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    Default The Song of Asnurn: An Epic Poem (Updated May 16 w/Book IV Part II)

    Hello everyone,

    This piece is related to my Tales of Acamar universe. It is an attempt to construct a piece of literary work which would have been important to its race's cultural identity. It is also my attempt to do some worldbuilding for one of the races only mentioned but never clearly shown, the Erdani. The Erdani were responsible for an invasion which devastated the known galaxy before the events of Tales of Acamar: Outbreak but for the most part the races they have come in contact with know nothing about them except that they are fierce warriors and conquerors.

    Thus, I imagined that sometime after the events of ToA: Outbreak that the Erdani and the other races have found a way to live peacefully enough so that there is much cultural exchange or Erdani have gained dominance in the galaxy. One literary work of the Erdani is an ancient epic poem called the Song of Asnurn written over three thousand years before their invasion. The Song of Asnurn was translated into the common language of the galaxy and was well received by the academic community. Here is a copy of that translation with footnotes:

    (No need to read Tales of Acamar: Outbreak to understand the story. Besides being in the same universe it is stand alone)

    Table of Contents Book IBook IIBook III
    Book IV

    Note: Hyperlinks for the footnotes don't work correctly so refer to the bottom of each post to see the footnotes.
    Im in the process of using the Jump and Anchor codes in place of the hyperlinks. Now each link in the post will take you to a footnote at the bottom of each post. However, you'll have to scroll back up to continue reading as I haven't figured out how to get it to jump back.
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    Book 1: Part I

    O sing, O muse of the struggles of he,
    Elkon, son of Dunut, the old Mad King1,
    After the battle of Maspaw where died
    Many a brave soldier and where Elkon
    5. Saw his defeat.

    Four days he fled as swift as the river
    When rushing down from the mountain high peaks
    It races for the sea taking no break,
    No pause until it reaches the end of
    10. Its journey. So did Elkon flee until
    He came to the vale of Polid where the
    Fortress of Yiloc did stand like a single
    Large stone in the center of a valley
    From where no one knew it had come but though
    15. Years had come and floods did rage yet still
    Did the old stone remain. Thus, in the old
    Fortress of Yiloc did young Elkon seek out
    Refuge with his remaining army of
    His loyal and best.

    20. There Elkon did sit and weep for the
    Loyal and best of his army which fell
    On the plains of Maspaw. Where once there had
    Been only the rosy pink of ula2
    Was now stained black with the lifeblood of the
    25. Erdani who fought proudly for their
    Glorious leader.

    Thus, while Elkon wept for his lost soldiers
    He cried, “O woe is me! O woe is me!
    Defeat and oblivion are mine to bear.
    30. For thus did the old Mad King strike while we
    Did sleep in tents like one who has just paid
    His debts and without worries falls into
    Contented sleep. O fool I was to rest
    While the Mad King did search for us like a
    35. Ona3 who once has found the scent of its
    Prey follows it day and night until it
    Attacks it unawares. Thus, did the Mad
    King to us four days hence and fell upon
    Us with such fury that I thought that god4
    40. Himself had set upon us.

    “The darkness was not natural that night but
    From the bottomless pit, Defoe5, it came.
    The palatable darkness pierced our hearts when
    The attack came. We fought the best we could
    45. But how can one fight what he cannot see?
    But yet we did until morning came and
    We welcomed it like a brother who has
    Long been gone and to whose return was much
    Anticipated so thus we welcomed
    50. The morning light. But it did not bring us
    The relief we sought.

    “Instead, its light revealed the disaster
    That had befallen us. Our brothers had
    Fell in the darkness of the night and not
    55. Were their numbers few. So thus, the growing
    Light of morning revealed our plight while the
    Mad King did laugh and praise his false old gods6
    And claim victory.

    “Then I seeing that all was lost did flee
    60. Like the esho7 which sees its herd attacked
    And thus runs with tail between its legs until
    Upon this fortress we came weary
    And downtrodden. So now we sit licking
    Our wounds but soon the Mad King will arrive
    65. And put an end to our vision. O woe
    Is me! O woe is me!”

    Now there sat near the brave Elkon, Spumot
    The Wise, the son of Pos. When he saw that
    The brave Elkon did weep and mourn for his
    70. Defeat, he spoke to him thus:
    “Elkon, my king, take leave from your sorrow
    And weep no more for your sorrow blinds you
    To the plain truth. Defeat we have suffered
    But worst it would have been without you, O
    75. Dear king. When the Mad King did fall upon
    Us all in the silent darkness of the still night
    And all around us did confusion and
    Terror rampage, did you not grab our most
    Precious battle banner and shout needed
    80. Encouragement to your loyal soldiers?
    And did you not with your glorious sword
    Cut into the enemy like one who
    Had been possessed by Apa8 himself?
    And also did you not when bright morning
    85. Appeared made sure we retreated in full
    Order?

    “Without your courageous actions my king,
    We would have been destroyed and left broken
    On the now black blood-stained fields of Maspaw.
    90. So while you do mourn for those who bravely
    Have fallen in battle do not let the
    Soldiers see your tears of despair for they
    Will like eja9 who mimic their great pack
    Leader in everything he does will fall
    95. Into despair and like leaves which fall from
    The trees are swept away by the blasting
    Wind so will your soldiers melt away when
    Next the Mad King catches us. Do not be
    Deceived. I used to fight for your father,
    100. And would still have fought by his side had he
    Not lost his mind. That is why what was left
    Of the Honored Council declared you the
    King of Asnurn10 and now the Mad King will
    Not stop until he has all of our heads.
    105. Now is not the time to despair but to
    Be moved to swift action. Dry up your tears
    And ready your mind for we have much to
    Discuss.”


    [1] It is still debated whether or not King Dunut was really mad or if he is portrayed as such to give the hero’s rebellion legitimacy.

    [2] A wild flower native to the Erdani homeworld. Grows only in the fields of Maspaw.

    [3] A predator on the Erdani homeworld known for relentlessly stalking its prey.

    [4] This refers to the god, Apa, which is the god of the monotheist religion of the Erdani, Apaism.

    [5] Dafoe is a pit which is said to lead to the underworld. Followers of Apa believe it to be the place where all spirits of the Erdani deemed evil will spend eternity and suffer for their evil deeds. Followers of Xal , however believe that all Erdani besides great warriors will go not to suffer but to watch over their families.

    [6] At this time in Erdani, history the religion of Lashe had only been around for about 150 years. The polytheistic religion of Xal was the mainstream religion of the time, however, during the time this story was placed Apaism was gaining more followers as the many were becoming disenfranchised with Xalism in what they saw as a corrupt religion. With the king being a Xalite and Elkon and the leading members of the rebellion being followers of Apa, the Asnurn Civil War was as much as religion as it was about who had the right to rule.

