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    Chapter VIII - VI
    The wood did not crack, but splinter. Cirion could hear it well. It was a sound of weaker wood being crushed and it was fittingly accompanied by the rupturing of rope as the anchor cables, already stretched by the wind which pulled the pontoons inward, that could not endure the impact. Dried and weather-bitten planks and poles from a small towns palisades and houses was no match for stout oak, reinforced by carefully tarred steel on the forward side, driven into it by the weight of the Alcarondas.

    The two halves of the boom were pushed outward and forward from the bow of the ship, the anchors dragging along the bottom where the cables hadn't torn. One of the sloops followed the Alcarondas, it's crew receiving a pair of lines from the ships crew and coming up on the side to help the greater vessel turn. Cirion could see her already shifting and reducing her sails to slow down and help the rudder work. The other rowed sloop was attacking the broken up boom. With several anchor cables cut and with the northern third of it on its own the construction was pitifully vulnerable to the assault from a maneuverable boat and the axes of its crew. More cables were cut, and next the many layers of rope that held two pontoon sections together, allowing it to follow with the waves to lessen the risk of damage from rough weather. A large section of the boom broke free and was starting to float towards the innermost part of the bay and the mouth of the river, the wind currently being stronger than the current.

    Cirion felt himself smiling. It was odd. When had he last done that? He could not remember. He could see the other ships nearing slowly, having already hoisted their sails. With just a bare, bare minimum of fortune the orcs could be held off long enough for the townspeople to embark. They couldn't be multitudes like the people of cities like Dol Amroth, and merchant vessels could take a perplexing amount of cargo for their size. Now, with the sloops to help them maneuver and so short a distance to cross, they would hardly need any provisions and could load more people than would be safe under common circumstances. Cirion decided that he could do with some bread and drink, even the stale and dull kind that he had to make do with these days. He would bring his spare cloak that he used as blanket as well and sit down to watch the sun set over the bay and his kinsmen in the distance across the bay. For once, Malthur would not despoil the day.

    As he thought about the orc chieftain, Cirion looked around for him. He wasn't worried, not really. There was no way Malthur could turn this around. There. The orc was standing on the shore along with a group of captains, seemingly giving orders. He looked collected, but that did not say much for Cirion knew that he was capable of great focus of his wrath even when he was furious. He shook his head. No, he was just being paranoid. Now he would get his cloak.



    The evening passed without incident and the orcs made no visible attempt to reclaim or repair the bridge or otherwise attack the Gondorians. Cirion sat up until the sun had almost set and watched the ships in the distance and what he imagined must be the people preparing to embark the next day. Despite the warming sights, sleep did not come quickly and he dreamt of something unknown threatening, watching and casting its shadow over him. When he awoke it was still dark, not yet dawn and the air was thick with mist, wet and sticky. He wondered if he could roll over and go back to sleep but he was too cold, and something gnawed at his mind. He could not put his finger on what it was. It was something like a hangover after a fine and very late feast, when the bleak daily routines came back pounding on your door. Sighing, Cirion rose and wrapped his cloak tight around him. He saw movement ahead of him and squinted in the dim light. Orcs were hurrying to the shore. What did that mean?

    Cirion followed them to the slope next to the sand and rocks bordering the water. There were a lot of movement on the shore and he could hear the splashes from the orcs rafts as well. It seemed as if they were doing something with the bridge, were the orcs dismantling it? For some time he could not make more sense of it but the fog was lifting and the wind was starting to increase and Cirion could see further. The bridge was intact in itself but the orcs seemed to be removing the rope for the anchor cables. That made some sense of course, the thick rope was precious for an army relying so heavily on siege equipment. But something felt wrong. Why were they bringing the poles used for fastening in the shallow water ashore as well? Cirion walked closer, straining to hear what was going on. He could not distinguish among many of the orcs, one hateful grunting sounding much like the other, but he recognized Muzuls voice, Malthurs second in command and seemingly most trusted captain. As much as orcs trusted anyone, that was.

    "Right lads, hold it steady! Steady! So! Better! Come on then, you slugs, tar it up!

    Tar. What the hell was going on?

