Hmm, two sons, one very Romanized and one vary native and a daughter with a Scipio as her suitor - right, 3 way civil war, woo-hoo
So I've finally caught up with everything. It's taken me three days, so I have to blame you for two things! Firstly, I couldn't get my own update finished because I was riveted by this AAR, and secondly, I got very little work done yesterday. Damn you McScottish! Damn yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyoooooooooooooooooooooooooouuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu!!!!!
Seriously though, unbelievable stuff. Really well written. Rep it up son, rep it up!
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Under The Pax Publia – Summer 598 A.U.C to Summer 606 A.U.C
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Does it ever end, my young padawan?
I'll put this up for a vote...say yay or nay.
Who would like to see a continuation of this AAR, chronicling the further years of the Laenas bloodline and their further adventures?
Just to say, this current AAR is not completely over just yet, but I would like to know in advance.
So! Cast ye votes, oh weavers of fate.
as with all awesome AARs I would love to see this continued!
You've even inspired me to start work on my old AAR again and I've been writing furiously since 4 PM lol.
I just wish I could insert the realism in my tales like you do in yours
Okay, after much deliberation, I have decided that this will be the end, from the view of Marcus Laenas at least.
Still, apart from Boustrophedon (my ever loyal and dear reader), who would like to see a continuation of the tale from a different point of view?
Might even change the person (first, second etc) as well...not sure yet.
Yay or nay folks?
Well I think Marcus Laenas finishing makes sense unless he's to end up at 90! A continuation from a different perspective or timeframe would always be welcome.
Oh, and Boustrophedon owes you some rep apparently
Finally, finally managed to finish reading this most excellent tale!
McScottish, as I have said elsewhere, I have done myself a true disservice by not reading this when it came out. I now have to repeat the process with your new AAR too, but I feel four pages shall be a lot easier to get through than 8! There are so many things I liked about this AAR, where to start. Well, the fact you chose an auxiliary, and a true 'barbarian' at that, a Dacian, to tell your story is the first thing, because even though you are narrating a tale of Rome's expansion, you're not taking the usual 'Roman approach' which I find commendable and refreshing.
Secondly, the no picture policy. Admittedly, at first I had my doubts, but half way through I realised any pictures whatsoever would totally ruin your superb work. I can get a feel of what is happening in the Empire, as you are very informative about the politics and the borders, and I could 'see' where your Empire was going and at what speed, it was obvious to me you were playing a campaign game, and taking Thiacus, or Marcus Laenas, with you wherever you went. Your expansion, and the way you levied auxiliaries and handed back territories to former enemies reminded me a lot of my own Europa Barbarorum Romani campaign, which I have been playing for two years and am yet to finish.
Thirdly, you dealt with quite a few topics which I think are the hardest to write about for AAR artists. I really really liked the initial exchanges and the development of the love between Thiacus and Enike, I loved the letter she sent to him. You portrayed the 'family' and 'marriage' aspects of serving in the army, and indeed the loving bond that all humans aspire to, very very well, and that is often something that gets sidetracked if not totally ignored in most AAR's, precisely because it is difficult to write about. You even had the beginning of a sex scene at that, and a bloody good one too! Also, you weren't afraid to talk about the less savoury aspects of serving, such as being 'approached' by an officer that takes a liking to his own men, and not in the good way either. I was very surprised that episode(s) did not garner more replies, because these things did indeed happen in the Roman army. At one point an officer killed his superior, a crime that carried the death penalty, but was cleared of all charges when it became known his superior tried to demand sexual favours from him, this as far back as the 2nd punic war. So kudos to you for tackling that part of service, and bringing such an element to light in your most gifted writing style.
I only have two little gripes, the first one, which had been voiced by others and addressed here, is that I think you subconsciously wrote in a way that alluded to some form of conflict between Dacia and Roma, that Thiacus would have to make a choice, and in the end it was a little disappointing that this did not happen. What I did find interesting though, and which you brought up yourself in a reply, was the way Thiacus himself had been mentally and socially oppressed, being plucked from his land and made to serve Rome, and in the end, being all the better for it, a fact he himself acknowledged. That for me is one of the most fundamental triumphs of Rome, those that gave themselves willingly *usually* lead far better lives than before, should they survive to reap the benefits of service, while those that challenged Rome... well, go look for them now!
My other little grip was that towards the end, the last few updates felt a little short on the little snippets and episodes affecting the protagonist himself, like squabbling with fellow officers, talking to his friends, even developing new friends, etc. I understand that as old age approaches, life begins to get a little less 'interesting' but I felt maybe there was room for the little odd intrigue or two and perhaps a little less description of events - but it is all a matter of taste I suppose.
To finish off, your writing style is just superb, it flows, it gives just the right amount of detail, it's engrossing and always leaves the reader wanting more. A thoroughly enjoyable read I must say - also, I particularly loved the Star Trek references, in particular, the 'When the first chain in the link is broken' speech, which is perhaps his most amazing speech. I can't wait to begin reading your next AAR - Legacy of the Father, and I believe I owe you some rep for this fascinating tale!
Salve, and don't stop writing!
A true masterpiece McScottish! I'm probably one of those who, throughout most of the narrative, expected a gradual escalation of the conflict between the two mighty nations eventually ending up in a colossal conflict that would shatter the world of M. Laenas. But...I really liked the natural ending! Brilliant! No great deeds of valor, no heroic battles, just the life of yet another human being thrown into the greater story of the Empire! I particularly enjoyed his first days in service with all the learning of new customs and language and stuff, something that I believe every immigrant throughout history can associate with.
If I may be so bold, may I suggest you add the link for this epic to your signature? (I found the link accidentally) And perhaps a snapshot of your campaign map?
Now let me see where will you take this one next Oh, and you got one big +1 from me
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