Ok first off, I'm not sure if I should post this in here, it just seemed the most appropriate place, if its not welcome here, I'm more than happy with it being moved somewhere else. Anyway so I have to write a critique for University to compare and contrast two differen't cemetery reports, and I have just finished the introduction, I was wondering if anyone could read through it to see if it sounds ok?
Spoiler Alert, click show to read:
Thanks
Raradir