    Orcs were scampering out on the bridge, held steady mostly by other orcs pulling a couple of lines tied to the shore end of it. They carried with them the cauldron-like pots used for the tar when the army prepared the catapults flaming ammunition. Some of them, in characteristic impracticalness of the mindless thrall, started pouring the tar on the bridge closest to the shore, even before the orcs further out had completed their task. More pots were being handed out from further inland. It seemed that some large enterprise was in motion. Now Cirion could smell the characteristic scent of the tar in the air. Soon large parts of the boom had been covered in thick string of tar and the orcs hurried ashore, taking care to avoid the unpleasant substance. Muzul was shouting new orders.

    "Don't slacken off, maggots! Are the poles up on the right side? They better, or I will have your filthy hides! Now, nice an' steady, let it slip out!

    Cirion noticed that the ropes were not tied to the boom but ran around poles on it. Now when the orcs let go of one end the pontoons, let loose from the anchors and poles on the inner side, started to drift out into the bay, like a gate hinged on something further out. As if to confirm his line of thought, Muzul spoke to the orcs returning from the bridge.

    "Are the lazy maggots ready out there?"

    "Aye, and we cut the rope almost through and tarred soaked it in tar we did, so they just have to tickle it to break through when it's time."

    "They better, if they know what's good for 'em!"

    Cirions mind was working now, his reasoning part drawing conclusions on its own while the rest of him felt a cold dread creeping up. The boom was turning now slowly, and would do so until it was lying parallel to the orcs and Gondorians' sides of the bay. Then someone further out, who must be in one of their rafts, would cut the other end and the boom consequently would drift with the broadsides first. And the wind carried it east...

    "A pretty sight, ain't it?"

    Cirion twitched and his cold neck muscles strained from the sudden jerk. He had been so lost in thought that Malthur had appeared behind him, his heavy footsteps and his bodyguards sounds dampened by the wet.

    "And it's gonna get even finer. Watch."

    "Muzul! Are you gonna light that campfire up this year or what!" Malthur bellowed to his captain but in a good-humored tone. Muzul looked around.

    "I was thinking we wait 'til its straightened out?"

    "Nah, it's enough as it is. Doesn' matter if one end hits them before the other, it might even cut 'em off if the outer end comes at 'em first."

    "Yes, chief. You there! Light it up! And don't miss now, you filthy rats!"

    Uruk archers waited around several fires. They now each ignited their arrows and took aim at the pontoons. Most of the arrows hit, and after a second volley Cirion could see fires spreading despite the lingering mist.

    "The boys out there on their little raft will have a little surprise now." Muzul did not sound particularly concerned.

    "Heh, that's right. Well, now they will know for sure that it's time to cut the cables..."

    "Is Lugduf ready?"

    "Eager as a warg. If not, he'd still have one hell of a wake up call when he sees this little torch."

    "Not to mention the tarks. Ha!"

    "Hehe... Ah, Cirion! Come here!"

    Malthur seemed deceptively cheerful. Cirions mind was grinding. They were sending a gigantic wall of flame against the Gondorian ships, anchored near the shore and perhaps already loading up with goods and people. If it did not burn out before it had drifted across the bay, and if the mariners in their fast sloops could not catch and tow the wretched thing away, if the crews could not get their vessels out of the way...

    "What do you think, whiteskin? Will this be enough to catch our hated enemy?" The tone was venomous and it was crystal clear that Malthur was aiming a kick at Cirion resentful behavior lately with this reminder that Cirion after all marched under the banner of Mordor and nothing else. Cirion felt his heart beating. The burning pontoons had not reached the far shore yet. It was not over.

    "The wind is yet weak. There would be a poor mariner that could not out-navigate a drifting bridge."

    Malthur nodded, with demonstrative thoughtfulness.

    "My thoughts exactly! But luckily we have prepared this nice little bunch of rafts as well! It is high time to launch them, wouldn't you say? See, we learned to keep track of the wind when chasing your little ranger fellows in that cursed wood on the east side of the river. Helps to know if you can count on catching the scent of ‘em or not before they nail you into a bramble twig. And it turns out that the wind comes from the west here as well as there right after it’s lightening up.”

