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    Congratulations and thank you Radzeer for creating this wonderful and epic AAR! I bet you have put a lot of effort into this one, judging by the number of chapters and the sheer smount of details.
    Quote Originally Posted by robinzx View Post
    THIS IS A TRAVESTY! I DEMAND TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS IN THE END!!
    Yes, it's like the sudden ending of Sopranos! I'm sure Radzeer has an epilogue up his sleeve though.
    Quote Originally Posted by Boustrophedon View Post
    I'll be re-reading this a few times tomorrow just to make sure I take it all in hehe. Those tactical pictures on the map are the best I've ever seen in creative writing!
    I'm going to take some time to re-read this whole massive masterpiece. Agreed, the tactical maps are a most welcome addition.
    +1000 rep if I could
    He's a moderator, pretty sure he can rep himself if that is what he wants.


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    What a journey! It's been tremendous, and I think the final chapter is a perfect microcosm of what this whole AAR has been about; epic battles, great writing, wonderful screen shots, intrigue and bravery. I look forward to the Epilogue (there WILL be an Epilogue right?) and the behind the scenes, especially about how you did the final battle. I would heap more praise on this if I could, but I think I ran out of ways to praise this AAR about 30 chapters back! So I'll close with this, I'm really going to miss waiting for updates on this AAR, it's been outstanding, and was THE major reason I joined this forum to begin with. Thank you for all of your effort my friend.

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    Wow, what a suspenseful end to a thrilling story! I loved all the personal parts of the battle, whether it was Andrei in the forest with Halstan, or going into the mill. THe battle was nothing short of amazing and described like a true battle lasting several days would. A fitting end, but I'm dying to see what the fallout from all this is. Hopefully there's an Epilogue to wrap things up.

    I can't say enough about how great this AAR has been. I applaud you for all the hard work you've put into it; it's definitely paid off!

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    Definitely the best chapter of the whole saga! I am sad to see that it has come to an end but wow! What an ending it turned out to be! Can't wait to see what the epilogue is going to reveal!

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    Good job man, you outlasted me by a lot and did a much better AAR too! I love the exposure you gave to Kievan Rus- one of the more fun factions to play. I'm sure the epilogue will be appropriate to the scale of the rest of this AAR.

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    Quote Originally Posted by robinzx View Post
    It's chapter 60...out of 60...and we have a cliffhanger

    THIS IS A TRAVESTY! I DEMAND TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS IN THE END!!

    Ahem.

    Brilliant. Simply brilliant. I had a sense that more than one player would die in the final battles but for both Predislav and Halstan to die was quite unexpected. The scene in the barn and Andrei's memory was quite sublimely written. It would seem that somehow Andrei would still be the final victor when all is done and dusted - surely that dog Komnenos could not be allowed to lead the Rus to ruin?

    All hail
    Thank you very much! I did not have many cliffhangers, so I couldn't resist the last opportunity to have one. Also, the end had to be epic enough and that comes with sacrifice... - and it also allows some material for the epilogue. And of course praise coming from skilled writers is particularly generous.

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    That is all.
    Thank you, I'm glad you like it.

    Quote Originally Posted by Boustrophedon View Post
    oh wow...just wow I don't even know what to say! A glorious chapter in the final stage of this AAR and what a chapter it turned out to be. I'll be re-reading this a few times tomorrow just to make sure I take it all in hehe. Those tactical pictures on the map are the best I've ever seen in creative writing! +1000 rep if I could
    Thanks, and sorry to make you re-read this. I had a little bit more than what I wanted to squeeze into the final chapter. Also, I wanted it to be quality stuff for both battle and plot plus the pictures too... I guess I was really making myself work!
    I'm glad you liked the maps, without those it would have been a really chaotic battle to tell.

    Quote Originally Posted by Maximinus Thrax View Post
    Congratulations and thank you Radzeer for creating this wonderful and epic AAR! I bet you have put a lot of effort into this one, judging by the number of chapters and the sheer smount of details.
    Yes, it's like the sudden ending of Sopranos! I'm sure Radzeer has an epilogue up his sleeve though.

