try, darlin’. Try”

    I tap Lelliana’s shoulder, and nod to her. I set my mouth firm, looking confident, but concerned. I throw my pulseblade to one of the men, and she follows suit a few seconds later.

    “Very good,” one of them says.

    A few minutes later, we’re ordered through the gate. It shrieks as it opens for us, as if it knows that it is in enemy hands and that this is the worst fate it could ever have envisioned.

    The outpost is bustling with life. To one side stand soldiers imprisoned or chained. Above them, hang corpses. A few of the imprisoned soldiers call out when they see me. Looks of despair or sorrow on their faces. One soldier angrily shouts that a child my age shouldn’t be seeing this. But a moment later he receives a kick to the gut and doubles over. I’m sorry. I’m sorry. I’m sorry. It’s all I can manage. For them. For Lelliana. For myself.

    A man dressed in white is surrounded by soldiers. He gives orders, shouting to other people to do their damn jobs while he does his. When he catches eye of the soldiers bringing me, his delight is almost contagious. There is a dance in his eye that promises something that fills me with fear.

    “Vixiua,” he calls to someone behind him. “One of your sons showed up. I told you someone would be stupid enough to take the bait!” He turns back to me, “Your father lost this planet some hours ago, lad. I’m surprised you had the balls to come anywhere near here. Then again, you may just be stupid.”

    “That’s enough, Ignatios.” Someone retorts. A man in pulsebinds walks into the centre of the group. He smells horrible. Small liquid stains and brown patches coat his once flawless attire.

    Ignatios? I don’t recognise that name! Who the hell is Ignatios? What House does he come from? What the hell is going on? And why does father smell so terrible? Lelliana clutches closer to me, unwilling to let me out of her sight.

    The man anmed Ignatios notices my gaze. “We took our chance to relieve ourselves onto your kindly father here. Serves him right for all the he’s put us through.” He turns back to my father. “You nearly beat us above Ilusia. You know, if you’d actually stayed and finished the job. I’d be dead, and this wouldn’t be happening.”

    “Ilusia,” I repeat the word aloud. “You’re a rebel? You’re from the rebellion?” I ask. The man looks at me with his cold, dead, brown eyes. Something sinister lurks beneath his gaze.

    “I’m from the Universal Collective of Allied Systems and Planets, boy. We aren’t some small-time rebellion. We are a revolution! We will bring about a new era. A great change. Society will be better once we rule all.”

    “I think that’s what they all say,” Lelliana mutters beside me. She looks at the man, unimpressed by who he is and who he serves.

    He notices, “You might be a little kinder to us soon. After all, we control what happens to you. What we do to you.” He smiles, “Of course, a young, proper, Noble Lady such as yourself will be treated will all the due respects, of course.” His words send a shiver down my spine. After what they did to father, I loathe to think about what would happen to Lelliana.

    “You’ll be alright,” I whisper. But my voice quavers as I speak the words. I see her shiver, just lightly. But I noticed.

    “Now,” Ignatios claps his hands. “Now that the family reunion is over and one. Let’s get down to business.” He turns back to my father, but his eyes are locked on me.

    “Do you know what happened to Kaldratos?” he asks. I shake my head. Ignatios smiles again, however.

    “Do you mean the boy that you sent to the Caventine tunnels? I had the place bombed and then demolished. Nobody survived. Your son is dead.” My father says nothing, but he closes his eyes. It is his sign of respect to the dead, and him accepting his own failure to protect his family.

    “I’m sure he’s alive, father.” I say it with as much belief as I can. “Big brother would never die to these people.” My father does not smile, as I had hoped he would. Instead, he imparts wisdom on to me.

    “Everyone dies, Eleusis. It is never glorious, nor is it Noble. Or honourable. Men and women and children die, each and every day. Some in war, some to starvation, some to disease. Even negligence. If your brother is gone from this life, then it is your duty to respect his passing. Remember him, but do not mourn him. Fight for him. Live for him.” My father’s voice is strong, resilient. As if he hasn’t been captured by enemies, he still has charge of his own destiny. His own fate.

    Ignatios’ smile is wicked, “Don’t worry, you’ll be dead soon enough, old man.” He clicks his fingers, and the butt of a rifle smacks my father’s back. He stumbles forward, but does not fall to his knees. I step forward, but hands grab me and shove me backwards. In my right hand, a warm hand grips mine. The rifle comes again, and this time my father falls, kneeling before Ignatios. The rifle’s point aimed at his head.

    “I want you to watch this,” he looks at me. “You Nobles. You are born thinking you’re greater than us. Born thinking you should be above us, rule us. But, look at you. Down here in the mud and . You’re nothing.”

    “I will always be greater than you, Ignatios. For I am a paragon among humanity. I have guided men and women to be greater than they could have ever dreamed. I will always be better than you.” My father barks a laugh, and Ignatios cracks him across the jaw, and irritated look on his face.

    “Shut the hell up you dog.” He outstretches his hand and one of the guards hand him a pistol. My senses heighten. I smell the filth on my father, I feel the anger radiating from the men around me, the undeserved hatred. The lust to kill us, simply because of how I was born.

    “You shouldn’t watch this,” Lelliana whispers to me, her voice is soft and sad.

    I shake my head.

    “Do not look away,” my father is the one who speaks. “Remember this. Remember it all.” His voice booms amidst the circle of enemies. Even now, he is commanding.

    My foe smiles, a mischievous, hateful smile. His eyes hold ten thousand years’ worth of hatred. His crow-feet brows furrowed in glee and malice. I hear a hissing sound as he pulls the trigger, and a bolt fires through my father’s forearm. “Opps, I misfired. Sorry about that.” He cackles, mad with his own pleasure.

    Blood runs down my father’s arm, but it’s as if he doesn’t even notice the pain.

    “Fine, fine, I’ll get on with it.” He shrugs, and aims at my father’s head. “You’re watching, boy?” He gives me a smile.

    He pulls the trigger.

    My father’s head jerks, blood shoots behind him. When he falls forward, it’s like the crashing of a starship in my ears. The snapping of trees, the howl of a thunderous wind. All I feel is her hand gripping mine. That single solace of comfort in all this horror.

    “Father,” I whisper. I knew it was going to happen, I saw the look in Ignatios’ eyes. But, to see him laying still on the ground, it is a frightening thing. To see my father dead, to know that the man who had legends and stories written about his deeds was gone. Magnus Vixiua, Champion of His Majesty Kauldian, was dead.

    “He’s dead. Gone. Boom. Nothing going on in here anymore.” He bends down and taps my father’s skull, giving me a bright smile. With a sigh he rises himself back up, flicks me a look, and then stomps on my father’s head.

    There is a horrid squelch as bone and blood mix. Ignatios’ heavy military boot grinds my father’s head into the ground. My free hand goes to my mouth as I tried to hold back the vomit. But it’s no use, I lurch forward, and sickness spews from my lips. The soldier closest to me backs away, apparently disgusted. I cough, splutter. I feel my knees buckle.

    “Stand,” she whispers to me. “Do not fall. Don’t let them see it, don’t give them that satisfaction.” Her voice is hard and cold, resolute.

    I stand, straightening my legs after vomiting on the ground. Ignatios walks towards me, and then wipes sickness from my mouth like a concerned parent.

    “I’d have you kiss my boot, because I know how much you loved your dear father. But, that seems just unnecessary. Not to worry; you’ll get to spend the whole trip with him!” He cackles again, and when he clicks his fingers, it’s revealed why. A small, rectangular box is brought forward. Like a tiny cupboard. A coffin.

    His guards throw me and Lelliana into the coffin. I can barely crane my neck or move at all. Her hand is still locked in mine.

    A moment later, I hear Ignatios’ sick cackle once more. And then a third body is thrown in. Blood runs down my neck as my father’s body hits me. I choke back the vomit, Lelliana squeezes my hand, her head forced to rest against my back.