    Cirion knew he was right. Apart from the White Mountains that acted as a northern border there were not much in the way of hills or highlands to obstruct the wind in Gondor. The sea breeze blew from the west in the morning most days, and carried the scent of water even into Minas Tirith. It was another reason why the dawn and morning was so appreciated and filled with hope and encouragement.

    “Now, I ain’t no master sailor but as far as I am aware, if the wind blows one way, stuff on the water will float that way.”

    The orc chieftain pointed to their right, towards the inner bay. In the mist could be seen the lights of fires disappearing as the rafts the orcs had been building during the last days were drifting across the bay. Cirion could hear his heart, and his breath. He wondered why the orcs didn't. Those rafts, could the mariners dodge them all? Could their fires last across the bay, in the fog, or would they burn out in time?


    Had this cursed, damned, fiendish murderer known all along that Gondor would send a fleet to try to rescue her people in the marshes, or had he merely prepared for a likely eventuality? Which was worse? Cirion could not stop his breath from quickening despite standing still. This was intolerable, unbearable, the world did not deserve to have to breathe the same air as that monster!

    "Of course, the whiteskin sailor boys may be able to handle the little torches on the lake..."

    Cirion very much doubted that. The rafts were not connected to each other like the remains of the pontoon bridge but each would have to be collected and towed away individually, if that could be done at all with the burning tar. And the merchant vessels were spacious, not fast and nimble.

    "...but I would hazard the guess that the good citizens of the swamp might find that quite interesting to watch. So interesting in fact, that Lugduf and his lads can sneak in, in the meantime!"

    The orc was right about that as well. Some soldiers would keep watch dutifully, professionals and veterans among the militia. The greater part would be busy loading the ships and their hearts would be into that, thinking of safe shores and warm beds across the river. Then the rocs would take it all away. Their hope stolen, despair brought to them for the sake of it. His breath sounded as a smithy's bellow. He could not see his left or his right.

    "In fact, we reached firing range about yesterday, but why hurry? Now, we had the time to add a few ramps for those rock lobbers. Maybe they can reach all the way to the bay, in fact! Ain't that an exciting thought!"

    So he had managed that as well. Balls of fire would rain across the palisades of the Gondorian camp, spreading panic no doubt as they came out of nowhere. And a hastily erected wooden wall in swampy ground would not last long against neither catapults nor even a crude battering ram. Did it matter what you did anymore, would that hateful malicious thing always win? Cirion felt himself take a step forward. Curious. Why had he done that? Was there any reason for it that mattered? He was busy just trying to breathe properly. He took another step. His eyes saw nothing but Malthur, with his back turned on him.

    He thought of the first rafts, coming in sight out of the fog. He thought of the first flaming rocks, falling eerily out of the obscured sky.

    His hand was seeking his belt on the right side. His hand found the dagger he carried. The dagger that had claimed the life of Taemes. No, the dagger with which he had murdered Taemes.

    Time had slowed down. Did it even flow? He could see the rust stains of Malthurs chain mail that covered the lower back, the slight bending of the rings on one side. He saw the drops of water on the iron plates that added protection to the orcs neck.

    He felt his hand grasp the hilt and draw the dagger out. He felt his left hand grasp it on top of the right. It was a soldiers dagger, straight and pointed, made to penetrate armor. It was a good and artful piece of craftsmanship made by good and honest craftsmen. It was worthy of a better hand to hold it.

    He could not hear anymore. He would soon be out of time when his heart broke his ribcage and when he ran out of breath.

    Bent rings. On the side of the spine.

    One more step.

    His shoulders tensed, to give his arms solid support to work with.

    His hands tensed, digging into the daggers haft.

    His arms came forward and he drove them on with his legs and his back.

    He felt the tips connect with the mail and come through. He felt it stop and slip on something, and it screeched like metal tearing against metal. Slowly, as when one blinks many times and sees something happening as if it was shown on many pictures, he saw his dagger as it kept gliding sideway into the mail, widening it. Under the black and filthy rust glimmered steel.

    Gondorian steel.

    Good and artful piece of craftsmanship made by good and honest craftsmen.

    The orc chieftains reflexes reacted, and he turned his upper body so it angled away from the dagger while in the same motion slashing backward and downward with his other arm and knocking it off course.