    I'm going to take some time to re-read this whole massive masterpiece. Agreed, the tactical maps are a most welcome addition.
    He's a moderator, pretty sure he can rep himself if that is what he wants.
    To be honest, I cannot rep myself. Even moderator powers are limited.
    Thank you for your support and praise throughout this story. As you said, it was a lot of effort, but seeing all these comments, it was worth it.
    And once I'll have time, I'll go back and read the whole thing again too.

    Quote Originally Posted by Ganbarenippon View Post
    What a journey! It's been tremendous, and I think the final chapter is a perfect microcosm of what this whole AAR has been about; epic battles, great writing, wonderful screen shots, intrigue and bravery. I look forward to the Epilogue (there WILL be an Epilogue right?) and the behind the scenes, especially about how you did the final battle. I would heap more praise on this if I could, but I think I ran out of ways to praise this AAR about 30 chapters back! So I'll close with this, I'm really going to miss waiting for updates on this AAR, it's been outstanding, and was THE major reason I joined this forum to begin with. Thank you for all of your effort my friend.
    Well, what can I say really? You have been very generous with your support, and your idea about Azaq has made me learn some scripting and take the plot into ways I had not imagined before!
    I am really glad that you joined TWC, because you are also a great writer and were able to entertain many here. Still the credit I can take for that is minor compared to your contribution to this plot.

    Quote Originally Posted by Thokran View Post
    Wow, what a suspenseful end to a thrilling story! I loved all the personal parts of the battle, whether it was Andrei in the forest with Halstan, or going into the mill. THe battle was nothing short of amazing and described like a true battle lasting several days would. A fitting end, but I'm dying to see what the fallout from all this is. Hopefully there's an Epilogue to wrap things up.

    I can't say enough about how great this AAR has been. I applaud you for all the hard work you've put into it; it's definitely paid off!
    Thank you very much, and I am very glad that you liked those little stories during the two day battle. This was exactly the impact I was looking for: to make it realistic in terms of the narrative and allow those chaotic two days to build up the plot - which apparently is not yet over.

    Quote Originally Posted by Scottish King View Post
    Definitely the best chapter of the whole saga! I am sad to see that it has come to an end but wow! What an ending it turned out to be! Can't wait to see what the epilogue is going to reveal!
    Thank you for your long support during this story! Well, everything has to come to an end once, and it got complex enough by now. I'm glad that you found this the best one - I think it took the longest to write, or maybe the second longest after the Trebizond siege chapter.

    Quote Originally Posted by Ichon View Post
    Good job man, you outlasted me by a lot and did a much better AAR too! I love the exposure you gave to Kievan Rus- one of the more fun factions to play. I'm sure the epilogue will be appropriate to the scale of the rest of this AAR.
    Thank you, and I am not sure if my AAR was better, more like different. (I still think of your Norway one as a masterpiece on its own right.) And yes, I picked Kiev for various reasons, one being that they seldom make it to the AAR scene. Hopefully it would encourage some people to try out what you can do with them.

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    I have a few more things to say beyond the feedback.

    First of all, since many of you have asked, yes, there will be an epilogue wrapping up the story. Likely I will be able to post it some time over the weekend. It will have some bonus info too, like a full family tree and complete bios of the main characters.

    Then (although it will need a bit more time) there will be a "behind the scenes" post, telling a few things about the plot development and such. For this I have to re-read the whole thing, and that will make it time consuming. I am shooting for about 10-12 days after the epilogue, and then this will really be over.

    I would also like to thank everybody for his support in the MAARCs over the past year, delivering one bronze and two silver medals. Just like the comments, those votes had meant a lot of encouragement. There won't be any more MAARCs for this story, but I encourage everybody to keep visiting the competitions and vote for the great stories.

    About the future and my next project... well, it is too early to talk about that.

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    Maybe I'm a little late (as always ), but I'd like to comment myself, this work of AAR was something that I really, really enjoyed reading and keeping up with it! Some tweaks and you could publish it as a book.

    The chapters about the brothers, Andrei, the royal family's affairs, I liked and enjoyed reading all of them, a masterpiece regarding plot, writing, characters and pictures, but I guess it's your trademark now, and of course I expected only this quality from you! I can't wait for the epilogue, and of course, your next project!

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    Impressive final battle and surely the first AAR to end with a cliffhanger.

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    Well, chapeau bas mon ami.

