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    Default New FF coming soon

    I may be new to this mod but I HAVE been playing for a couple weeks, so i'm going to be writing a Fan Fiction for the Holy Order of the Pale Knights. It should be done within the next couple weeks, well at least the first part of it anyway . Wish me luck and please feel free to criticize (preferably in a constructive manner)

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    Default Re: New FF coming soon

    i wish you good luck on this, i will surely read it.

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    Welcome aboard,and good choice! The Holy Order can be inspiring,and their lore contains quite some nice points that can be used as basis for expanding their lore. I'll look forward to this.

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    I'm looking forward to writing this, I should have a preview by the end of tonight.

    Knights of God is the title as stated in my sig, if somebody thinks they can come up with a different title then i am open to opinions

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    Good luck, I hope you stick with it and see it to the end. So many tales start and then just stop (I've been guilty of that).

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    Ahh well Borissomeone your tales are still epic

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    Default Re: New FF coming soon

    Same here, Ive stopped but not forgotten. Someday soon ill continue. Wishing you the best of luck.

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    Default The Knights of God (a Holy Order of the Pale Knights FF)

    Guess wat
    Last edited by Townie; December 31, 2010 at 03:54 PM.

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    Default Re: New FF coming soon

    Alright guys I got my Prologue
    Spoiler Alert, click show to read: 
    More like a teaser
    up, here's a link
    http://www.twcenter.net/forums/showt...12#post8572912

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    Congratz! It's very nice, I'll give you some well deserved rep.

    However, I had in mind to use a character named "Tristan" in the future of my story as well. I forgive you. I'll find another name.

    Just a heads up. Some people might take offence to this in the manner of how you mentioned Muslims so far. Just don't make it too serious. I myself am not one, but if there was a Muslim making fun of Christians I would.
    Last edited by Heart of Madness; December 08, 2010 at 05:23 PM.

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    Default Re: New FF coming soon

    So is this thread closed?

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    Default Re: The Knights of God (a Holy Order of the Pale Knights FF)

    Not bad jtownokie,I'll follow this.

    But,I have to say,I don't see where the problem is with the way he "described" Muslims so far...he barely mentioned them...

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    Default Re: The Knights of God (a Holy Order of the Pale Knights FF)

    I am sorry if I offend anyone as I AM doing this FF from the view of Tristan, who just so happens to be a Templar Knight, and, quite obviously, he would feel hate towards Muslims.

    Spoiler Alert, click show to read: 
    Especially based on something that happens later in the story


    Thanks for all of the positive feedback and I am currently working on Chapter 1, so stay tuned.

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    Good luck and keep going!

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    Default Re: The Knights of God (a Holy Order of the Pale Knights FF)

    Nice effort. One question, is there a reason you posted your story in that style with the sentences all broken example:

    Tristan thought of all of this as he charged his horse forward, towards the hole in the city walls caused by the labor of the engineers as they had used a sap point to
    dig a tunnel under the wall and collapse it. Seconds before he made impact with his enemy he let out a war cry and lowered his lance. The time for vengeance has come, the time for
    the Muslim's to feel the wrath of the almighty savior!
    It kinda breaks the flow of the tale.

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    Let's not harp on this poor fellow, he's getting the hang of it, sort of like me. I make grammatical errors all the time, and have to go back and fix them before anyone reads it.

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    Default Re: The Knights of God (a Holy Order of the Pale Knights FF)

    Not harping, just asking as to why he did it in that style.

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    Default Re: The Knights of God (a Holy Order of the Pale Knights FF)

    Ah well as Dragon said, I am a TOTAL newbie when it comes to writing. Could you explain what you mean so I can fix it?

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    Default Re: The Knights of God (a Holy Order of the Pale Knights FF)

    This is what I meant. Why did you not post it in a more structured way? Like so.

    Prologue
    He looked over the sand-covered landscape, He looked above at the vultures, ready to feed on the dead after the day was done. Finally, he looked at the glorious city of Paj Nara, with it's gleaming golden mosques, It's massive stone walls, and it's sheer presence on the hallowed landscape.

    "He" just so happens to be Tristan, Son of Edward, from the glorious order of the Knights Templar. After years of waiting and growing, Grandmaster Bohemond of the Holy Order of the Pale Knights had finally decided to declare war on the Muslim armies of the Barka Sultanate. It is the year 231 and the time has come for the Pale Knights to rule over Syrianna.

    Tristan thought of all of this as he charged his horse forward, towards the hole in the city walls caused by the labor of the engineers as they had used a sap point to dig a tunnel under the wall and collapse it. Seconds before he made impact with his enemy he let out a war cry and lowered his lance. The time for vengeance has come, the time for the Muslim's to feel the wrath of the almighty savior!

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    Default Re: The Knights of God (a Holy Order of the Pale Knights FF)

    Nice intro and effort jtownokie. Better than I can do

    +rep

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