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Re: In the Light of Dusk - Chapter Eighteen Updated 25/06/2016
So... on the one hand, I feel bad for not commenting sooner. On the other hand, my lateness means I get to comment on two chapters at once!
You're making a great return, Tigellinus. Both chapters are excellent. If I had to choose (which I don't, thankfully - I can keep both ) I'd say that Chapter Eighteen contains even better writing than Chapter Seventeen.
You ask about single or multiple perspectives. For me, I think it's less about the number of perspectives than it is about the length of the chapter. If you're writing a really long chapter(as some of yours are*), I think changing the perspective provides a welcome break in the flow for the reader. Changing the perspective is a good excuse for changing the level of tension, or the speed of the action, and that can be a good thing. (It can also be useful to have a place to have a literal break; if for some reason you can't read a whole chapter at once, a change of perspective is a good place to stop, because when you get back it's easy to find where you'd got up to.) But if the chapter's shorter, then I'd say it matters less - do whatever suits the chapter.
*I'm not saying long chapters are inherently bad. They're not. They just don't work quite the same way as short or medium chapters.