    [7] An animal from the Erdani homeworld that grazes on the grasses of the plains.

    [8] The deity of the religion of Apaism, the official religion of the Erdani

    [9] A grazer on the Erdani homeworld that has been domesticated for its milk and meat.

    [10] Asnurn was one of the seven kingdoms of the continent Kibo'r on the Erdani homeworld, Aeyari It eventually became an empire during which time this work was written down after being passed down by oral tradition for centuries.
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    Very nice. I think I'd like to read Tales of Acamar at some point now
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    Very cool! The beginning reminds me of The Iliad. + rep

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    Default The Song of Asnurn: Book I Part II

    Book I Part II

    Silence fell upon the room after Wise
    110. Spumot had finished his say. Elkon the
    Brave contemplated what his advisor
    Had said. After a few moments, Elkon
    Dried his tears and Replied: “O, dear Spumot,
    You truly are wise and faithful. I see
    115. Why my father before his wits left him
    Valued your advice. If not for your words
    I might have fallen into a deep pit
    Of anguish never to have climbed out of
    It again until the cold steel of my
    120. Father’s blade ended my life and left the
    Army destroyed. But now I see I can
    Not let the dark clouds of sorrow and pain
    Trouble me any longer. Let the door
    Be opened and the commanders take
    125. Council that we may see what is the best
    Course of action to take.”

    Immediately Spumot opened the
    Door to the hall where the commanders were
    Waiting to see Elkon and to discuss
    130. Their strategy. There sat twenty and five
    Commanders that had sworn their loyalty
    To Elkon and recognized him as king
    Of Asnurn. The commanders stood when the
    Wise Spumot entered. “Come now, my comrades
    135. And dear friends the king is ready to see
    You for he needs your mind and clear advice
    To bring us through the times ahead.” And so
    The twenty and five commanders entered
    The room where Elkon sat and bent their knee
    140. To their precious king.

    Then spoke prince Elkon: “Stand my commanders
    For we have much to discuss. The Mad King
    My father, will continue to hunt us
    Until we are dead or in chains. We lost
    145. Many soldiers at Maspaw and what is
    Left of our army needs a chance to rest.
    What should we do? Stay here at Yiloc and
    Fight when the Mad King arrives. Or do we
    Retreat further away from our enemy?”

    150. Thus spoke Elkon, son of Dunut, the Mad
    King. Then spoke Oshu, son of Exama, the
    Leader of the Hoterites 11: “Mighty king
    Elkon of Asnurn, there is only one
    Clear path and that is to fight our foes on
    155. The field of battle. Sitting here behind
    These cold stones of a broken fortress is
    For the weak and cowardly which none of
    Us would ever claim to be least of you
    Mighty King. Let us gather the troops and
    160. March to meet the Mad King for he will think
    That we are hurt too badly to give him
    Battle in the open field and when
    We march to meet him, his troops instead of
    The easy victory they expect to
    165. Earn, they will cry to their false gods for help
    In their defeat. And if it be Apa’s
    Will that we fall on the field of battle
    Then so be it. It is a better end
    Than to die within the walls of this old
    170. Forgotten fort.”

    Thus spoke Oshu, the brazen leader of
    The Hoterites. Then stood Mabol, son of
    Tov from the old city of Kor 12, leader
    Of the Korites and said: “I expected
    175. Such words from you Oshu who is widely
    Known throughout the rest of the camp for your
    Brazen actions in battle. But now it
    Blinds you to the reality of our
    Situation. The soldiers are still in
    180. Bad condition from their last battle where
    We fled from the field of battle like a
    Fug 13 caught off guard. If they go into
    Battle now with the memory still fresh
    Of their defeat within their minds then they
    185. Will break again and our defeat will be final.
    Instead of pursuing such a foolish
    Course let us instead fortify this fort.
    Is this not the fortress of Yiloc in
    Which the Imae 14 made their defense against
    190. The horde of the Ilu 15 and gained final
    Victory? I am assured we can do
    The same. Though she be old, Yiloc still stands.
    Should we strengthen her defenses,
    We will be able to hold out against
    195. The forces of the Mad King when he finds
    Us because he will find us. This will give
    Us a better chance of survival than
    The imprudent plan presented by our
    Brazen comrade.” Thus, spoke Mabol, son of
    200. Tov. Brazen Oshu of the Hoterites
    Was about to answer Mabol, son of
    Tov, when Siret, son of Womap, of the
    City of Zohow 16 stood. Thus, Siret the
    cautious spoke:

    205. Commander Oshu and my dear old friend,
    Commander Mabol have presented their
    Ideas for what we should do with the
    Mad King nipping at our heels but both
    I’m afraid will lead us only down the
    210. Road to disaster. Your plan is much like
    You, Oshu, bold but shortsighted. Mobal’s
    Criticism of your plan is correct.
    To fight the Mad King in the open field
    Would be madness as our troops are not in
    215. Fighting condition. However, the plan
    Proposed by Mobal is not a much better path.
    The defenders of Yiloc in years past
    Were prepared for the coming assault and
    Could have lasted, so the story goes, on
    220. Their stores. We have very few supplies to
    Feed and shelter the army as all our
    Supplies were left behind back at our camp
    During our hasty retreat. Also the
    Defenders of old Yiloc were fresh with
    225. Fervor and ready for battle. Morale
    Is low among our tired soldiers still
    Reeling from our defeat. If we stay in
    This fort and come under siege by the Mad
    King, be subjected to the barrage of
    230. Massive stones and flaming arrows, when the
    Soldiers start to feel the pain of hunger
    And their throats become parched, then like the
    Ajaw 17 which turn on their mother and devour
    Her so will the soldiers do to you and
    235. Turn over your cold corpse to your father 18!

    When cautious Siret had spoken thus, up
    Sprang Oshu the Brazen from his seat and
    With shaking fist said: “You give nothing but
    Criticism and point out faults in our
    240. Plans yet you have none of your own to give.”

    “Oshu speaks the truth, dear friend,” said also
    Mobal, son of Tov. “But what young Oshu
    Fails to see is you do speak the plain truth.
    However, unless you have a better
    245. Plan than either of ours then I see no
    Other action to take. So please tell us
    What do you think should be done?”


    [11] The Hoterites were from the city of Hoter in southeast Asnurn. The city was destroyed after the Asnurn Civil War and never rebuilt.

    [12] City in the central region of Asnurn. Is currently the capital of the Province of Dagoem

    [13] A grazer known for its speed

    [14] A tribe of the Erdani which invaded Asnurn but were repelled at least 150 years before this was written

    [15] A tribe of the Erdani which were rulers of Asnurn and ancestors of Elkon

    [16] A city situated in the very north-western part of Asnurn. It still exist today but is called Jirah

    [17] The Ajaw is an insect on Aeyari known for its venomous bite. Its young consume their mother for food soon after birth.