    Cirion staggered and lunged forward with his right leg to regain his balance. He heard or felt something moving behind him. All went black.

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    It's good to see that Cirion has finally taken some action against his tormentor and in the process is regaining his honour (in my eyes at least). It's a pity he did not even wound the bastard. It is yet to be seen if he pays for it with his life or not. Is there nothing that can stop this bastard of an Orc.

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    It's good to see Cirion having something to smile about - and to watch Malthur's ingenuity and ability to turn a losing position into a hellish nightmare for Mordor's enemies. It seems that, unless Gondor has someone who can out-think Malthur, the Kingdom of Gondor will fall.

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    I did not see this coming -- it was all a rescue mission to evacuate the town! A great post.
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    It sounds like Cirion is right about the function of the bridge. Considering what the orcs have done with the crude, hollow crates, I wonder if the attempt to ram the boom will have a different result than the ship's captain hopes for. An exciting update!
    Indeed, it could work out quite differently if the pontoon is stronger than in the following episode. I don't think a warship like a caravel (which is what the Alcarondas is based upon) would take serious damage since the bow was made of such strong wood, more likely the anchors would be dragged along the bottom and the pontoon bridge would buckle as it is made of several parts and somewhat flexible.
    It's good to see that Cirion has finally taken some action against his tormentor and in the process is regaining his honour (in my eyes at least). It's a pity he did not even wound the bastard. It is yet to be seen if he pays for it with his life or not. Is there nothing that can stop this bastard of an Orc.Great chapter.
    It is an interesting situation when the audience both appreciate the story as well as look forward to the elimination of its protagonist.Good for Malthur that he found that armor of Gondor (+3 hit points) in chapter II.
    It's good to see Cirion having something to smile about - and to watch Malthur's ingenuity and ability to turn a losing position into a hellish nightmare for Mordor's enemies. It seems that, unless Gondor has someone who can out-think Malthur, the Kingdom of Gondor will fall.
    Yes, things look somewhat bleak now... It seems Duinhir and the Blackroot rangers had the right idea but something made him risk it all in a field battle, presumably to assist the more conventional force of Pilimor.
    I did not see this coming -- it was all a rescue mission to evacuate the town! A great post.
    There was maybe a tiny hint in the chapter before about the orcs constructing additional rafts but, as commented earlier in the thread, those could have been used for many different purposes. Perhaps the Middle Earth anthropho...orctrophologists most reasonable working hypothesis of uruk chieftain behaviour is to always assume sadistic pyromania until proven otherwise?
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    Quote Originally Posted by Maltacus View Post
    Indeed, it could work out quite differently if the pontoon is stronger than in the following episode. I don't think a warship like a caravel (which is what the Alcarondas is based upon) would take serious damage since the bow was made of such strong wood, more likely the anchors would be dragged along the bottom and the pontoon bridge would buckle as it is made of several parts and somewhat flexible.
    It is an interesting situation when the audience both appreciate the story as well as look forward to the elimination of its protagonist.Good for Malthur that he found that armor of Gondor (+3 hit points) in chapter II.
    Yes, things look somewhat bleak now... It seems Duinhir and the Blackroot rangers had the right idea but something made him risk it all in a field battle, presumably to assist the more conventional force of Pilimor.
    There was maybe a tiny hint in the chapter before about the orcs constructing additional rafts but, as commented earlier in the thread, those could have been used for many different purposes. Perhaps the Middle Earth anthropho...orctrophologists most reasonable working hypothesis of uruk chieftain behaviour is to always assume sadistic pyromania until proven otherwise?
    well done again especially the time flow stop part and I second the comments you quoted

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    well done again especially the time flow stop part and I second the comments you quoted
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    Chapter VIII - VII

    "Spread out! Form lines!"

    The air was tense. The dusty road just southwest of Tir Ethraid shook under the boots of thousands of uruks and dozens of mountain trolls. Malthurs army was coming to lines of battle with the routine from years of campaigning. Further back, out of sight for some time, was Gorbag with yet another reinforcing column. They would not be able to assist before the days business was settled anyways. Was that intentional?