    For more than one year, you entertained us with your brilliant story.
    I consider it was much more difficult than for you first one (Hungary), since you wrote about more than 3 generations.
    It is very hard to keep the readers focused with not a single heroe, and you succeeded that bet.

    It is like an entire chronicle of an Empire, where family stories mix with Royal plots.
    Even if sometimes, we switched the main characters, the storyline kept clear and finally make a loop with the beginning.

    Your last chapter was amazing, mostly because of the cliffhanger, but also because of the battle, the strategic maps (wonderful), and the pictures...
    I liked how the battle was complex and divided in three parts.
    It is one of the best I ever read.

    And your pictures, your reached the top of the art there. And it is not lost words to say that, given the thousands you made and edited.


    Radzeer, more than a story, you did a master work with the Rus.
    And you finished it. Woaw...
    It means a lot (Most particularly for me ).
    Still dedicated, still hard work, still top quality (writing and editing).


    It has been a pleasure to follow your second tale, and I'm eager to read the "behind the scenes", as I'm already waiting with anxiety to know if you are going to write more.
    I will be there...


    Bravo, mon ami...

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    Epilogue: The Rus is the light

    It was an unusually cool morning, not what Kiev was used to in early September. The trees were still green, but the morning fog hung over the city longer than usual, hiding the massive walls and towers of the citadel. The past few days have been cold and rainy as if the weather wanted to provide the appropriate background for the events that unfolded in the Rus. Inside the palace the Council was about to meet to discuss the aftermath of the battle of Djerev. But nobody was too eager to talk as the wounds were fresh and they still waited for one man to join them.



    That man was sitting in the main hall of the Orthodox monastery inside the citadel. The monastery was not large, for when it was built the citadel was just a small fort in the center of the city. As the city grew and the citadel was expanded, the monastery remained a relic of the old days where the monks have been working and praying just as they did many years ago. The man needed a place to think about the consequences of the battle, and the monastery was quiet and tranquil, just as how he hoped it would be.



    The battle of Djerev was over. Grand Prince Halstan and Predislav Yaroslavich were killed, together with Halstan's younger son, Derzhislav. When the soldiers of Azaq looted the camp of the Grand Prince after the battle, they also found the body of Dmitrii Yaroslavich. He was put in chains by Halstan before the battle, and it was suspected that either Halstan or one of his sons ordered his death during the fight. Halstan's older son, Prince Tvorimir was not found anywhere. He either escaped in the fog when he realized the battle was lost or his body still lay lifeless somewhere on the battlefield.

    With the fall of Predislav, the senior branch of Grand Prince Vladimir's descendants has died out. Moreover, the death of Dmitrii who was also childless meant that the House of Yaroslavich had no legitimate male heirs left. Prince Tvorimir was appointed by the Grand Prince in accordance to the customs of the realm, but because of the hatred towards Halstan and his sons in Kiev the Council annulled the succession rights of the Norwegians, not even waiting to learn whether Tvorimir was dead or alive. The next logical step created much speculation, as now the Council was supposed to name the Grand Prince either by acknowledging one of Nikifor's son-in-laws or legitimizing one of the illegitimate male descendents. These options put forth four possible contenders for the Grand Prince title: Khotimir, the husband of Nikifor's youngest daughter; Komnenos, the husband of Nikifor's second daughter; Basenok, the illegitimate son of Moimir Yaroslavich who inherited all of Yaropolk's estates; and finally Oslyabya who was both the son-in-law of Nikifor and the illegitimate grandson of Yurii Yaroslavich.

    All four men were on the winning side at Djerev and none of them had a stronger legal claim than any of the others. For the Council, it seemed as a variety of options, but the man sitting in front of the fire felt that only one person is suitable to become the Grand Prince. Furthermore, he was in the position to persuade or force the Council to accept that. The future of the Kievan Rus was in his hand, yet he was unsure what to do.

    That man was Andrei.



    Not long after the mill collapsed, the troops of Azaq overran Djerev, routing the remaining Catholic forces. Andrei was found unconscious but not severely wounded under the debris. However, Komnenos was not there, and apparently he could escape during the chaos before Andrei's soldiers arrived. He was smart enough to know that Kiev was not safe for him anymore even if the only person who knew that he ordered the killing of Predislav was Andrei.