    [18] Mabol’s father, Tov, did not join the rebellion and joined Dunut’s forces while his son joined Elkon’s.
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    I suppose I shall have to wait for it to be published to read it then... a shame, I had just started it when you removed it

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    Quote Originally Posted by Shankbot de Bodemloze View Post
    I can heartily recommend it, it was a great series.
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    I suppose I shall have to wait for it to be published to read it then... a shame, I had just started it when you removed it
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    Book I: Part III

    Cautious Siret refused to answer the
    Challenge but upon being pressed further,
    250. Finally spoke thus: “You will not like what
    I am about to propose I assure
    You and I would never have suggested
    This but you press me to do so and so
    I shall. The soldiers are in need of rest
    255. And we need to gather more supplies. It
    Will not be long before we are found here
    By the Mad King and forced in a battle
    That will surely end in our defeat. I
    See only one path we can take and that
    260. Is to escape to Bequr! 19

    Upon hearing the words of Siret the
    Cautious, Oshu the Brazen, leaped from his
    Chair like a abu-jul 20 leaping at the
    Sound of rolling thunder and thus he spoke:
    265. “You are a fool and coward! Cautious they
    Say of you? It is truly not caution
    They see in you but cowardice. Siret
    The Coward should be your name. You want us
    To run from the Mad King?! You speak of the
    270. Morale of the men yet you propose a
    Plan that would completely destroy any
    That they have left! To retreat further is
    To admit defeat to ourselves and to
    Those who support us. Would you have us look
    275. Like cowards in the eyes of our people?
    Siret the Coward. That is who you are
    But do not have us become cowards like
    You.”

    Thus, spoke brazen Oshu and more would he
    280. Have said had not Elkon, the hunted prince,
    Stood up, his face dark with rage. “That is far
    Enough, Oshu! You are known for your bold
    Acts but you have gone too far this time. Take your
    Seat and close your mouth for out of it has
    285. Come more venom than the deadly noga 21
    Which can kill the greatest of beast with one
    Bite of its deadly fangs! A coward you
    Called Siret?! Was it not he who led the
    Rearguard during our last retreat?! Was it
    290. Not his spear which pierced the heart of the head
    Captain of the soldiers who gave chase and
    Caused them to flee in dismay?! Has it not
    Been he who has led the scouting parties
    Day and night in search of any sign of
    295. The Mad King?! A coward, you say!!! If I
    Ever hear such words come out of your mouth
    Again, Oshu, I promise that it will
    Be the last time you open it.”

    Thus spoke the son of Dunut, and Oshu
    300. The Brazen sat down in shame with rage
    Burning in his heart. Then Elkon, the son
    Of Dunut spoke again: “If there are no
    More suggestions I will retire to
    Ponder what we shall do. Shall we go forth
    305. From the safety of the fortress and meet
    The Mad King in open combat, or stay
    Within these walls still strong or do we all
    Retreat to Bequr. I see the need to
    Pray tonight to Apa that he show me
    310. What we shall do and tomorrow I will
    Tell you my decision.”

    Thus spoke Elkon and those who had gathered
    Save Spumot the Wise left to let Elkon
    Decide what choice to make.

    315. When the commanders had left them alone
    Spumot the Wise came near to Elkon and
    Spoke thus: “You should not have spoken thus to
    Oshu, son of Tov. He is brash and young
    But more he brings with him some of the best trained
    320. Soldiers in all of Asnurn. It would be
    Wise to watch the way you deal with the young
    One for he knows that should he turn coat and
    Join the Mad King not only will he be
    Reconciled to his father but can
    325. Do us much harm. He may not have spoken
    Aloud but years of experience has
    Given me the skills to read ones inner
    Thoughts. Oshu was considering whether
    Or not to threaten to leave our camp and
    330. Fight for your father if you did not heed
    His advice. To attempt to soften his
    Heart with words of apology now will
    Make you appear weak in his eyes and he
    Will take advantage of his position.
    335. However, be more careful with Oshu
    For your present and future life will be
    In the hands of those who swear loyalty
    To you. For thus, while they serve you they will
    Stand by you and protect your person like
    340. A mother esho who defends her young
    From the teeth of the predator so do
    Those who are true in their loyalty to
    You. But of those same that despise the oath
    They swore to you can do more damage than
    345. The swift river, Orias 22 that sweeps down
    From the Arias 23 mountains which swelled with
    Rain and ice dash through the plains of Asnurn
    Destroying everything in its path. So
    Thus, be wary of all who claim to be
    350. Loyal. Even of I who give you wise
    Counsel. For many a king would yet live
    If they had trusted less those they trusted
    And more so had they treated their vassals
    With the finesse of an old diplomat
    355. Than the roughness of a soldier.

    Thus counselled Spumot the Wise Elkon
    The prince. Then the son of Dunut replied
    To the once councilman of his father:

    “You are indeed wise Spumot and some of
    360. What you have said is true. Many a king
    Has fell by the devices of those he
    Trusted. I will be more careful of those
    I put my trust in save you Spumot my
    Wisest advisor. In you there is no
    365. Deceit or guile and in you I place my
    Life. However, when it comes to Oshu
    If not that we needed him I would cast
    Him aside like a farmer who when he
    Sees a rotten fruit in his harvest with
    370. Disgust casts it aside to spare the rest
    Of his crop. Oshu is ambitious and
    Thinks only of his own personal gain
    And glory. Even when we were beset
    By the Mad King and chaos reign within
    375. Our camp, while I tried to rally all the
    Soldiers to me, Oshu gathered his own
    Force and did not heed my rallying cry
    But fought on his own until the Mad King’s
    Numbers forced his harden soldiers to rally
    380. To my banner. How differently might the
    Battle have gone if they had fought by my
    Side instead of separately as if there
    Was a raging river between us both
    Which kept our forces from fighting as one.
    385. Then the brazen one sits in council and calls
    Siret a coward which is an insult
    Which strikes deep and hurts most the soldiers heart.
    Siret may be cautious, perhaps too much for his
    Own good, but his bravery in battle is
    390. Without question. I would rather have one
    Siret than ten Oshu’s, a commander
    Who thinks before he acts than one who acts
    Without thinking! But as I need Oshu’s
    Soldiers I will deal with him as you have
    395. Suggested but will look forward to the day
    When he returns to his city and I
    Will be able to deal with him as his
    Behavior warrants.

    “Now the night grows deep and I have yet to
    400. Petition Apa for guidance. Go and
    Rest Spumot for I will need your wisdom
    To guide me in whatever course Apa
    Decides to set for us.”