    The orc chieftain barked at some too slow archers to get to their places and then turned his thoughts to Gorbag again. He had been even more brooding and troubled since they rejoined forces several days ago. While being suitably impressed with the sight of Umbars treasures and the heavily laden columns of supplies and other loot, and as eager as ever to share a drink, there was something more that hung over him than last time. No amount of goading could get it out of him. Now, black banners had been sighted and a good deal of riders as well. They were Haradrim, most of them, the scouts said but some were dressed all in black and with heavier plate than the serpent guard. Malthur was sure of what that meant. Black Numenorians, and the wretched little maggot dirt flea of a mouth in command of them no doubt. And the Haradrim would then consequently be the Grand Flaming Worm Khuzaymah, too cowardly to defend his lands and preferring to lick the boots of Foulfang in exchange for Mordor butchering his rivals at home and letting him stay on the throne.

    So Malthur had formed battle lines. If there was some sort of foolish trap set by Foulfang he would not be caught unprepared, and the little snake could sweat at the thought of Malthur actually attacking. Perhaps he should. He despised that creep, like all the black tarks that claimed to be anything else than tarks, and turncoat tarks as well. But not even his trolls could match the speed of a scared horse, so it was likely that some of the riders would escape north and tell of what had transpired. Would his influence be enough to handle that? Possibly. Pin it on the Haradrim having attacked, infighting in the other force that he came to assist against? It could work. It would not work because the lie was believable or not, it would work if the liar was powerful enough for the listener to turn a blind eye to the possibility that it was a lie and that it would be called out as such. Truth belonged to those strong enough to claim it, like any other loot.

    The other army, they were after all not the enemy quite yet, had not formed up for battle but stood more as if on a parade ground or inspection. The scene gave the impression that they were waiting for something. What could that be?

    For a moment, Malthur feared that he had let himself be lured into an ambush. Was that deceptively unprepared army ahead the bait? Could the Haradrim have some hitherto unseen reserve, the last strike of vengeance of the southrons? The ground around was hilly, there was ample opportunity to hide large forces. Could Gorbag be in league with them, was that why he was staying back and brooding? Perhaps he should reform to a square in case of attacks from the flanks or rear...

    No, enough. If there was an ambush they would be crushed like any other flaming weakling they had faced. He was getting twitchy. Truthfully, he had felt damn jumpy ever since the cursed whiteskin took that stab at him. Owing his life to tark plate did not sit well with Malthur. He had underestimated the whiteskin. If he hadn't kept his armor concealed and the thrust had come in a place with just the standard uruk mail and plate...

    "Chieftain, look! Riders on the ridge behind the army ahead."

    Riders in black. How many?

    Why did Malthur suddenly feel cold with the scorching sun high in the sky? And why did it seem to shine lesser...



















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    EPIC CLIFFFFFHANGER I WANT MOAR!!!
    no seriously I felt a little bit betrayed with the cliffhanger since you have done such a great work with the last row of pictures
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    Malthur has reached such a level of noteriety that Sauron has sent the bloody Witch-King on his tail. I can only imagine what that means. I like how you show the twitchy nature of the Orcs by portraying Malthur's worry about almost getting killed.
    As always a great update and I await the next chapter with great anticipation.

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    EPIC CLIFFFFFHANGER I WANT MOAR!!!no seriously I felt a little bit betrayed with the cliffhanger since you have done such a great work with the last row of pictures
    sadly I can only give one rep
    A sentiment echoed by my family when i stop reading a book at a very exciting and tense part of the story, which I have the bad habit of doing, and one that will no doubt find much support. Next part is halfway done so hold out and endure like...something other than Gondor.
    Malthur has reached such a level of noteriety that Sauron has sent the bloody Witch-King on his tail. I can only imagine what that means. I like how you show the twitchy nature of the Orcs by portraying Malthur's worry about almost getting killed. As always a great update and I await the next chapter with great anticipation.
    Indeed, upper management is not happy, the grumpy sods. Like, can't an honest double-crossing orc go around insulting the mouth anymore? Or steal armies when it suits him?

    On a sidenote, the witchking is not the easiest to portray. He has extremely few lines in the books and his background apart from ruling Angmar and leading the nine is essentially unknown. How does the guy express himself? How would he go about giving orders, explaining things to dimwit minions, insult upstart chieftains?
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    I enjoyed Malthur's suspicion of Gorbag's intentions and his worries about what might be happening.

