Let me be the first to congratulate Juvenal and the rest of the team for this issue! Excellent job, everybody!
And I am truly honored by la coupe's review of the Chronicle of a Hungarian Freeman! I really liked the angles he picked for the review. It is always good to have others evaluating one's work, as it tremendously helps the writers improve.
[AAR] The Wolf Among Dogs - The Latin Empire *In progress* (Reviewed by HeirofAlexander)
[AAR] Primus Inter Pares - The Kievan Rus *Completed* (Reviewed by Thokran)
[AAR] The Chronicle of a Hungarian Freeman *Completed* (Reviewed by la coupe est pleine)
~ The Writers' Study ~ MAARC ~ TotW ~ The Collected Wisdom of AAR Writing ~ My work ~
Following the footsteps of Hesus de bodemloze and bringing Robin de Bodemloze along
Agreed; good job, all!
Good job team! I always enjoy reading your detailed analysis of others' (and one day maybe my own) work, it both inspires me and gives me tips to improve my own humble writings. Thank you all, keep up the good work!
I really enjoyed to write that review, and I'm totally impressed by all the work done by the other writers.
This edition is great, with a special mention to the Video article, which is so interesting.
All my congratulations to you Juvenal, to the reviewers, writers, and readers.
Let's have some numerical drinks together
Chapeau bas messieurs
May the Lazors be with you. BLARG!!!!!!!
Very nice. Thumbs up!
Spoiler Alert, click show to read:
Amazing job! I had not expected my story to be reviewed, much less in such great fashion. Stellar work as always, friends!
+rep to you all when I can!
My AAR Collection:
Heaven's Descent, Cyprus Reborn: A Crusader AAR (In Progress)
Accounts From Aragon: A Mediterranean AAR (In Progress) *Reviewed by Skantarios*
The Baltic Terror: A Teutonic Order AAR (Complete) *Reviewed by Radzeer*
Visions of an Odyssey: A Makurian Dynasty AAR (Complete) *Reviewed by Skantarios*
The Glory of Ostermark: A Call of Warhammer AAR (Complete) *Reviewed by Thermal*
The Normal Blood: An English AAR (Complete) *Reviewed by Nazgul Killer*
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Great issue guys! Love the breakdown of my vid. Awesome work! + rep to you all
I'm quite excited about it, and thanks for the review Carloginias. It's my second story so I have some ways to go but I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.
Quick thing though, you spelled Ronazia wrong, there's no 'z.'
Thanks for pointing this out to me. Just started reading "A Game of Thrones" and realized this point myself.Third, I think you are giving Henrick too modern of a vocabulary; words like ‘lame’ ‘work-out’ ‘strength training’ and others ruin the feel of the work as a whole.
I can understand that but that part really did happen, 8th floor of the library, a setting sun behind me, the hills were red, some birds flew up, and there are a lot of tall trees in the city. It's what inspired the story . If any cliches come after well... I'll try and do my best to dodge them but we shall see.Second, I get the feeling that you’re dangerously close to turning this into a clichéd piece of art; when I first read about Henrick glancing at the hills outside of Ronzania, I instantly thought Luke Skywalker and a myriad of other fantasy characters that I once read.
Also he's not in the guard or military, he's just a regular on the observation area and has had a previous run-in with the unit currently stationed at the spot he frequents.
I have many more things to develop and learn to make the story's world believable, as well as writing a story in of itself. Plot, characters, technology, politics, everyday life, etc. I'm not sure where I'm going to take the story but it's no world epic adventure Henrick the Barbarian.
But again I must say, thank you for reading it and writing a review of it for the Quill which I've never read until now. And do not worry, I do plan on continuing the story.
Again, many thanks,
I want to thank Juvenal for the Quill, and Skantarios for the review! I'm honored that anyone even reads my AAR, let alone chose to write about it. The level of detail in the review is pretty amazing.
I'm also glad that Skantarios hinted at how much work editing the family tree is; it often takes me 3 or more hours to create both the full tree and the smaller sections that list the birth and death years of every character, as well as the reigning years for Kings. I'm not always sure it is worth the time, but it's actually my own personal favorite part of my AAR.
I know that the battle pictures are a weakness. One problem is that I'm playing on a laptop with marginal ability to play on medium-high graphics settings. The other problem is that I hate pausing the game in a middle of a battle! It disrupts the flow too much and probably gives me too much of an advantage. I've tried to compensate for the shaky graphics by keeping jpegs uncompressed.
I have taken to heart advice from several commenters, as well as Skantarios, and I've finally learned how to use spoiler tags. Hopefully that helps with the readability and speed.
I really appreciate the constructive criticism, Skantarios, and I'll be updating again soon!
It is great to see people posting their thoughts here. This is the feedback that we at the Quill need in order to be able to improve our publication and to make it more useful to the TWC writing community.
Please feel free to discuss our work, the work of the writers we have reviewed and anything constructive you have to contribute about the Critic's Quill itself.
Thank you everyone!
PS. If you want to look at back issue of the Quill, you will see them all from the forum above this one.
It is always a good read, the ole' Quill. It always brings anyone up to date on whats being done great in the Writer's Study. Great Work.
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