    [19] The kingdom of Bequr was on the eastern borders of Asnurn. King Dunut and Bequr’s queen, Kiyuya, were enemies as Dunut claimed part of Bequr’s western lands as rightfully Asnurn’s

    [20] The abu-jul is animal known for the way it leaps instead of walks across the plains of Aeyari. Found in most temperate zones on Kobo’r.

    [21] The noga is a venomous predator with a bite that can kill every living creature of Kobo’r except other noga though it only hunts grassland grazers. It lives in burrows underground and only comes out at night to hunt.

    [22] Orias River is fed by melting ice and storms that occur in the Arias Mountain range. It flows from the mountains through Asnurn and on to the ocean on the eastern shores of the continent

    [23] Arias Mountain range that serves as the western border of Asnurn.
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    This next update finishes Book I. Enjoy.
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    Book I: Part IV

    Thus, finished speaking the young Prince and the
    405. Wise Spumot retired for a good night’s
    Rest. Then Elkon arose from his seat and
    Walked out into the balmy summer night
    Atop the fortress walls. And then lifting
    His hands outstretched to the heavens he raise
    410. His voice and cried:

    “Apa! The great and only true god
    I stand before you, god of all gods, to
    Ask your guidance. I do not doubt that you
    Have set me on this path but I do not
    415. Understand why you have allowed defeat
    To beset me. Victory we have had
    But it seems that it was so long ago.
    Our last defeat was bitter and almost
    Complete. Even as he rode laughing at
    420. Our terrible plight, the Mad King cursed your
    Venerable name and praised his false gods,
    Reveling in the victory he claimed
    They were pleased to give him. Will you let this
    Travesty go unpunished? Will you let
    425. Xal and the fellow gods triumph and
    Let your humble servant be swept from the
    Face of the earth?

    “With heavy heart and humble tears I ask
    That you will intervene on our behalf
    430. And show us the way to victory? Shall
    We go forth to meet the Mad King and fight
    Him in open battle? Shall we strengthen
    Yiloc’s old walls where in times past you
    Gave our honored ancestor’s victory?
    435. Or shall we retreat to Bequr and throw
    Ourselves at the mercy of its fierce Queen
    Kiyuya 24? I pray you, please answer me
    If I have ever been in your favour!”

    Thus prayed the Prince and all who heard him, for
    440. The sentries stood watch for any signs of
    The Mad King, wondered at his prayer. “What pain
    And anguish fills his voice,” they said. “How can
    Apa not answer such a prayer. For if
    He does not we surely are finished and
    445. Our lives forfeit.” So while their hearts ached with
    Sympathy for their Prince their hearts melted
    At the thought of no answer from Apa
    And sealing their fates to die at the hands
    Of the old Mad King. So they each lifted
    450. Their hearts in prayer to Apa, god of all
    Gods to hear the prayer of their troubled Prince.

    And Apa heard the prayer of Elkon and
    And his faithful warriors, being moved at
    Heart, purposed to help the troubled Prince. So
    455. Down he came like lightning and stood before
    Elkon the Prince in the likeness of the
    Erdani, the blessed above all his
    Other creations both that grow and those
    Which are born. Clothed in shining gosod 25 of
    460. A soldier with qon 26 unsheathed and neth 27 held
    At the ready, Apa appeared to the
    Son of Dunut and spoke thus:

    “Elkon, son of Dunut, I have heard your
    Prayer of anguish and pain. I assure you
    465. That you will achieve the victory you
    Seek over your enemies but the path
    Ahead will be fraught with danger and pain
    For all who follow you. Your heart will be
    Broken by a loss of one you value
    470. Above all others. But do not despair
    When all seems lost you will be given a
    Sign by which you will achieve victory.
    Now steel your heart and gather your council
    For the Mad King is near and delay will
    475. Cause you your life. Flee to Bequr and the
    Mercy of Queen Kiyuya for there you
    Will find safety and help.” 28

    Thus spoke the god of all gods and then as
    Quick as lightning he returned to the skies
    480. Where he watches over all Erdani.
    The sentries on duty shook with fear for
    They did not perceive Apa, god of all
    Gods as he spoke to Elkon nor hear him.
    Only did they percieve the rolling of
    485. Thunder and the flash of lightning. Elkon,
    Son of Dunut, quickly ran back inside of the
    Fortress and the sentries quietly said
    Among themselves: “Indeed, the god of all
    Gods has answered our Prince but it was not
    490. With good tidings but that of impending
    Doom.” Thus, did the sentries think within their
    Hearts and trembled with fear.

    However, the son of Dunut, sent for
    His council saying: “Come at once for I
    495. Have had a vision of Apa, the great
    And mysterious and he has shown me
    What must be done.” Then went the messengers
    Throughout the fortress and told the twenty
    And five commanders and Spumot the Wise
    500. To come to council. As Elkon waited
    For his council to arrive he pondered
    What Apa had told him. “Victory is
    Mine but I must endure the loss of one
    I value most. Spumot the Wise it must
    505. Be for I value him more than all the
    Riches the world possesses. Oh my dear
    Friend and advisor must I lose you to
    Obtain my goal? I will not tell him nor
    The others of this for though it is hard
    510. A secret to keep I will not let them
    Fall into despair by such glad tidings.
    I will save Spumot from this fate even
    If I have to move all of heaven and
    Earth to do so.” Thus did Elkon purpose
    515. In his heart to save Spumot the Wise from
    Death.




    [24] Queen Kiyuya I was known for leading her troops personally to battle against bandits and the occasion raids Dunut was said to have sponsored in her lands.

    [25] Gosod is the name of the battle armor worn by warriors to battle. It consisted of a helmet, breastplate, greaves made of shax, a metal found on Kobo’r. Its accompanying footwear and other parts of the armor that required freedom of movement were made of the hide of noga which each warrior was made to hunt to make use of its hide for his armor.

    [26] The qon was the weapon of choice for many soldier. Resembled a curved sword with a blade made of shax and was made for slashing at enemies.

    [27] The neth was a rectangular shield made also of the hide of the noga and overlaid with shax.

    [28] This encounter with Apa would have been very important for its original audience. Its impact will be seen in Book II
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    When the council was assembled, Elkon,
    The son of Dunut, stood and all eyes were
    Fixed on him as he addressed the council:
    “My loyal commanders, Apa has come
    5. To me. Clothed in shining gosod with qon
    And neth ready for battle with a voice
    That sounded like the thunder which precedes
    The storms coming from the west he said:
    ‘Elkon, son of Dunut, I have heard your
    10. Prayer of anguish and pain. I assure you
    That you will achieve the victory you
    Seek over your enemies but the path
    Ahead will be fraught with danger and pain
    For all who follow you. But do not despair
    15. When all seems lost you will be given a
    Sign by which you will achieve victory.
    Now steel your heart and gather your council
    For the Mad King is near and delay will
    Cause you your life. Flee to Bequr and the
    20. Mercy of Queen Kiyuya for there you
    Will find safety and help.’ And with that the
    One true god return to his throne amongst
    The stars. We must make haste for Bequr or
    We will lose our lives.”