    The arrival of the mysterious riders was well done. There aren't very many of them (not even ten) so they're probably not important.

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    +rep just for the sequence of pics at the end. Not the same as a video -- better!

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    Impressive! And this sentence particularly: "Truth belonged to those strong enough to claim it, like any other loot." Can't rep you for now but I'll be back.
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    I enjoyed Malthur's suspicion of Gorbag's intentions and his worries about what might be happening.
    The arrival of the mysterious riders was well done. There aren't very many of them (not even ten) so they're probably not important.
    No, what could they possibly do?
    +rep just for the sequence of pics at the end. Not the same as a video -- better!
    I'll see if I can work more like that into the story, then. I added it mostly as a fun sidenote to give nr. 1 a decent presentation and because I like altering pictures.
    Impressive! And this sentence particularly: "Truth belonged to those strong enough to claim it, like any other loot." Can't rep you for now but I'll be back.
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    Chapter VIII - VIII
    The lead black rider had flung back his hood, and a crown of steel he bore, but between rim and robe naught was there to see, save only a deadly gleam of eyes. The chief of the ringwraiths, who in ancient days came north with the purpose of destroying the Dúnedain in Arnor, seeking hope in their disunion, while Gondor in those times was still strong. The lord of the land of Angmar of old and the city of Minas Morgul of present day, he was known as the witch-king, and few beings in Middle Earth spoke the name without fear, fewer still would stand and abide even the rumor of his coming.

    The other army parted without any command before the black riders, who rode on without so much as turning to look at them. Malthurs blood rushed through his veins as the full meaning of the situation presented itself all too clearly. There rode Khamul and the rest of his hated spectral kin. He would give the command to fire, but how did you slay what had no life to start with? But then what? He hadn't intended to turn his back on Mordor and the dark lord, but rather continue to lead his army and preferably do so without the flaming interference and intrigue by maggots like Foulfang. So, he would receive the wraiths and present to them how a real army of the eye looked, not the motley rabble that they themselves had to make do with. And also surround himself with archers with flaming arrows prepared, just in case... Now, he should order the halberdiers to form lines along an impressive lane in the middle of his formation, where the archers would wait around him at the end as an honour guard, with braziers or torches for them to make it look ceremonial...

    The witch-king screamed.

    It was a sound that went through the ears, heart and bones of any who heard it, chilling hearts and sapping limbs of strength. Weapons were tumbling from numb hands and the uruk ranks, veterans all, shuffled back and crawled, seeking nothing more than to hide and cower from the noise. The orders died on Malthurs lips. It was not Khamul that was the great danger here.

    Unseen cold eyes looked down upon him as the wraiths rode forward, the witch-king first among them. His voice was a whisper, if a whisper could echo in your ears and drown all other sound, that was.

    "KNEEL."

    Numb as he were, Malthur still managed to glance to the sides quickly. His best troops were shying away, frightful and quaking. He would have no help from those blasted cowards. He felt his own fear, but along with it was the burning hatred for Khamul, the wraiths and their black Numenorians. He could not lift his hand without shaking but he could think. This was not his time, they were too strong. The orc chieftain knelt.


    "THY ARMIES MARCH HEAVILY LADEN WITH TREASURE, SLAVE."

    "Treasure taken from the insubordinate corsairs, now taught their place under the heel of the great eye. My army has carried out its orders, and neither the heat nor the southron snakes have stood against me, lord."

    "INDEED, THE MEN OF UMBAR ARE DRIVEN BY THEIR NEED FOR GOLD AND THEY ARE NOW DRIVEN TOWARDS THE ENEMY AGAIN. YET NO NEED IS THERE FOR YOU TO HOLD ON TO IT ONCE IT WAS REMOVED FROM THE LORDS OF THE CORSAIRS. RELIEVE YOUR COMPANIES OF EXCESSIVE LOAD.

    "By custom, my men and I would be allowed fair share of the plunder, my lord, would we not? We have marched many miles and paid in blood and flames for this loot. The proper way would be to let the lads have their share and present the rest to the great eye upon marching back into the black land.