    Darkness encloses around us, and then stench of filth and blood overpowers me. I nearly black out, but I hear a soft voice against me.

    “I’m here. It’ll be alright,” She tells me. How are you brave in a situation like this. “I’m here,” she repeats. I feel a warmth around me, like a glow. “Come back, please.” What? The voice no longer comes from behind me, but all around me. “We need you. I need you. Please, Eleusis. Please come back.”

    ……………………………….

    White lights greet me. The room smells of sanitisation, cleanliness. I sigh against the bed, it is soft against me, my body has sunken against it.

    Wait.

    I try to rise, but a pain shoots in my gut. I cry out, and my hand goes straight to my abdomen. I feel the stick of flesh-gel.

    Where am I? I look around me. The room is completely white, panels of light décor the walls, and a man sits on a seat at the far corner of the room. Head bowed. It is a face I recognise very well, the face of a man I fought beside for a year. The man who saved me when no one else would.

    Myron, what are you doing here? I’m supposed to be dead? Galvian shot me. And that dream? I haven’t had that dream for many years. But, Lelliana’s voice. Why was it calling me back here?

    “So, you’re finally awake, Hannibal.” My friend raises his head, “Or are you Eleusis? Or are you both?” He sighs, and stands, striding towards me. “Don’t answer those questions. Not yet, at least. You’re still recovering.”

    I sink back into my bed, it parts for me as my head goes against it. Ah, I’m in medic-gel. Of course.

    “Myron…” I try to speak, but my voice comes out as a croak. He hushes me with a wave of his hand.

    “When you’re awake, you have a ton of questions to answer, got it? And then you’ve got to save us. Until then, sleep.”

    “Wait!” I ask, desperate. “Lelliana, is she… Is she here?”

    He gives me a quizzical look, but he doesn’t press the button to knock me out. “She got here a day after I told her what happened. She was the first person that I informed. She comes by here each morning and night, otherwise she’s out, making preparations so that Galvian can’t come in and kill you.” He smiles lightly, “she’s frightening when she’s mad, Eleusis. You should have seen her when she saw what had happened to you.”

    He shakes his head, a proper smile forming on his lips. “I’ll tell her you woke up, don’t worry.” He offers me a smile, but it dies before it reaches his eyes. I close my eyes, my mind relaxed. That was why I heard her voice. But one more question bugged me now.

    “Why did you save me?” I ask, truly wanting to know the answer.

    He stiffens then, and a forlorn look dawns over his face. “This is the last question. After they shot you,” He glances away, “After we shot you. We wanted to take off your mask. When he did, he didn’t immediately recognise you, neither did Tarvitz or the rest. But I did. I got you out, I gathered up the members of your Unit, and I set up a perimeter. Dr. Andrews has been looking after you for the last few days, and the ship has effectively been divided in half, some who support you, and some who support Galvian. I’ll explain the rest next time you wake up.” He taps the button as I close my eyes.

    “Rest well, my friend.”








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    A great up date. I can see your very good with the descriptive voice. So maybe less of words that hit the censor might be wise. I know you can do it. If this is because you are also publishing the series on another forum, well the censor is the censor. I can deal with it in my reading. It is distracting though.

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    Sorry all, I'm quite pressed for time right now. Recently moved into Residence and I'm still settling in. What with ridiculously late nights and all, my time management isn't at its peak right now. The Chapter is already done, obviously, but needs to be formatted and such. It'll be posted early tomorrow morning.

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    Your characters are particularly engaging in this chapter - I'm impressed by the bravery and determination of Lelliana and the nobility of Magnus Vixua; the cruelty of Ignatios makes me want to see him brought to justice and Myron's uncertainty about who he is speaking to adds intrigue.
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    Well, it was high time I delivered on my word, so here I go.

    I should begin by saying that this is amazing and that the rewrite yielded a great improvement in quality (mind you that I had only skimmed through the first couple of chapters before it, but I did notice the difference).

    I've finished the first part and I look forward to continuing, you have certainly awoken my curiosity. Since I've taken some notes and I think you'd like to hear specific thoughts, I'll tell you what crossed my mind on each chapter.

    Chapter I - Starting in the middle of a war scene is a bold choice. It's true that action is a good way to pull in the reader, but the complexity of a battle can be daunting. You managed this well with Eleusis' thoughts, keeping said overwhelming action grounded on a character. If I have one criticism it's that "Those who do terrible things for good reasons, are they just as terrible as those who do terrible things for terrible reasons?" might be a bit too much heavy-handed "theme waving" for a first chapter. But hey, I'm guilty of this myself . The amazing avalanche sequence made me forget such a measly sin, and I wouldn't remember it if I hadn't written it down.

    Chapter II - Kaldratos and his companions are well established. You make excellent use of gesture and thought as dialogue aids and subtle exposition tools for hierarchy and relationships. This can be said for the whole story, but this is where I first noticed it.

    Chapter III - This is when I think the story's premise and themes start to shine through and they do so very well. Space drama between members of the same family with high stakes always makes for a good tale. You add in power, politics and dehumanization (always a good mix). Eleusis' mask and all it entails for his personality and plot is an amazing choice, serving as a materialization of what he must become and what will be lost in the transition. Well done!

    Chapter IV - The brutal massacre has a perfect ending with the "statistical success." This is another thing that is true for the whole story, but I will say it here: very good tone choice when dealing with war and killing. You do it fast and spectacular, with fancy moves and fancier weapon names, but you keep it gritty and almost shocking. It's well-built violence, not too dramatized and allowing a certain "epic" vibe. But it's not sanitized and certainly not glorified. Also, the description of the garden's luxury after the indiscriminate bloodbath was almost sickening. Good job!

    Chapter V - I liked the thoughts of Eleusis' past and values and how they contradicted the actions he is forced to do. I liked the moment of old Olvin's own weakness reflected where he searched for mercy even more.

    Chapter VI - Establishing political landscapes with several factions and lines of thought isn't easy. Your approach worked, and I got my bearings well enough.

    Chapter VII - They chose a good quote for the Yearly Awards ceremony. Great scene!

    Chapter VIII - The misery of the lower levels of society adds to the grounded feeling that I mentioned above when talking about violence. It's arbitrary and bloody, but the reader and the narrative have room to breath.

    Chapter IX - My favorite so far. You had already shown us Eleusis' inner struggle in all its glory, and here you present us with Kaldratos with his heart cut out. "Oh Catherina, what have I become now?"

    Chapter X - I like Kaldratos a lot, and I find Eleusis very intriguing (haven't seen enough of Risa to have some thoughts on her). Still, Calliar Cersey is becoming ever more interesting. Aside from Catherina's deeply burried good intentions, from what I know so far, he seems to be the only one worried about this endless tide of death. It will be interesting to see Risa and Rebekah's relationship develop. If I may, I'd advise you to use it as an opportunity for some light-hearted moments.

    Well, these are my thoughts. I hope they are of some use. I'll do the same with the second part when I catch up.

    Before I forget - should I be reading this on your site? I saw no ads there, but if the extra traffic is handy, I'll read there and comment here.

    Cheers, and keep it coming!

    Edit: I didn't read the comments because I noticed the chapters didn't match up after the rewrite and I wanted to avoid spoilers. I apologize if I have parroted others.

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    Sorry that it has taken me so long to get another Chapter out. The second/third draft (I can't remember which) is done. I'm now rewriting the storyline again. But, here I am, to begin uploading the last sixteen or so Chapters tonight.

    I'll reply to you both, Alwyn and Admiral right after this!

    Chapter Seventeen - Kaldratos
    Chapter Seventeen

    Kaldratos


    She stares back at me from across the room. Her hazel eyes never leaving my face. She wears a white noble coat, military slacks and boots that come up to her knee. One foot leans against the wall. Her arms are crossed as she looks at me in curiosity.