    25. Thus spoke the Prince but he did not reveal
    The fate of Spumot for he had purpose
    To keep it secret. Now stood up the young
    Brazen Oshu and spake:
    “You think we fools and witless that we should
    30. Believe that Apa, god of gods, would deem
    It necessary to lower himself
    To appear before a mortal when he
    Would not appear before the old revered
    Prophet, Lical 29. Is it not written in
    35. The Rara 30 that ‘no mortal while he still
    Walks among the living may see face to
    Face the glory of Apa for no one
    Who yet lives is worthy of that honor.
    For if a mortal did exist that could
    40. See Apa face to face and live would be
    Near to godhood himself.’ 31 Are you claiming
    Such a thing as godhood?! Did you think that
    We would follow you any easier than
    If you had simply told us you had come
    45. To a decision yourself?! I for one
    Am not fooled and neither should the rest of
    The council if their eyes are open. This
    Is just a ploy by one who is at heart
    A coward and wishes us to join in
    50. His cowardice. That is why he was so
    Quick to defend Siret earlier. Now
    He has shown his own cowardice in a
    Vain attempt to conceal his own. Listen
    Brothers! We should not allow ourselves to
    55. Cheated of honor and glory! If we
    March out to fight the Mad King and we give
    Our lives in the struggle then so be it.
    But to run like children who hearing the
    Roar of a boka 32 run crying to their
    60. Mothers is unimaginable for
    A true warrior! We shall either face the
    Mad King with honor or I will leave with my
    Warriors and seek the forgiveness of my
    Father for I rather be humbled and
    65. Face the execution block before I
    Dishonor myself or my men.

    Thus spoke the brazen Oshu before the
    Council. No one could speak, amazed at what
    Oshu had said but dark rage filled Elkon’s
    70. Heart and with teeth barred and qon drawn
    He would have rushed to Oshu and struck him
    Had not Spumot the Wise and Siret the
    Cautious not restrained him. Then did Oshu
    Mock the Son of Dunut and said:

    75. “It seems that I have touched upon the truth
    For you have jumped from your seat like one who
    Has been struck by the lightning of Apa.
    Now that I have uncovered the truth the
    It would be prudent for the council to
    80. Seek another course of action that will
    Not tarnish our honor. And furthermore
    I recommend that someone else who is
    Worthy of our esteemed loyalty be
    Chosen to lead us for the Mad King will
    85. Seek our destruction with or without him
    At our head. Let the Prince remain with us
    But let him take no part in council or
    Battle. He will be like a child who is
    Afraid of the dark runs to his mother
    90. For protection so will we guard the young
    Cowardly Prince.”

    Then spoke Elkon still dark with rage: “Foul and
    Miserable scheming wretch you are! How
    Dare you call me a liar and coward!
    95. I will end your wretched life this instant!”

    And this he would have done had not Spumot
    And Mobal restrained him howbeit with
    Much difficulty. Then there stood one of
    The twenty and five commanders who was
    100. Named Kolon, son of Heshari, from the
    City of Ketiyo and spoke thus to
    Oshu.

    “Brazen you are called and your actions show
    It to be true. To call your lord and liege
    105. A coward and a liar no other
    Here present would dare to do and to
    Talk thus to our Prince is most imprudent.
    If he says that Apa has appeared to
    Him then let us question him first before
    110. We label him a liar and a fraud.
    For I too have questions concerning what
    He has claimed for as you pointed out not
    Even the prophet saw Apa face to
    Face. But let our Prince explain himself to
    115. Us for I do not believe him to be
    Foolish enough to claim godhood or lie
    When it concerns our great god.”

    Thus spoke Kolon and he took his seat. The
    Rest of the commanders agreed with the
    120. Advice of Kolon and bid Oshu sit
    Let and Elkon the Prince explain himself.
    So Oshu like a noga who after
    He strikes lets his prey run away so that
    Its venom may more completely do its
    125. Work, sat with a sly smile to watch Elkon
    Defend himself.

    But Elkon hot with anger at his trusted
    Commanders disbelief wrested himself
    From Spumot and Mabol’s grip and threw his
    130. Qon down to the ground and exclaimed:

    “You disloyal and unfaithful group! It
    Breaks my heart and stirs my anger to see
    That you do not trust me, your leader. I
    Have never lied to you before or led
    135. You wrong. I do not claim to be a god33
    Like Oshu claims but I will not deny
    Any of what I have claimed to have
    Seen. If you do not believe me then let
    What Oshu recommended be carried
    140. Out and let another be chosen to
    Lead our cause. But I will tell you that if
    You do thus then our cause is lost and soon
    Like an eja with a broken leg who
    Will surely be torn to pieces by a
    145. Predator so will be the fate of all
    Of us. Do not let your lack of faith be
    The reason why our bodies lie broken
    And made the feast of fowl and beasts. Apa
    Has revealed his will to me and I have
    150. Revealed it to you. Why do you not
    Believe?!”


    [1] Lical is considered the founder and first prophet of Apaism. He was martyred for his beliefs by Dunut’s grandfather, Fivex.

    [2] The Book of Rara is literally translated into “Rule.” It is said to have been written by Lical before he died by divine inspiration. It is the source of all of the teachings of Apaism.

    [3] Book of Rara Book 13, Chapter 17, Verse 40.

    [4] The boka is a flying reptile that lives along the shores of the Orias. It loud roar was said to strike fear into the strongest of warriors. It is extinct today.

    [5] For the audience that this was composed, this was a scene of great importance. Kings of the past in Asnurn were said to become gods though of a lesser class than Xal pantheon. This was not the belief of the followers of Apaism and as Apaism was the major religion of the day, this is stressed throughout this chapter.
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    Default Re: The Song of Asnurn (Updated July 25 w/ Book II: Part I)

    Sorry I haven't been following this, but I just noticed:

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    Oooh! Didn't know about that. I'll try that.
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    The hearts of all present were moved and they
    Felt pity for their Prince for they said in
    Their hearts, “He has not deceived us before
    155. And there seems to be no guile in him. Let
    Us do as Apa wills for to not do
    So would ensure our destruction.” When the
    Brazen Oshu saw that the hearts of the
    Commanders had been touched he stood once more
    160. And addressed all gathered:

    “What is it that I see here? Are you all
    Being deceived by his pleading? Can not
    A desperate one seem genuine when
    In fact all he says is false. If we were
    165. To believe every passionate speaker
    That tried to convince us of the truth of
    His words would we not still be followers
    Of Xal and still fight for the Mad King?
    Did not the priests of Xal entreat us
    170. With tears to continue to pray to their
    False gods and did not the Mad King at first
    Come to us with open arms and friendship
    To stay loyal to him before his wits
    Left him completely and he declared us
    175. Traitors? Father like son some say and in
    This instance they are correct for he may
    Actually believe he saw Apa
    But it was all in his own mind. So shall
    We follow one mad prince instead of a
    180. Mad king?”