    "THE SPOILS OF WAR DO NOT CONCERN YOU, SLAVE. YOU ARE INSIGNIFICANT, A SPECK OF DUST BLOWN BEFORE THE EASTERN WIND, A FLAKE OF ASH FLOATING ABOVE THE FIRES OF THE DARK LORD."

    "So are we to dump it all on the ground then?"

    "THE SOUTHRON LORD WILL RECEIVE YOUR EXCESSIVE ITEMS. MAKE YOUR COMPANIES READY FOR A SWIFT MARCH, ABSENT REST OR RELIEF. THE ARMIES OF THE DUNEDAIN PRETENDERS PREPARE TO CROSS THE RIVER FROM PELARGIR AND MARCH UPON YOU HERE. YOU WILL NOT BE DIVERTED. YOU WILL OUTMARCH THEM NORTH, AND YOU WILL STRIKE THE HEART OF THE ENEMY. GONDOR WILL FALL.

    Gorbag had been right, and more right than Malthur had thought possible. That flaming serpent! He would have nothing to show when returning, his command was running like sand through his fingers, the wraiths would be the ones leading the glorious advance west and stripping him of all but nominal command. Meanwhile the forced march would no doubt antagonize his troops and erode his position as chief if he wasn't watchful. How could he get out of this damned thing?

    "The whiteskin fleet will block our crossing of the great river. How shall we counter it, my lord?"

    "THE FLEETS OF THE CORSAIRS WILL FORCE THEM TO REMAIN TO GUARD THEIR SOUTHERN FIEFS AND A NORTHERLY WIND BLOWS AS WINTER IS COMING. IT WILL NOT AVAIL THE MEN OF GONDOR. MARCH HARD, AND YOU WILL MAKE THE CROSSING IN TIME. MARCH TOO SLOW, AND YOU WILL DIE.

    So the wraiths were well informed, or thought themselves so. Malthur did not actually know how well the corsairs had obeyed the great eye once he had left Umbar but left nearly destitute they had after all little choice but to resume plundering.

    "ONCE THE RUINED CITY IS CONQUERED, YOU WILL FORTIFY IT AGAINST ATTACKS FROM THE RIVER. MARCH, SLAVE. DRIVE YOUR ARMY NORTH."



    Winter was approaching. Even the mild southern Ithilien felt it, the rain turning to snow some days and the ground covering with frost. Yet it would melt a day or two, and the roads were broken up by the freezing and then melting to mud, after which the rains and then the iron clad feet of the orc broke it up even further. Malthur would march across the countryside whenever possible, but the recent years of warfare had driven every farmer or woodcutter out and the woods were spreading and blocking fields that had before been open. Thick bushes and saplings a couple of years old were taking over what had been crops and even villages.

    The supply wagons sank in the mud and the trolls slipped as they hauled the catapult parts. Orcs cursed and shouted, driven day and night with insufficient breaks for rest, cold bread and meat and colder tents, soaked through.

    Behind rode the ringwraiths at the head of Gorbags army and other troops of Minas Morgul. Malthur had discreetly let scouts fall behind and keep their eyes on the other force. The wraiths marched them fast with lighter packs than his and no siege train, and spread companies thin in a line to clear out any stragglers or deserters from Malthur. The effort was no doubt as much a message to him as a real effort to catch those that fell behind. Do not deviate. Do not even dare to think about disobedience.


    After passing the ruins of Ostithil, now used as a small supply depot, the highlands of central Ithilien awaited. Roads were no longer mud, but water, washed away by numerous small rivers and springs from the hills. Campsites became especially crowded as even ground was harder to find. At best, one could secure a spot where the water ran around and your tent kept somewhat dry, at worst you woke up in an overflowing ditch.

    Worse than all the rigors of the march, however, were the repeated and pointless inspections. Every day now one of the wraiths, but of course most often Khamul, would ride slowly along ranks of coughing and exhausted uruks, distributing insults and making a very visible show of ordering Malthur to fall in line with the rest and criticize one detail or another with his or his units appearance or conduct. The orc chieftain was sure that he had seen Khamul absently touching the hilt of a dagger once or twice, recalling the torment he had endured under the wraith after the raid against Ammu Khand years ago.