    “It’s been a few years, hasn’t it?” She says.

    “Quite a few.”

    “Looks like I saved you again, though.” She smirks. I don’t know how to reply. I stare down at my hands. Awkward.

    “Thank you, for that. I would have died if you hadn’t intervened.” I nod my gratitude, still refusing to look into her eyes.

    “Kaldratos, look at me.” I don’t raise my head. I hear her boot hit the ground. “Look at me!” She demands.

    What I see in her eyes makes all the fear come back, but sweet memories too. Her eyes smouldered with the anger, and perhaps something more. She throws her hands up in exasperation.

    “You’re Catherina’s Champion and you still can’t bear to look at me? Am I that dangerous to you?” She snorts, smirking again.

    Her eyes dance when I shake my head, finally allowing a smile on my face. “I never could understand you.”

    “Hopefully you never will,” she takes an apple from a holder and bites into it. She gives me a wink. “You know, I always knew you just wanted to roll in the mud.”

    I sigh, I knew she would bring that up. “I don’t think comforting me after my family was killed really counts, Alexis.” Her smiles dashes from her lips at that, and she nods her head solemnly.

    “Was there really nothing there?” She finally says.

    “Nothing worth remembering.”

    She nods, smiling again. “Alright, good to know.” She is a Noble, and easy to read. You’re far too honest, Alexis. You were always like Lelliana.

    The thought hit like a punch me as I remember the girl who had been so deeply in love with Eleusis. My heart is weighed down by sadness. Lelliana died with my brother. She never would have left him.

    “You know, you’re far less honest.” She tells me, as if she read my mind. She sighs as she leans back against the wall. “You’re a walking wound, Kal. You also adamantly refuse to let anyone stitch you up.” She looks hurt for a moment, but it passes quickly.

    “I don’t need stitching back together. I need to be stronger.”

    “You think that matters?” She laughs at me. “That’s rich. You who used to have such a disdainful view of those who lived only to fight and grow stronger. You say that to me?” She shakes her head. “Bloody hell, you’ve gone to , haven’t you?”

    She turns back and walks towards my personal training area.

    When she comes back out, she holds two practice blades in her hands.

    “You want to be stronger, Your Highness?” She spits the title out with disgust.

    Her hand snaps forward, the point of one of the blades digging into my thigh.

    “Ow!” I scramble away, “What the hell do you think you-“

    Crack

    The wooden blade smacks against me jaw.

    I stumble.

    “Giving you what you want,” she snarls at me. I feel another strike coming, and I dodge to the side, making for the practice rack.

    She steps in front of me, second blade striking at the point behind my knee.

    I go down.

    “You hate yourself. You want to be stronger. Fight.

    The only weapon I have on me is my pulseblade, and if I used it, I’d kill her.

    “Do you think this is a game?” She snarls at me, and the hilt of her first blade comes at me again. I dodge backwards, but the point flicks around and cuts into my shoulder.

    She’s fast. Faster than she was. Faster than me.

    The second blade comes for me.

    I dodge, it misses my cheek by a centimetre. Instead of going back, I go forwards. My right hand snaps at her wrist, and like a Cobra’s jaws they grip her mercilessly, my thumb goes straight for the point of her wrist.

    She drops the blade, but her arm slithers out before I have her in any real hold.

    When I look at her, practice blade in hand, she’s on the other side of the room.

    “I’ve always wanted to see just how much you’ve learned,” she comments. She lunges, blade lashing out.

    It’s a feint, I go to block.

    The real attack comes in a stab, and she hits me straight in the chest.

    Kuhh. I feel the breath punched from my lungs. She digs the blade deeper, as if she wishes to stab through my chest to kill me.

    The blade draws back, swift as lightning before coming again, cutting into my shoulder. She slips to the side and twists, I think she’s about to run away, but her foot catches me in my other cheek, throwing me to the side.

    I spit blood.

    I roll backwards and get up, I swivel into a defensive position. But she’s already on me. Like a storm hailing against a cliff. She smashes again and again, cracking the stone, driving deep into the core like the wind.

    “What happened to you?” She whispers softly as she swings the practice blade. I’m only barely being able to defend. “There are stories about you, carving through armies. Obviously exaggerated. But… this. I’m disappointed.”

    She backs away from me now. She flicks the blade, as if finished with the fight. She looks at me with a sorrow entrenched on her being.

    “Did what happened to her really do this to you? It’s like you’re only half alive, Kaldratos.” She sighs, “On a good day I’d get maybe one strike in on you. I know we’re not equals with a blade, so why aren’t you fighting?”

    “What’s the point?” I ask, my tone dripping acid. “Don’t you understand? There isn’t a reason to fight now. I can die, and it won’t matter. She’s in a coma, Alexis. She hasn’t woken up yet. The doctors say she might not.” I throw the blade away.

    “What am I to do? All I can do is kill. But I failed her. I couldn’t protect her. She defended me, and that’s why she was hurt. I failed her.” I stare at the practice weapon, as if it holds its answer in the seams of its construction.

    Alexis walks towards me and sits beside me. She takes out her pulseblade and activates it. A green and blue beam slides out.

    “This is made for one thing. Killing. You are not a weapon. You are a person. Catherina named you her Champion. To defend not just her, but her Imperium.” She looks to me expectantly. “That is what you have to do. You must be stronger. Not just as a warrior, but as a leader. Unify what is divided.”

    I give her a laugh, “Poetic words, Lady Lotar. Poetic and impossible.” I sigh, she grabs me gently as I start to rise.


    “Kaldratos, you can’t keep doing this. You can’t survive like this. Please, go back to who you were.” The concern in her eyes stops me from a cold remark.

    I cup her cheek, allowing myself a true smile. “You don’t know how far I’ve fallen from the person you once knew.”

    She scoffs at that, “You hold more power in the Imperium than any one else right now. If you’re not free to be who you want, then how can anyone else? Eh?” She gets up. “Catherina would be disappointed, Kaldratos. You’re her Knight, and yet you stand here mopping as if you can’t do anything. Lead, get your head out of your ass and lead.”

    “I don’t think I can do that on my own.” I whisper, a frown crossing my lips.

    She dismisses my insecurity, giving me a ruddy smile. “You’re not alone, dumbass. You have me.”

    If only it was so simple.

    ……………………………..


    I nod my goodnights to Alexis, but as I turn to retreat back into my chambers and think, I’m accosted by Octavian and Hallind, Commander of my Valkyrion Knights.

    “Your Highness,” Hallind booms in his gruff voice. A jovial smile coming to his lips. His beard is dyed blood red, with his receding hair pulled back so that it reveals half his head.

    I greet him warmly, embracing my friend.

    “Kaldratos,” Octavian’s voice is softer. His eyes twinkle with both sadness and excitement.

    “Yes?” I ask. The exhaustion grips at me, trying to pull me towards my bed and a much-needed rest. But I stand, waiting for them to speak.

    “Alexis told me we’d need to talk to you after she left,” Octavian admits, drawing a smile from me.

    “She always was like that. Machinations working to get her way.” I shake my head, and invite the two men inside.

    Hallind brings out a bottle of Vodka, plumping three head sized glasses down on my table. Octavian and eye exchange a glance.

    “How much do you think I can drink?” I ask him, drawing a laugh from the older man.

    “More than you believe, boy.” He fills it to the brim.

    “I’ll die,” I say.

    “Nonsense! We have the best medical bay in any ship in the Imperium, a few meters from your chambers. You’ll be fine.” He offers me the glass.

    When I reach out for it he pulls it back, chuckling to himself. “Good grief, Highness. I’d be a terrible bodyguard if it was I who got your damn self-killed.” He drinks from it, taking a heavy swig. He chuckles again, his face scrunching up for a moment as the burn hits his throat.