    Thus spoke Oshu and while he spoke Spumot
    Had stepped out of the chambers and returned
    With a sentry following him. After
    Oshu had taken his seat, Spumot stood
    185. And said:

    “We have heard you speak long enough Oshu
    Now let us end this once and for all. I
    Have here a sentry that saw our Prince pray
    To Apa and heard his words of pleading.
    190. Now let him speak that we may know the truth
    Of the matter.” And then spoke the sentry:

    “My lords, my name is Acavo, son of
    Yilun from the town of Spoz which is in
    Service to Lord Siret. Tonight, the watch
    195. Stood guard on top the battlements when
    We saw our Prince bent as with burden
    Standing alone with arms outstretched to the
    Heavens and with a loud voice pray to the
    200. God of all gods. When we had heard his prayer
    Our hearts were touched and we added our prayers
    To his that Apa might answer him. Then
    Suddenly, thunder sounded and lightning
    Flashed across the sky but no cloud was near
    205. For all the stars could be clearly seen by
    Us all. Then we looked upon our Prince and
    He stood transfixed like a man who has seen
    Some strange thing and cannot turn away from
    It lest it disappear. This went on for
    210. Sometime then as quickly as the passing
    Rain appears and then is gone so did the
    Lightning and thunder cease and the Prince turned
    And went back inside and we saw no more
    215. Of him but feared that Apa had given
    Him bad news at thought of which our hearts sank
    As we thought on our fate.”

    Then said Spumot the Wise: “Do you Oshu doubt the
    Truth of his statement? Did we not all hear
    220. The thunder and perhaps see the lightning
    Acavo has described? For I was in
    My bed asleep when I was awakened
    By the sound of thunder and was awake
    When the messenger came to fetch me. What
    225. Say you Oshu? From what the sentry has
    Described it has added to the truth of
    Our Prince’s story. Did not the Rara
    Also say that: ‘Apa came to me in
    With lighting and thunder and I marveled
    230. For there was not a cloud to be seen in
    The heavens1’? And in regards to what you
    Said before that: ‘no mortal while he still
    Walks among the living may see face to
    Face the glory of Apa for no one
    235. Who yet lives is worthy of that honor.
    For if a mortal did exist that could
    See Apa face to face and live would be
    Near to godhood himself.’ The Prince described
    Apa in the form of one of our own
    240. Kind yet in a more glorified state. Do
    Think that Apa’s glory is fully on
    Display in the form of an Erdani?
    We may be his greatest creation but
    It is the belief of the Xalite that we
    245. Are made in the creator’s image but
    It was Lical that showed us that Apa
    Was too great to be described. But did he
    Not write: ‘When he appears to a mortal
    I am convinced it will be in a form
    250. Of lesser glory than his true one.2

    “Thus, our Prince could have seen Apa
    Without claiming to become a god and
    I believe that he did. But you Oshu
    Have quoted the Rara to suit your own
    255. Aims. You eagerly and keenly seek to
    Gain honor and glory on the field
    Battle we would all agree we all seek.
    But you are blinded by your yearning for
    These things that you do not see beyond the
    260. Field of battle. You do not see that the
    Warriors are worn and tired. Even your
    Own warriors have not escaped this. To lead
    Them to battle is to lead them to their
    Death! You have tried to convince us that the
    265. Prince is mad and should be removed. Who will
    Take his place? You?! It now seems that you have
    Revealed yourself to be disloyal and
    Not to be trusted!”

    Thus spoke Spumot the Wise and the council
    300. Agreed with him and murmured against the
    Brazen Oshu. Then dark with rage, he stood
    With fists clenched and spoke thus:

    “Fools you are! I see that my words of
    Wisdom fall on deaf ears. You would rather
    305. Believe a lie than see the truth: we are
    Finished! Our rebellion was doomed from the
    Moment we decided to follow the
    Prince, who is just as mad as his father.
    And now his loyal cowards Spumot and
    310. Siret now try to convince you that I
    Am trying to deceive you for my own
    Ends. I will not let be trampled into
    The dust my honor. Spumot if you were
    Really wise you would have never tried to
    315. Blacken my reputation to save your
    Standing in the Prince’s eyes. And Siret
    Even now you hide behind the words of
    A sentry that owes you allegiance. You
    Are a coward through and through. And to you
    320. Acavo, how much were you paid to come
    Up with that tale? I assure you that no
    Amount of gapo3 will be able to
    Save you from my hand for like a bux4 that
    Sees its prey from the sky and sweeps down and
    325. Grabs it in its talons and feasts upon
    Its flesh, so shall I do to you and all
    Who seek to dishonor me!”


    [1] Book of Rara Book 1 Chapter 2 Verse 1

    [2] Book of Rara Book 6 Chapter 3 Verse 9

    [3] Gapo was the currency of the day for the three kingdom of the Plains, as they were called, Asnurn, Bequr and Konos. This made trading easier between the three kingdoms without having to exchange currency.

    [4] A winged predator famous for its keen sight and magnificent dives from the sky to catch its terrestrial prey.
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    At this threat, the council grew angry and
    Elkon would have run Oshu through with his
    330. Qon but Spumot held up his hand and the
    Room fell quiet again. Then the wise one
    Spoke:

    “Members of the council we must not do
    Anything in anger or in rashness.
    335. It is clear from what Oshu has said that
    He sees us as determined enemies
    Than the concerned allies we truly are
    For your anger Oshu will certainly
    Lead you down a terrible road. Now there
    340. Has been some things said here that were said in
    Anger and we cannot judge one who does
    Not have a clear mind but one clouded by
    Rage. Oshu, do you recant what you have
    Said against the Prince, Siret and myself?
    345. And Prince can you forgive what Oshu has
    Said and receive him back with open arms?
    If you cannot, then to remain at odds
    Will only weakened our resolve and serve
    To make our defeat certain.”

    350. Then spoke Elkon, son of Dunut: I will
    Not forgive the accusations that he
    Has spoken before this council. He is
    A traitor and should be treated as one.
    Chained he should be and executed!”