    Worst of all, the thing was working. Malthur could see his authority withering every flaming day. Especially since the inspections had not started until they reached the highlands and a long and dreary march had turned to outright unbearable, it created the impression that Malthurs leadership would in some way be responsible for the hardships and his superiors then forced to intervene because of it! Adding to that impression was the fact that the wraiths would actually take their time to question his captains about whatever problem this or that particular company had encountered. It did not matter how unfounded the complaint. An infantry company too tired from always marching in the back? It would be sent to the front, no questions raised about how the catapults would be able to handle the back position if infantry could not. The supply wagons too loaded and stuck in the ground? Someone else's troops would have to carry part of the load on their backs instead. All at the whim of the nazghul, and absent regard for the army as a whole. Not only was it transforming Malthurs disciplined troops into bootlickers and flatterers trying to slither their way out of their tasks, but it also undermined his entire organization and caused the army's condition to deteriorate further and quicker too.

    The end of the cursed march could not come fast enough.



    The orc chieftain splashed through the mud at the rear of the columns, where supply wagons and guarding infantry struggled to escape the mire that had once been a road. He passed narrow carts pillaged from the tark settlements, cruder wagons of Mordor as well as the broad but deceptively light ones from the south, all in a disordered mix loaded with multitudes of supplies. He noted that given the opportunity he would reform the entire operation before the next march and divide wagons according to types rather than have them remain with those who had managed to procure them.

    Among the last trailed a smaller wagon, loaded not with goods but a single passenger with his hands tied to the sides, slumping down with his head hanging. A small group of the human thralls accompanied it. The orc jumped up upon it and grabbed the prisoner by his hair.

    "The honourable host of Mordor bids thee a good morning, whiteskin! I hope you have enjoyed your rest for the day will no doubt be long. Beyond the ridge ahead lies the great river and the ruined city. Beyond, the white tower. Rejoice! We are going home at last!"

    The prisoner mumbled something only he could hear. The orc chieftain pulled himself closer and continued, voice filled with malice.

    "Care to know the flaming best bit of it all? All scouts report the river to be practically undefended. We will cross it. We will tear you. We will break you. We will burn you. And YOU. WILL. WATCH."



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    It seems Malthur's luck has run out. I love how you describe the way the Nazghul are creating distrust between Malthur and his troops. How fast these creatures fall back in their previous roles of slimey bootlickers. And is that the return of Cirion to the screen?

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    A good update -- to say with also a bit of praise. I did like the idea that a character is concerned because of what may happen based upon their positions but like a chess master looking over the board, Mathur sees not simply what is possible, but also why and how it is likely.

    My one minor critical observation - I get a bit confused who is speaking what. Not every quote need be labeled, but some would be 'helpful'.

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    It seems Malthur's luck has run out. I love how you describe the way the Nazghul are creating distrust between Malthur and his troops. How fast these creatures fall back in their previous roles of slimey bootlickers. And is that the return of Cirion to the screen?
    A great chapter! + rep
    The orcs are bootlickers to the core for the most part it seems, or maybe it is the same sort of frightened obedience that they have earlier displayed to Malthur alone, and this is simply his way of expressing his dislike for them turning to a new and more influential master. Slimy flattering for the wraiths or cowed obedience under the chieftain, a simple orc has to get along...
    We shall see if it is Cirion or not..
    A good update -- to say with also a bit of praise. I did like the idea that a character is concerned because of what may happen based upon their positions but like a chess master looking over the board, Mathur sees not simply what is possible, but also why and how it is likely.
    My one minor critical observation - I get a bit confused who is speaking what. Not every quote need be labeled, but some would be 'helpful'.
    I thought it was clear enough with the witch-kings lines in capital letters. Is there something else I am missing? I have told the story a hundred times in my head so I am the least qualified person in the world to say if the dialogue is easy enough to follow.
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    The reaction of Malthur and his army to the witch-king is well done. Like Turkafinwë and NorseThing, I enjoyed seeing how Nazghul are creating distrust between Malthur and his troop and Malthur's awareness of what is happening (and what's likely to happen). Like your other readers, I'm intrigued by the prisoner, I wonder if this is someone new, not Cirion. Based on the images, it looks like Mordor is sending several strong armies against Gondor's heartland.

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