    He produces another bottle from his coat, this one a rich, fine, wine.

    “This’ll be more to your Noble tastes,” he slashes me with a smile.

    “We really do have important things to discuss, Highness.” Octavian promises, seeing the amused expression on my face.

    His voice tears me from my happiness. The guilt comes back as I know why he’s here. He’s here to try to fix me, to make me better, like I was before Catherina’s attack.

    To make me a Noble again.

    But I don’t feel Noble. I feel disgraced, humiliated and destroyed. I failed the one person whom I should have given everything to protect. Yet when it came to defend her, I was taken out, unable to fight.

    The guilt hits me like a bullet.

    “Can it wait?” I ask him, he senses my apprehension and shakes head apologetically.

    “No.”

    Hallind brings me a glass of wine as Octavian and I sit down opposite each other. The second glass goes to Octavian. The man then plops himself beside me.

    “Unify what is divided.” I repeat Alexis’s words. “That’s much easier said than achieved.”

    “It certainly won’t be easy.” Octavian agrees, but he shares a look with Hallind. “Without Catherina there is a power vacuum that must be filled. Cersey will be making a move soon enough, we know that.”

    Hallind grimaces, “son of a doesn’t know when to give up. He’s always been a sneaky bastard.” He drinks some of his vodka and glowers.

    “And you want me to do what?” I address Octavian. “Any play I make could easily be misinterpreted. It could be seen as me taking advantage of Catherina’s state and setting myself up as Emperor. Have you ever heard of the Balvin Family?” Octavian nods at me, but Hallind just shakes his head.

    “Exactly,” I spread my fingers. “If I am to ‘unify what is divided’ I need to do so with the resources I have, and make a move as Kaldratos Vixiua. Not as Catherina’s Champion.

    Both men l00k to me in surprise. Hallind because the Vodka is starting to hit, and Octavian because I seem determined again.

    “Calliar Cersey is a threat…” Octavian begins, but Hallind cuts him off.

    “Hannibal’s the bloody threat. Did you see what he did to our Armada? We had five times the numbers on him, and he tore us apart using our own damned weapons!”

    I quiet them with a look, thinking.

    “I can’t defeat Hannibal in strategic combat. Not when every move is one he predicts before the battle even begins. We still have no idea why Hannibal protected me, either. However, I can’t deal with Cersey after what just happened, I don’t have the support to annihilate him.”

    “Pah! Do you need support to kill him? You have us. Give a few Cloaker units the order and he’ll be dead within the week.” Hallind thinks only of blood and battle, but it isn’t entirely without merit.

    I shake my head, “No. I don’t want him killed. Alexis is right, we need to unify the Imperium. I need him for that. I don’t need, or want, him dead. But he could help me.”

    “Help you? Why in her Majesty’s name would he do that?” Octavian chuckles, genuinely surprised my suggestion.

    I look to my friends. “I never said I’d give him a choice.”






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    Chapter Eighteen - Eleusis
    Chapter Eighteen

    Eleusis

    I shove a small morsel of food into my mouth. I feel famished to eat something solid, for once, instead of just having my food liquidated and then fed to me through tubes. Myron had obliged my request, and had gotten me a meatloaf or… something. It wasn’t something I’d have been fed when I was an Admiral, that was for damn sure.

    “This tastes utterly horrible,” I say through a mouthful of food.

    “I know, this is what I’ve had to eat while on this ship.”

    “It wasn’t this bad when we were under Orno. Maybe he got something right at least.” Myron laughs at that, but when he sits down, he turns quiet.

    I finish what I think is two-day-old meatloaf, and put the plate to the side, allowing it to float away.

    “I was the one who took on a false identity and lied to you for four months. Not too long, but, even so. I believe you have the right to ask the first round of questions.” I try to say this as evenly as possible, and not give away the tremble that shudders through my body. The fear that even now my old friend would reject me. That what I had done was too much.

    He looks at me for a long moment, and then sighs. “I don’t even know where to begin, Eleusis. Why did you do all of this? You would have reached Command eventually anyway, so why did you go to all of this trouble?”

    I consider omitting parts, telling him that I did it solely of my own volition, with my own future and security in mind. But, as soon as the thought enters my head, I banish it.

    “It’s a long story,” I nod to him, sitting up in the gel bed. I tap a console on the side, and the gel rises with me, semi-solidifying so that I have half a chair to rest against.

    “When I was much, much younger, my father would take me to the cities. We would do it in disguise, with as few retainers as he could possibly get away without my mother nagging at him to be careful.” I smile, remembering one such scene. “We walked and talked about the people. I talked to a few of them, and they were friendly. Not in the way they usually were, respectful, friendly because insulting me would be… bad. But genuinely kind.” I fold my arms in front of me. “My father grabbed a homeless man from the street and took him to a restaurant. The man sat and talked to my father, not knowing who either of us were, and my father learnt that he had once been an engineer. He gave the man a job as one of his mechanics, and allowed the man to stay on his land for free. Afterwards, my father told me that I will one day rule. Maybe not as a Lord Sovereign, but that I would rule somewhere.”

    “He said that I had the choice. Whether to rule them as subjects, or to recognise that people are people. That they all have their worth, no matter their birth. He told me that it is my choice whether I treat them with respect, or treat them as beneath me. But that it is for me to decide, and me alone.” He then left me in the city, vanished, teleported back to home.” I smile bitterly then.

    Sly bastard, left me to fend for myself. What if I’d died, eh? “I was scared. But I didn’t want to be, so I decided to talk to people. Some were random people walking down the street, others were homeless or the poor. But I wanted to learn, and I wanted to know their lives. Some people rebuffed me, but most were happy to tell me a little. Especially the old, they loved telling me about their youth. I spent nearly six hours talking to people, before one of the old couples offered to let me stay with them for the night.” Myron raises an eyebrow at that, and I shake my head. “I was young, but, it ended up alright anyway. They fed me dinner, and I slept like a baby. When I woke up, my father was at the door, asking if he could have his son returned to him. I expected the old couple to be fearful that something bad would happen to them, but they smiled, gave me a biscuit and a hot chocolate, and offered my father coffee. For twenty minutes he sat with them and talked. People. Not lord and servant. Just as people. I learnt the worth of everyone that day, and since then have sought it from all.”

    “After what happened to my father, I hated everyone. Lelliana and I were so afraid. Trapped in that coffin with him. I never wanted to see another person, never wanted to trust anyone.” I look to him, and a smile suddenly comes to my face. “And then you decided to be slightly less of an .” He smirks, “You saved us, and you didn’t have to. It was living proof, that even in the Universal Collective, people were still people. Still living day by day, still trying for a better Universe.”

    “I want to make that happen, Myron. I want something better, for the people at the bottom. Randera knows my talents, and so she offered me a deal I couldn’t reject. Power, the power to change lives, and all that had to happen was for Eleusis to die, and for Hannibal to be born. I killed Orno, and with his death I killed myself, to become this. Hannibal. Because I need the strength to do what must be done, for the good of everyone else.”

    Myron clicks his tongue, an unsatisfied expression on his face. “This idea to do good, eventually, Eleusis, that doesn’t change the fact that in the present you have done terrible things.” He looks troubled, and a deep frown creases his brow. “I know the bombardment wasn’t yours, but the merciless killing of civilians for victory. The constant wave of violence that is consuming our fleet. You can’t keep going like this.”

    I am about to tell him that I know, but a thought strikes me.

    “You told me the ship was torn in half between a faction supporting me and the one supporting Galvian. We are surrounded by more fleets than just this one. Why haven’t you sent out a distress call to the others in the fleet?”