    355. The council agreed and would have done as
    The son of Dunut had said had not the
    Cautious Siret and wise Spumot spoken
    Against it. For Siret stood and said:

    “Fellow, commanders! Did you not just hear
    360. What the Wise Spumot just said. We cannot
    Make decisions based on our anger but
    On what would be best for our cause and our
    Warriors. If we were to execute the
    Young Oshu do you think that his warriors
    365. Will stand idly by? They will strive to
    Save their leader like a mother who sees
    Her offspring in danger battles to the
    Death to keep them safe, so will the warriors
    Of Hoter fight to save Oshu and we
    370. Will have done the Mad King’s job for him. I
    Too have much against the brazen Oshu
    For no less than three times has he called me
    A coward and blacken my honor a
    Injury he claims to be the victim
    375. Of. If he will not recant then let him
    Quietly leave the fortress with his force
    And begone since he no longer holds to
    Our cause for out of his own mouth did he
    Not say we were finished? This I pray you
    380. Is the wiser course for though morale will
    Indeed suffer either way, it is the
    Course that does not involve the loss of life
    Which the purposed course is sure to cause.”

    Thus spoke Siret and the council agreed
    385. With him though they still wished to see Oshu’s
    Death. But Elkon would not change his mind and
    It took all Spumot had to convince him
    Of Siret’s words. Finally, Elkon did
    Consent and Oshu was given a choice:
    390. To recant what he had said concerning
    The Prince, Siret, Spumot and Acavo
    And pledge his loyalty once again to
    The son of Dunut, or leave with the whole
    Force of Hoterites. Then stood Oshu once
    395. Again and addressed the council:

    “You have heard the Prince say that he would not’
    Accept me again and even if he
    Would I would not come crawling back like a
    Slave who fully depends on his master
    400. For his livelihood would lick clean his feet
    Of dust and filth. No, I will leave with my
    Warriors each one worth ten of any of
    The troops you now have present. Then when your
    Army crumbles under the strength of the
    405. Mad King, then you will curse the day that you
    Sent Oshu and the Hoterites away!”

    Then brazen Oshu turned and walked out of
    Room to gather the Hoterites. Now with
    Four and twenty commanders left, the Prince
    410. Now sought to decide what must be done. Then
    Spoke the wise Spumot:

    “My Prince, we must now decide the matter
    For which we gathered. I believe that I
    Speak for the rest of the council when I
    415. Say I that am convinced in the truth of
    Your vision of Apa. We must then make
    Haste and at the first light of dawn number
    The troops and then move with all haste to the
    Kingdom of Bequr. For Oshu may seek
    420. Out the Mad King and tell him of our plans.
    This makes haste most important, in fact, I
    Say we get the troops ready at once.”

    Then stood quiet Thutar, son of Qides,
    From the city of Lavoxi. “I agree
    425. That the council agrees with the army
    Retreating to Bequr but to arouse the troops
    Now will leave them in no condition to
    Make the march to Bequr. Instead, let them
    Sleep tonight so that they will be refreshed
    430. And march further tomorrow for though time
    Be lacking, tired warriors will not give
    Us their best and the advantage we
    Seek will be lost.”

    Then spoke the son of Dunut: “We will do
    435. As Spumot has advised but we will do
    It at the break of day as Thutar has
    Suggested. Now go and try to find the
    Sweet embrace of sleep while the night lingers
    Still. But do not mention what has occurred
    440. To anyone outside this room. That is
    The same for you as well Acavo. I
    Thank you for your words and promise you that
    You will be rewarded once I have come
    Back to Asnurn and beaten my father.
    445. Do not worry yourself with the words of
    Oshu for the threat they held to you was
    Empty and I do believe that you will
    Never see his face again.
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    Default Re: The Song of Asnurn (Updated August 7 w/ Book II: Part II)

    Alrighty! I added two updates that finish out Book 2. Now Book 3 will be a little different. For those of you who have read the Illiad you know that Book 2 is basically a long list of people who who went to Troy with the Greeks. I unfortunately decided to try to attempt something similar but I will not post it here as it is long and boring (maybe as in an appendix if I finish this.) Instead, this 'translation' will be an unbridged version with a short remark on Book 3 and its importance.

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    Book III

    When the light of the fiery sun appeared
    Again in the west, the four and twenty
    Commanders went amongst their troops, the best
    And loyal of Asnurn, who followed the
    5. Son of Dunut and began to number
    The warriors. These were their numbers, leaders
    And the cities from which they came.

    Spoiler for Author's Note
    The writer of the epic at this point begins to list the regions and cities where the forces following Elkon were from. First, the region from where the warriors are from is named and from how many cities, towns, or villages they hailed from along with what commander they followed. For example:

    "From the hilly region of Ispu were
    Warriors of seven cities under the
    10. Command of Siret the Cautious."

    Then the cities were named individually, how many soldiers came from them and who was the local leader who led them:

    "From the city of Gono two score
    15. And five led by Vajiwo, son of Vod."

    Once all the cities and captains were named and soldier numbered, the total number of soldiers serving under a commander would be given:

    "In total, all that were
    Under Siret’s command were five hundred
    One score and four."

    In this way, the author or authors, for we know not whether this was the work of one or many, catalogs the Asnurn warriors who followed Elkon. For a reader reading this thousands of years later, this third book may be a bit of a bore and in this edition of the Song of Asnurn for the casual reader it has been mostly removed but to historians and even more so to its original audience this book is very significant. For the historian, it allows us to better reconstruct the political and religious landscape of the times. It seems that Apaism and the general feeling of dislike for Elkon's father was rather widespread and not contained in a specific region. It also spans across economic boundaries as both commanders of high birth and peasants of villages are listed in the catalog.

    However, for the original audience it was something more. It allowed them to say with pride, 'My ancestor fought with the great king Elkon' or 'It was our city which provided the most troops to the Great King's service.' It is also markedly important that an official catalog of the army of Elkon's father, Dunut does not appear in the work at all much to the disappointment of historians. This silence is perhaps more telling of how the author and audience felt about Dunut and those who fought with him and this can be seen later in the work with Oshu and Hoterites.

    What follows is the last lines of Book III, which cover the ending of the catalogs and Elkon's departure from Yiloc.


