Hello everyone!
I am currently writing an essay for one of my humanities classes (due tomorrow). The subject I've chosen is "How fast food affects health, self-esteem, and well-being".
What I primarily need help with is sentence structuring.
I will post lines from my essay from time to time and ask you, which would be the most appropriate way of writing it or presenting it?
Questions
1) At the beginning of my introduction I am trying to write a "hook or grabber" sentence.
This is my hook.
"We are living in fast food world; where French fries are as close to a salad as some people get". In the world today,
Is it good enough of an attention grabber and is it well formatted? Does it transition well with "In the world today"?
and does "In the world today" sound better than "In today's world"?
Any help is greatly appreciated
Update 1:
Another one of my hooks were "Eating fast food can kill those who are not careful". (I thought it was too direct)