    Myron shakes his head at that, “I did. Your friend on the bridge managed to block it from going out. I’m lucky that my message to Lelliana went through.” He nods to me, and a smile comes to his lips. “Speaking of which,” he taps the console and I’m shoved forward to the end of the medic-gel bed. The end clicks off and turns itself into a hovering chair, Myron gently pushes the back of it and it goes forward and glides out of the room.


    “A certain someone’s been rather busy. Lelliana has spent the entire time you’ve been out working. I don’t think she’s slept. She meets with Galvian and his lackeys each day, going in alone. She scares them, they’re always deep in thought whenever she leaves.”

    He brings me through the corridors. Nurses and doctors salute as they see me, but I cannot miss the accusation in their eyes, that lack of faith in me.

    I’m taken through a small door and I can see a large screen that shows a room. Seven people sit in the room, six on the left and one on the right.

    I can’t speak when I see her. The smile she gives them is cruel, her eyes are without mercy.

    “Maybe you don’t understand, Commandant. You are not negotiating with Eleusis. I do not represent him. It seems trying to make you comprehend your situation through words is pointless, and I do so abhor wasting my time.” She stands up, “I represent Her Ladyship Randera,” she clicks her fingers, and behind her the door opens. Two soldiers stride in, wearing the red and white armour of the Consulate Wardens, the personal guards of the Grand Assembly and of Randera. In their grip they carry a large box which is set down beside Lelliana.

    When the two open the box Galvian’s side recoil in horror, watching Lelliana with apprehension and fear. “Do you understand now? I speak on behalf of the Grand Assembly, I come here with their Officiate of Authority. You are negotiating with Her Ladyship. You have attacked one of her Admirals, someone she personally gave command to. You have committed treason, and treason can only be answered with death.”

    Oh, you clever girl. I smile to myself. Galvian thinks me a traitor, it seems that it wouldn’t occur to him that Randera wouldn’t side with him after everything that I did. I watch as the room devolves into shouts and Galvian’s side starts tearing itself apart as they contemplate being traitors.

    Galvian hushes his side, “Her Ladyship refuses to see that the man, Hannibal? Eleusis? Whoever he is, is an Imperial sympathiser and a psychotic megalomaniac that cares nothing for his soldiers?” He stands, fixing his officer coat, “I am no traitor. No one here is. All of us only wish to serve our nation to the greatest of our abilities,” he hesitates, and I see the fear in his eyes. “But, we can’t serve under that man. He’ll get us all killed, he’s a fool, a traitor, he doesn’t dese-”

    Lelliana holds up her hand, silencing him.

    “Who commands this fleet is of no true important, Commandant. If you so wish it, I will personally hand over Admiral Eleusis to you for you to do as you see fit. The true importance here is a fleet that is now stuck, lacking a commander, and in the middle of a mutiny.”

    What? The shock hits me hard. She’s willing to give me up?

    Myron’s shocked too, I hear him gasp, and the surprise that morphs on his face.

    Galvian is stunned by this, but she speaks before he can. “I do not represent Eleusis, remember that. I represent Her Ladyship and her interests here.”

    She clicks her fingers and the guards come back, taking the Officiate Seal away.

    “Myron, what… What was that?” My friend looks at me with wide eyes, unable to answer. Very quickly he shoves my wheelchair back and brings me straight back to the medic-gel bed.

    “No, stop. I need to talk to Lelliana,” I tell him. He hesitates, but then nods, letting me stay in the wheelchair. He waits off to the side, tapping his fingers together anxiously.

    Lelliana, did you mean that? Would you truly sell me out? Let them slaughter me like some animal?

    Finally, she arrives, and the look of her does not give me any assurances. I expected a glimpse of happiness from her, but there is nothing, only a dull look in her eyes as she looks between Myron and myself.

    “Eleusis,” it is more a statement than a greeting. Her eyes are cold as they look down on me. She’s always been a little taller than me, but now I feel like an ant in the menacing gaze of a giant.

    “You truly made a mess of things, didn’t you?” She grimaces, shaking her head, “And now I have to fix it.”

    “Fix it? It sounded like you were going to be the one who signed my death warrant.” I throw the accusation at her, but she is unfazed. She doesn’t reply, or even acknowledge that I had spoken.

    “Myron,” She turns to him, “Put him back under, he needs his rest.”

    He doesn’t move.

    She shifts, looming over him, she dips her head, sighing to herself. She raises her hand, on her wrist dangles Randera’s personal seal of authority, not the officiate, her own seal. “I will not ask again.”

    Myron salutes, and apologises as he presses a button. The bed sucks me back.

    “Lelliana!” I snarl at her, like a wretched, trapped demon. “You can’t do this! You’re going to let them kill me?”

    For the last moment as I am yanked back, forced down into the depths of the medic-gel as it closes in around me, her eyes meet mine. There is no malice, but there is fear.

    “I serve Her Ladyship Randera,” she bows to me, “I serve the Grand Assembly. Rest well, Eleusis.”




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    Chapter Nineteen....

    Honestly, I felt soiled after writing this Chapter. Which has never happened before. I loathe the Governess Gillian Erae. She's disgusting, and I tried to show that with this chapter. Building her character bible was hard to do. She's quite complex, very disturbed and mentally damaged.

    And I'm not putting the full Chapter on TWC. It's not a nice Chapter, and I'm fairly certain it will overstep quite a few people's ideas of boundaries and what is acceptable in literature. Instead, I'll link to the full Chapter on the site. If you want to read it, go ahead. But I cannot stress enough that you might just be happier reading the small summary I'm putting below this. It explain what happens without going into the gory details.

    Link: https://www.acotsserial.com/2018/07/...nineteen-risa/


    Summary:

    Risa and Rebekah strive to rescue Calliar Cersey from capture. They assault the bridge leading to the Governesses Palace, but are outnumbered and forced to surrender.

    They are then escorted to a dining area, where Calliar and Governess Gillian Erae sit eating. The meal goes smoothly for a few moments, but then Gillian demands entertainment. A holo-tv switches on and begins to show a scene in a dungeon. The Populist Movement that Calliar Cersey led is now imprisoned within Gillian's castle, and she has them tortured as her entertainment.

    It is done in such a way as to mimic the way that Cersey's own wife and son were tortured and then killed. Gillian then reveals her true intentions, having fallen in love with Cersey's way of torture and manipulation, she accuses him of multiple indecent acts.

    Just before Gillian orders an irredeemable act, Cersey's Secret Police, the Viscui, invade the Palace. They kill her guards, and it is revealed that multiple members of the Viscui had already infiltrated her Palace anyway. The guards holding Cersey now turn against the Governess.

    Cersey orders for her to be tortured for a hundred years in retrospect of the terrible crimes she committed against his family. The Populist Movement is eliminated, and a threat to the Imperium's stability as well.
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    Chapter Twenty - Kaldratos
    Chapter Twenty

    Kaldratos


    My ship lands on the landing pad in the inner citadel of Avalone Station. I am in the luxury station that floats above Triumphia. Avalone serves as one of the most decadent areas within the Imperium. I have been here twice before; the first just after Catherina’s coronation where a garla was held here to celebrate her ascension, and the second was after I had been awarded a Triumph due to my Crusade of a Hundred Stars.

    I have always hated this place.

    The size of a large moon, the station itself has many facets. It houses millions of rich merchants that choose to reside here in luxury and pleasantness. They live in comfort in the outer and inner sanctums. Avalone houses a darker side as well, in the Depths. The innermost areas of the station, where the Commoners are forced to slave away to keep the station running, in complete squalor, isolation and desperation. Some areas in the Depths are so awfully maintained that oxygen is no longer pumped into them, and the areas have become mass graves for the thousands who suffocated there, never to be cleared away. Not worth the trouble. The lower classes live and die on this station. The lucky ones live in the sanctums, servants to the whims of the rich and Noble. The unlucky languish in menial jobs that keep the station running in a constant cycle of exploitation.