    In total, all that were camped with the Prince
    At the old fortress of Yiloc were five
    Thousand, five hundred, thirty and nine.
    After the numbering of the army,
    The warriors were made to break their fast. Once
    They had finished their meal and they were
    Refreshed and when they were told to gather
    Their qons and neth for they were breaking camp
    Each eagerly did as he was told and
    As the sun reached its highest point in the
    Sky the warriors were assembled and each
    Ready to depart. Then stood Elkon on
    The battlements of the old fortress with
    The twenty and three commanders and spoke
    With a loud voice:

    “Warriors of Asnurn! The loyal and best
    Of our great kingdom! I have something to
    Share with you. You will have noticed that the
    Hoterites are not present the reason
    For which I will tell you. Last night, I had
    A vision of mighty Apa. He came
    To me. Clothed in shining gosod with qon
    And neth ready for battle with a voice
    That sounded like the thunder which precedes
    The storms coming from the west he said:
    ‘Elkon, son of Dunut, I have heard your
    Prayer of anguish and pain. I assure you
    That you will achieve the victory you
    Seek over your enemies but the path
    Ahead will be fraught with danger and pain
    For all who follow you. But do not despair
    When all seems lost you will be given a
    Sign by which you will achieve victory.
    Now steel your heart and gather your council
    For the Mad King is near and delay will
    Cause you your life. Flee to Bequr and the
    20. Mercy of Queen Kiyuya for there you
    Will find safety and help.’ But when I told
    The Council Apa’s will, the Brazen one,
    Oshu, revealed his unbelief in our
    God, the god of all gods and left with his
    Warriors in the night claiming me to be
    A liar. So now he rides probably
    To the Mad King to betray our cause which
    He said was lost. But lost it is not for
    Apa has declared that we shall gain the
    Final victory. Will you join me in
    This endeavor and see the Mad King brought
    To justice and the religion of our
    God, Apa triumph?!”

    Then with one accord the warriors exclaimed:

    “Long live Elkon, blessed is he above all
    Erdani! We will follow you to the
    Ends of the earth! May the traitor Oshu
    Meet the end that awaits all traitors and
    The same on all who follow him. Onward!

    Then there rose a cheer that shook the old walls
    Of Yiloc like none other since their old
    Ancestors defeated the Ilu. Then
    The inspired host marched out of the old
    Fortress with the Prince at its head leading
    The way to Bequr.
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    Book IV: Part I

    As the son of Dunut and his army
    Began their journey to Bequr, above
    In the heavens, the god of all gods sat
    In Council with the rona1 which had not
    5. Fallen2 when the dreadful Xal appeared in
    His black enchanted gosod and dreadful
    Qon. The rona assembled were taken
    By surprise at his presence since he had
    Not been in Council since he had left the
    10. Heavens to dwell on Aeyari3 and trick
    The inhabitants to accept him and
    The rona that followed him as gods.
    Now Xal stood before the Council and with
    A smile and mocking bow spoke thus:

    15. “Greetings most illustrious Apa, my
    Equal amongst the heavens4.It has been
    Too long since we have talked face to face in
    Council. Not since you banished me from your
    Court have we even been in each other’s
    20. Presence. We should have not let our conflict
    Cause such a division between us that
    It should have come to this. Our conflict which
    Ended in a truce5 between us has found
    A new home amongst the inhabitants
    25. Of Aeyari. Our followers now kill
    Each other over the status of the
    Divinity of the rona in our
    Unjust exile from the heavens and the
    Claims being the only truly divine
    30. God. Since our conflict ended, our exile
    On Aeyari had allowed us to teach
    The Erdani to worship all rona
    Including yourself as gods of equal
    Power. For thousands of years you sat by
    35. And watched and were content with what we had
    Done6. Then for reasons unknown you choose to
    Elevate yourself above the rest of
    Us and claim to be the only god through
    That prophet of yours, Lical. Now his words
    40. And writings are causing death and pain to
    Many in the three kingdoms of the Plains.

    In places where our followers are strong
    They are persecuted for their beliefs.
    Now I know it is not your desire
    45. Nor mine to cause undue pain among the
    Erdani. Correct their mistake and this
    Conflict of beliefs will fade away and
    Peace will exist again.”

    Then Apa, God of all gods, spoke thus to
    50. Xal:
    “Xal, a deceiver and bringer of pain
    And ruin, here you stand before me now
    Not due to your own power but because
    I allowed you to speak to me face to
    55. Face. Long ago, I trapped you in the depths
    Of the earth but the Erdani chose to
    Set you free and for disobeying my
    Command now fight to keep you out of their
    Hearts and minds. Though many have chosen not
    60. To fight you and let you consume their hearts
    Throughout the ages, always there have been
    Those who resist your calls to ruin though
    They have faced the brunt of your wrath and some
    Have even lost their lives but not without
    65. Reward. Their souls now reside in peace in
    The fields of Amnosh7 in eternal bliss
    In a place never to see the pain and
    Suffering you have caused on Aeyari.
    Your claims to be my equal are like that
    70. Of a child who when he loses a
    Child’s game whines and cries while claiming to
    Be the best. Compared to the works of my
    Hands you are as the dust one sees in the
    Light of the sun which swirls and spins with the
    75. Movement of the air unnoticed until
    It causes discomfort to one’s nose. Thus,
    Is your existence Xal and why you have
    Deceived the Erdani to worship you
    And spite my name.

    80. “However, your end will come upon you
    Just as sure as the sun and stars rise and
    Set. Thus it shall be: Your end will come when
    Those you have deceived shall all reject you
    And see you for what you truly are. Then
    85. Like the fire that sweeps across the plains
    In the dry season when the skies roar with
    My voice8 and consumes everything that stands
    In its way, so shall you be consumed at
    The appointed time and the rona who
    90. Still persist in their rebellion.”


    [1] Rona or lesser enlightened beings are beings created by Apa that serve him personally. They are described as being spirits who appear time to time in Erdani form as messengers of Apa and on some occasions warriors.

    [2] The stories say the rona, Xal, staged a rebellion against Apa with a number of rona for control of the universe. His rebellion was a failure and he was made to dwell within at the center of the planet with the rona who rebelled with him. They escape their prison with the help of the first Erdani male Apa created by making him believe that they were benevolent gods who Apa had unfairly imprisoned. With their escape Xal and his rona are blamed for have wreaking havoc on the Erdani race and their world ever since.

    [3] Aeyari is the name of the Erdani homeworld.

    [4]Xal claims that he and Apa are equals, Apa is just one of powerful rona which includes Xal that are over the other rona and beings of the universe. This an assertion Xalites believed while Apaism claims that Apa is not a rona at all but a higher power which created the rona, including Xal. The author or authors included Xal’s claim, which they would have seen as false, shows that this work was not merely an entertainment or historical piece but also a theological one as well for its audience.

    [5] The use of the word “truce” here has puzzled scholars as Xal was imprisoned after his defeat. Many now concluded that it was being used by Xal sarcastically while others see it as a mistake that was included when the Song of Asnurn was finally written.

    [6] A Xalite argument for why the Apa was not alone in his divinity. For thousands of years the Erdani worship a pantheon of rona as divine, which differed depending on region. The development of one as a singular god and the rest as not divine was relatively new phenomenon.


    [7] This was a place both Xalites and Apalites believed the good who died went in the afterlife.

    [8] “roar with my voice” Refers to thunder and lightning. Erdani believed it to be the voice of the gods which none could understand save a few chosen. In really dry seasons, lightning strikes caused fires that seems to set whole valleys and plains aflame.
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