    Looking around me, you can almost forget the suffering that is just outside the pulseshield that surrounds the inner sanctum.

    Waterfalls cascade down around me, mermaids and beautiful creatures twist and turn within it. Leaping from the water and back down again, eerily laughing to themselves. I see flashes of gold, emerald green, ruby red and a sleek purple. The rich colours blend together to create a eutrophic sense.

    Up the top of the Central Spire, I have a view of all of space around me. The courtyard here is completely open. No glass, no architecture that can take away from the beauty of space. It is completely open, unbidden and naked.

    As I step forward, water shoots ahead of me, freezing in the air, taking the shape of my sigil. Nineteen swords with a crown in the centre. The colours morph, changing to black and crimson. As I near it, the sigil cracks, and snow falls around me and my companions, like crystalline tears.

    Beautiful, wonderful, and utterly unnecessary.

    Octavian scoffs at it, mocking the plush nature of the place. But Alexis stares in wonder, she has never seen something so stunning or captivating.

    “It’s gorgeous,” She whispers, and then scowls at Cassandra laughs at her.

    “You’ll get used to it when following this one around,” she winks, and gestures towards me.

    I gesture for them to silence, and we move forward. We are not here to enjoy ourselves.

    We are here to bend the Imperium’s best, brightest and most deadly individuals to my will.

    I knew that they would never accept an invitation to the Palace, a place where many felt I had power, nor any area that they could feel as if I would have an advantage over them. I brought them here, to this place of lust, greed and indulgence so that they would let their guards down. I came with only one ship, Valiance, they’ll feel safe here.

    As we step into the main courtyards more decorations spring up around me. As if brought to life by our presence, trees blossom from the ground, towering around me in a forest that smells of Saldeth, birds chirp in the outcrops, singing to me as I walk by them.

    The ground freezes ahead of me, but below the ice gorgeous lights and creatures shine. All of them exquisite, gorgeous and captivating to the eye. The very best beasts were crafted and created for this place. No expense was spared, this station exists to cater to everyone’s vanity and superiority complex.

    The first sign of other human life appears when a group of servants fly towards me, not on military style jetboots, but on silent sandals with fluttering wings. They wear crisp white uniforms, outlined with gold fittings and buttons.

    In a manner of moments our armour has been taken off. Leaving us only in our ceremonial tunics or gowns. I feel soft hands start to soothe my neck and shoulders as someone starts to massage them. I hear Alexis comment to a servant as to whether a massage is necessary, but looking around me, every one of my Knights is accompanied by a servant carrying their belongings and another relaxing their bodies.

    “We should come back from war more often.” Cassandra sighs, relaxing into the hands of her servants, rolling her shoulders to loosen up her muscles.

    Three more servants appear ahead of me now, fluttering down from somewhere high up like descending angels.

    The head woman wears the normal attire of the Sanctum Staff, however her two companions wear completely different attire.

    This woman wears barely anything. Golden cloth lightly drapes itself over her breasts and lower body, but the fabric is so thin that it hides nothing. I instantly realise that she is one of the pleasure servants kept on staff for any of the Nobility. The male companion is wearing less, the cloth only draping around his front, displaying his buttocks completely.

    “Your Highness,” the leader purrs, lowering herself into a curtsy.

    “How many have arrived?” I ask, I find it hard to not stare at her. They really do choose the staff here for one thing, to make you forget about the trials of your life.

    “The Houses of Cavantale and Manderwain have arrived, both have been transferred to entirely different Manors, as you requested, Your Highness.” She bows her head when answering, refusing for her eyes to meet anything higher than my neck.

    She looks to my companions, still receiving their massages. “Allow us to escort you to your own estate, Highness.” The three walk briskly ahead of me, careful to keep to the sides so that they don’t directly show their backs to me or my knights.

    The lengths these people go to. Can we truly call this humane?

    Soon we are lead away from the open courtyard of glittering stars and lights and decorations, and we find ourselves walking through marbled halls. Statues and paintings decorate the walls, rather austere compared to what I know is coming next.

    When the doors slither open, my eyes land upon a stretch of land of over seven-kilometres long.

    A marble road leads up to an exquisite manor house. A field sprawls to my left, only interrupted by a small lake the gleams the colours of fire. To my right, a water garden loops through the demesne. I have always loved the water, this is a fact not known by many. But I feel at peace and mesmerised by the sound of water. Rain is calming, the rush of a waterfall is beautiful.

    I look to the head staff, and the woman smiles at me. The manor house and this entire biome is changed to the preference of the one residing in it, as are most of the palaces and estates situated throughout Avalone.

    “Are you pleased, Your Highness?” She asks.

    “Very,” I confirm, smiling to her.

    We walk up to the atrium. Heroic statues flank a pool of water, as I step out onto it, I find that I can walk atop the water. Alexis guffaws in amazement at the sight around her, and being able to walk on the water. I see the staffwoman smile to herself, pleased at the expression of wonder on my companion’s face.

    When we are lead to our various chambers, we see that our names appear beside the door that is ours. Each and every one exclaims as they enter their rooms, crafted personally for their own tastes and interests. Live birds swoop and sing to Cassandra, marble flooring gives way to lush green grass and vined pillars. She has a spacious bath-pool in the centre of her chamber, nearly half the size of the landing pad we were on just minutes earlier. She and Brandon quickly depart for their rooms, practically bursting like children with excitement.

    Alexis and Octavian stick to me, practically battling with each other to be closest to me. The rest of my retainers gradually peel off. I notice Octavian watch Telusa as she leaves, and for just a moment his normally stoic gaze falters and softens.

    When he sees I’ve caught him, he quickly goes back to scowling.

    “Are we certain this place is safe?” He asks, looking around as we’re lead through the halls.

    “Over two hundred of the Valkyrion Knights have been assigned to defend this manor alone. Throughout the station another six hundred or so are mobilised. It’s safe to say that when everyone is landed, I’ll have the strongest force on Avalone out of anyone.”

    “That may not be enough,” he warns, stroking his chin in thought. He glances at Alexis, and then shakes his head. I question him with a raised eyebrow, but he refuses to elaborate.
    “They’ll be enough, besides. He has us. We’ll protect him,” Alexis winks at Octavian, throwing him a smile. He still looks concerned.

    “Maybe you’re not aware that Kaldratos isn’t the most popular of people right now.” Octavian queries her, but then turns back to me. “And what if they make a front against us? What then? Eight hundred soldiers cannot kill hundreds of the Upper Nobility, no matter how good they are.”

    I dismiss the worry, “It won’t come to that.” I tell him, but I’m not so certain. I have to command their respect; my strength is all I have. If I fail here, then I have cost Catherina her Imperium.

    “Your Highness,” The servant draws herself up, clapping her fist to her chest in salute. “These are your chambers, though we apologise as we did not know that Lady Alexis Lotar was accompanying you. Will you be sharing your chambers with her?”

    I hear Alexis’s laughter as Octavian tries to explain for me that she will need to be put into a separate chamber.

    Octavian excuses himself after the arrangements are made and head past his own rooms for Telusa’s.

    “I wonder when that started,” Alexis muses. Before I can answer she turns back to me. “It could be fun,” She looks to my chamber door.

    “No,” I shake my head. Pursing her lips, she offers me a smile.

    She winks at me and dances away, laughing to herself. “Your loss, if you die tomorrow, I want your last thought to be of how you could have spent this night with me.” She blows me a kiss and strides away, talking to the staffwoman and laughing with her.

    When I enter my chambers, I immediately accosted, immediately a servant darts from the shadows, and in seconds my cloak is off and I’m standing in just a silk top and my army pants.

    A steaming bath sits in the centre of the entrance room. The total size of it is larger than my quarters on Saldeth, where the wealth of my family is less pronounced. From high above, water falls like rain, spiralling down in a cascade of patterns woven together. I can just see that they are telling different stories of my family. I can make out Terrian the Darkblade, defending Ioanna Fiding, and a second pattern showing the two of them married. I miss the next two, but a final pattern shows him with his wife, holding her hand as she passes from our world to a better place.

    Other great ancestors pass through as well. Some great, some terrible, some downright despicable. My family has a mixed bunch of warriors and warlords.

    From the pleasure chamber, three women emerge. Their breasts are covered by a black ribbon, their genitals hidden by a red piece of cloth. The servant that had undressed me speaks to me.

    “Staff Head Missandra mentioned you had been away from such luxury for a long time, Highness.” He looks rather pleased with himself as he appraises the women. “I selected them myself.” He sees my disinterested look and quickly worries.

    “Would you prefer men, Highness? My greatest apologies, I –“

    I wave for him to be silent. “No, no. I don’t want any of that. You are all dismissed.” I make my way towards the study.

    I hear the man chastise the women as they leave, and for a moment I have half the time to throw him into the bath for his cruelty. But I stop myself. That is how it is done here. Servants are not treated as people here. They are here to be used.

    Around me, everything is perfect. Crystalline, polished, gorgeous. Black marble flooring, interrupted, by red patterns that flutter along the ground; like electrical currents, they surge forth, clashing and changing, morphing into different symbols and events.

    The white marble of the study doors slides away, and I stride through. The air is much cooler in here than out in the central chamber. It is refreshing, lovely. Oak wood flooring.

    A hearth sits off to the side, and a roaring fire blazes from it. To the left a large book case stands, piled to breaking point with books and tomes and holographic disks. In the centre lies a mahogany table, with a lush cushioned seat lodged in the holding. As I pull out the seat, the desk opens up. A holographic map appears in front of me, showing the entire layout of the station. It shows me the position of all life forms, shows me my soldiers in correlation to my enemies. Everyone on this station is marked here, their position, their life signs. Everything.

    “Kaldratos,” Octavian’s voice cracks in my ear. “It’s Cersey, he’s landed.”

    I look to the map, to see a large contingent on a landing pad. I close my eyes. Catherina, give me strength to see this through.

    “And so it begins, make certain everything’s ready.”




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    Chapter Twenty-One Eleusis
    Chapter Twenty-One

    Eleusis

    I groan as I stand, it’s like a thousand blade stabbing into my calf as I put weight on my leg. The rest of my body protests as well, hurting as I move. Doctor Andrews said I should still use the Medic-gel and the hover seat. But I know that a commander that shows such weakness won’t be in charge for long, and I have enough treasonous issues without having more deserters within the small bands of followers I have.

    Myron comes forward with a pain-med injection. He plunges the needle into my leg and pushes it down. For a moment, fire spreads up my calf and through my chest. I clench my fist as the pain comes in waves, but then it stops, and while I can only walk awkwardly, the pain is numbed.

    “Andrews said he’d quit if you force him to recreate your entire lower leg again.” Myron jokes, although he still seems utterly miserable at the shape of the situation.

    “That’s the least of my worries right now,” I remind him, looking out into the hallway. A dozen sentinels defend my door, everyone’s paranoid about Galvian launching an all out attack on my forces. They don’t understand him, he’s far too economical. He realsies that every soldier is vital in this war, whether as a sacrifice or as a means to achieve victory. But he will not see me as worth sacrificing good soldiers for when this can be ended through negotiation.

    When Lelliana has already offered to hand me over to him in exchange for peace.

    The thought is like a bullet to my gut. Lelliana, will even you throw me to the wolves?

    “Eleusis?” Myron asks, bringing me back. I shake my head and clumsily walk forward, my foot slips. I feel the ground come as it comes to meet me, but Myron grabs me and hauls me back, holding me up.

    “She’s going to kill me, Myron.” The pain in my voice makes me wince, “You heard her. She’ll give me to them herself. They’ll kill me, and everything I have done, all the evil I have committed, will be without redemption.”

    He half drags me, half carries me from the room. “Some people are irredeemable. And some actions are beyond absolution. Whether or not you can redeem yourself, be better, is on you. No one else.” I nod, he was always blunt with what he thought, never sugar coating his tongue.

    When I reach the door, I’m stopped by Lelliana. She brushes her hair aside as it falls from her face, brown as oak, she has not changed since I left her on Ilusia.

    She greets me with a nod, then looks to Myron. “They’re convening in two hours for more negotiations. They’ve changed their tune from wanting vengeance to wanting immunity and pardons and to continue serving.” She smiles, “Looks like my plan worked.” Her eyes fall on me, “At least that did. Eleusis, trust in me. Do not compromise these negotiations. Do not move against them. This will all work out.” With that, she offers me her last tired smile before departing.

    We walk down the hall towards a hangar, which had become our makeshift headquarters now that we were cut off from the Command Consoles of the bridge. The doors open, and I see what amazed me so much last night. Rows of consoles with people plugging away at it, looking at cameras, deciphering enemy locations by radio chatter, trying to punch through the communication barrier that Ashley had placed, locking my people from getting a communication out of the ship, or any communication into it.

    It looks much less impressive than it did.

    A true feat of perseverance, but a technological disappointment.

    She asked me to trust her, but can I truly have faith in anyone but myself?
    I know that if I don’t do as she requests, if I form my own strategy and figure out how to defeat Galvian on my own, she will be furious. Undoubtedly she believes her way is better, that her way will achieve the goals that she has set.

    But her goals are not my goals.

    Will you truly move against her? She’s not here as an enemy, but she isn’t here to help you either.

    “You have to trust her, Eleusis.” Myron whispers to me, “We both know that she’s smarter than either of us. She won’t abandon you, and she won’t let you die. You need to accept her order. Follow it. Recover from your injuries and allow her to sort this out. If she says that everything will be fine, then it will be.”

    I laugh at him, mocking his blind loyalty and lack of tact.

    “She’s a Noble, remember.” I lean against him so that no one else can here, “We are manipulative, greedy, self-serving and cruel. She will not hesitate to kill me if it suits her. Remember who she is.”

    He shakes his head at me, but does not mention it again. We walk through the hangar until we reach the opposite side. Myron shushes me through a small door into a dark room. With a small clap lights come on, revealing a circular conference table with a pile of reports and a console at the center.

    “What is this place?” I ask.

    “Your command centre. There isn’t much room, so this was it. You’re still our commander. Plus, nobody here knows how to plan battle better than you. I have the utmost faith in Lelli, but that doesn’t mean I won’t be prepared for any situation. I’m a soldier, so is Galvian. I want us to be prepared for whatever happens.”

    I nod, I turn back to him. My blood boils as I think of about what I’m going to, how I’m going to deceive my friend even further. How he has gone to all this effort to ensure my safety, and I’m going to put my trust in those who betrayed me.

    I make the decision. I cannot trust in her, nor anyone else. The only one who has the power to change my own life is myself. Faith in myself, and only myself, is the way forward. Damn the others, damn them all. I will rule.

    “Myron, gather Nevra, Garov, Tristan and my captains here. I need to discuss our plans for defense and gather an idea of how much area we hold.” My friend salutes me, a smile on his lips because he thinks he has persuaded me from risking myself, from going against Lelliana’s wish.

    I’m sorry, my friend.


    ………………………………………..


    The door slides open. It’s a dagger in my heart to see their faces, to know that for the time being, I need them. I can’t kill them, they are vital to my own survival.

    Yet you would have had me kill my brother. That I will not ever forgive.

    “Admiral,” Nevra salutes, as does Tristan. Garov just smirks at me.

    “You summoned us?” Garov asks, taking a seat and kicking his legs up on the table.

    “Yes, we’ll begin when everyone else has arrived.” I tell him, looking at his feet. “You are truly a disgusting savage, aren’t you?”

    “We can’t all be raised like you, Lordy.” He dips his head, “We all have our orders. Sworn to obey, no matter what they are.”

    I ignore that comment. “How many do we have?” I ask.

    “In total we have thirty-three-hundred and forty-seven infantry. Galvian outnumbers us by a significant margin, as he brought the remnants of his WAR-FRAME unit with him to the Basphenn when he shot you. I’d say he outnumbers us by around two thousand soldiers, if my estimations are accurate.” Tristan recounts for me, nodding his respect.

    “Where are they located?”

    Tristan pulls up a map on the screen behind me, a map of the Basphenn.

    “As far as we can tell; Commandant Morne has organised his forces into three distinct camps. He has a thousand soldiers on the top floors, so as to have easy access to the bridge in case of a surprise assault. However, our spies have reported that Morne is dispersing troops from here every day, favouring now to reinforce the other two camps. They, of course, are located within the northern and southern stairways. The mid floors. We have no way to go anywhere from the seventy-second floor. What’s more, a large portion of the general crew is marooned down here with us.” He sighs, shaking his head. “There have already been several accounts where Galvian’s soldiers have shot crew members trying to beg for escape from our area. He is being cautious to the point of butchering civilian workers.”

    “The southern camp has less than fifteen hundred troops, the northern camp has more than double that.” I nod at him.

    I need to get to that bridge. But if I attacked the Southern stairwell, even if I won, they’d simply pin me in with their larger number of troops. No, my attack on the bridge must be swift and undetected until it’s too late.

    The door opens again and half a dozen captains stride in. They salute in unison, like trained animals.

    When they are all seated, I begin.

    “They are numerically superior to us. They’ve closed off the hangars. We cannot attack from the outside, we cannot get reinforcements from other ships in the fleet. We’ll run out of supplies if we stay this way. They control all entrances and have heavily fortified the areas above the seventy-eighth floor. Between floors seventy-two and seventy-eight is no man’s land. As I see it, we either attack and die, or we wait and die. This situation is not one we can win.” My captains look dumbfounded, Tristan looks surprised, and begins to speak. But I quiet him with a wave of my hand.

    “They hold every possible advantage. We are trapped.” I take the console from Tristan and zoom in on the northern elevators. They don’t go straight to the bottom of the ship, and to find an elevator shaft that takes one close to the bridge they must first reach floor one-hundred. So, either I sacrifice hundreds of soldiers for a push to the hundredth floor, an assault that isn’t guaranteed. Due to the small proximity of space within the stairwell, tactics are useless. Neither side can have any real advantage aside from numbers, and they have that.

    “The answer is the elevators,” I say, “We need to get here. We need to get a force large enough to storm the bridge and hold it while we get reinforcements. But to get there we need to strike at their camps so that they’re distracted, engaged and locked down.” I turn to two of my captains. “Jeremiah and Iona. You will take your Frame Units and use their flamethrowers and melee weapons to clear a path to the Lower Elevator shafts. You will then open up the shafts, that is all you will do until I give further notice. We need the element of surprise.”

    The room descends into objections, how destroying the ship’s interior is a terrible idea, how there must be a better strategy.

    “There isn’t a better way. The shafts are shut down due to Galvian’s lockdown. It’s the only possible place that has the space to fit a Frame, which is a weapon we have quite a few of. I will not allow our only advantageous resource to go to waste while I sacrifice lives on a conventional assault.”

    They quiet down, realising I am set on this path.

    “Garov, you will follow with Sylio Company. Use their heavy weapons to hold down the one-hundredth floor. We will funnel through Frames onto the higher shaft there, and we will carve our path through the bodies of our comrades and the guts of our ship.” I bow my head, “While the operation is underway, Belloro, you will attack the northern stairway with Storm Battalion, so that they don’t suspect a separate assault. Geneva, you’ll be in charge of protecting us from an attack from the Southern stairwell.”

    “I realise that what I demand of you is a heavy price. You will be fighting soldiers you have fought besides, friends you care about, maybe even family. But, this is not just for us, this is for something greater. A wish that we can free the civilians of the Imperium and grant them Democracy and equality. I am that future’s embodiment. That is why we must commit these evils here, If we die anyway, then we’ve lost nothing, and if we’re victorious, then we’ve gained everything.”


    ……………………………………………..

    It’s 3.00am, standard time.

    In front of me stand forty Frames in a hall. Between their legs are six hundred soldiers, armed to the teeth and equipped with jetpacks so that they can scale the shaft much quicker than if they were climbing. This entire attack hinges on surprise, on me taking the one-hundredth floor and holding it until I can feed more Frames through to that elevator. If they find us and barricade the elevator before we are able to secure a foothold, then we’ll have lost.

    I look to my soldiers and raise my hand. I know that right now Lelliana is still deep at work, speaking with her subordinates on the best terms, the greatest leverage. Figuring out how to end this peacefully.

    But Galvian Morne shot me, tried to kill me.

    And for that there will be violence.




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    I like the way that you conjure up places like Avalone Station, and challenging situations, such as the one which Eleusis faces in the latest chapter. I'm enjoying this!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Alwyn View Post
    Your characters are particularly engaging in this chapter - I'm impressed by the bravery and determination of Lelliana and the nobility of Magnus Vixua; the cruelty of Ignatios makes me want to see him brought to justice and Myron's uncertainty about who he is speaking to adds intrigue.
    Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it all! I hope you continue to do so.

    Admiral Van Trump: (I can't remember how to do double quotes, my apologies.)

    Thank you so much for the effort you have gone to with your thoughts! It is truly appreciated!

    I have to point out that it is very interesting hearing someone else tell my thoughts back to me on certain things. I always wonder whether I've made something clear enough, or whether a theme or character trait is too buried. (Or that there is too much, so the reader gets overwhelmed.) I am glad that it isn't really the case and that the themes and character values are understood!

    I'll admit as I was re-reading it I was struck with a sense that there is always something going wrong. I don't seem to do light hearted moments very well, but I will endeavour to try add some in the future at least.

    Aha, I put no ads there because I don't really intend to make money off of it. I'm using the site as a work through for WebFictionGuide (Which is a site for people like us who write on the Internet, very good place!). The traffic is quite stable now at around 20-50 views a day. But, it's all just an experiment. So, read in whichever place is easiest! Probably TWC, as they'll be updated in the same time-frame now that everything is complete.

    Thanks Admiral!

    Alwyn (2): I am truly honoured that I'm able to at least get some things right! Especially concerning scenic description. I always felt as if that was one of the lacking aspects of my writing. So, I'm glad the effort with Avalone Station paid off!

    Thanks Alwyn.

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    It's good to see you back in business!

    I'll have to check out that website. In any case, I'll keep reading this here.

    About the light-hearted moments: I find that some emotional variation enriches a story a lot. Still, from what I've read so far, if you follow my advice, be careful with the tone. The story has been very dark and a sudden change will undermine consistency.

    I'm yet to catch up to the rest of the story, but I'll try to find the time.

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    It's good to see you back in business!

    I'll have to check out that website. In any case, I'll keep reading this here.

    About the light-hearted moments: I find that some emotional variation enriches a story a lot. Still, from what I've read so far, if you follow my advice, be careful with the tone. The story has been very dark and a sudden change will undermine consistency.

    I'm yet to catch up to the rest of the story, but I'll try to find the time.
    Indeed! Quite sad that it took me so long to get them out. The Chapters are done, most are completely edited too. Just trying to spread out the uploading a bit now.

    Yeah, I know. What I really need, and will probably add in the next round of edits, is a comic relief character. Well, not a comic-relief character. But one that tries to make the best out of the crap situations, to try and bring some light-heartedness to the story.

    I hope you enjoy! Thanks for commenting!

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