    Andrei has given a lot of thought in the past days how to handle the situation. Originally he expected either Halstan or Predislav to become the unchallenged Grand Prince and he was supposed to negotiate benefits for Azaq. But in the current situation where the army of Azaq became the largest fighting force after the battle, Andrei could make the Council accept any man he named as the next Grand Prince. He knew that the Council does not have much time. There was war with Poland, Venice and Denmark, and Andrei also suspected that Komnenos will eventually return, supported by the immeasurable wealth and military power of the Roman Empire.

    But should I play this role?, he asked himself. In the past days, he was told by several others that he is a commoner who does not have the understanding of high politics and royal interests. Some, like Halstan and Komnenos, openly despised him while others, like Predislav and now Khotimir, made him feel that he is their subordinate. He came from a family of peasants and traders, and he was seen as a man from Azaq, unsophisticated and uninformed to have a word in the current succession crisis. The boyars in the Council were condescending, but they were also afraid of him.

    And fate has now provided an opportunity for this commoner to determine the outcome of succession.

    Somebody passed through the hall behind his back. As a reflex reaction, Andrei drew his sword and quickly turned around.

    "I am sorry, my lord. I hope I did not disturb you." It was a young monk.

    Andrei sighed. Who would attack me here? I must not be like this, he thought. He pushed his sword back to its scabbard. Then he noticed that the monk held a thick book.

    "What is that?" he asked.

    "This is the Chronicle of the Rus," said the monk proudly. "The work on it has stopped when Grand Prince Nikifor and his brother grew apart. But we will have a new Grand Prince soon and the Rus will return to the path of light. The chronicle must continue." The monk had obviously no idea who Andrei was. For him Andrei was just one of the army commanders, looking for a temporary peace of mind.

    "I am sure that there are great deeds recorded in the chronicle," said Andrei.

    "Yes, although the chronicle is not very old. It was only started when the great Mstislav Yaroslavich was named as the Prince and was sent to take Zhytomyr."

    "He was one of the greatest leaders, I heard."

    "Yes, he was indeed. Many don't remember though that his wife was Norwegian. However, it is not something people would need to be reminded now."

    Andrei smiled. "May I see the book?" he asked.

    The monk was a bit hesitant as if it was hard for him to believe that a soldier could read. He handed over the book with a puzzled look on his face. Andrei started to read.

    It has been a hundred years ago since Vladimir the Great started the Christian conversion of the Rus. His son, Yaroslav the Wise continued his father’s work, leading to the Golden Age of the Rus. Now Kiev is ruled by Vladimir II, the grandson of Yaroslav.

    To the south is the Roman Empire and Constantinople, the greatest city on Earth. They showed the light of Christianity to the Rus, and wife of the Grand Prince is Roman. The earlier conflicts are forgiven though maybe not forgotten, and now Kiev and Constantinople has a strong bond linking brothers in faith.

    To the east are the Cuman tribes and other nomadic people. They are weak as a state, but strong as warriors. They are sometimes allies, but mostly enemies, and their raids often devastate the traders and farmers of the Rus. That needs to be addressed if Kiev is to become a power on the steppes.

    To the north is Novgorod, the Orthodox cousins. The same blood flows in their veins, yet their sole existence is an insult. The prince of Novgorod used to be a vassal of Kiev, but now they are an independent state. But there can be only one master of the Rus people and it shall be Kiev.

    To the west across the plains are the Catholic kingdoms, Hungary and Poland. Great powers in Central Europe, but they are looking to the east to expand. They are not to be trusted as they follow the Latin rites and the orders of the pope. Finally, between Poland and Novgorod lies the pagan Lithuania, wild tribes that serve no god but their own false idols.

    And who knows what countries and people are beyond the borders of the neighbors? It matters not. The Rus is the light.
    The Rus is the light. I know this phrase, thought Andrei. He was looking for a name, but found nothing.

    "Who wrote this?" he asked.

    The monk stared at him seemingly confused. "Monks have been writing this chronicle."

    "I understand, but who started it?"

    "Nobody knows, because it does not matter. The names are not recorded, and this is how it should be. Our names carry no significance." Then seeing Andrei's disappointment he added something. "The first monk set the tone for the whole chronicle, and we have been following that in the past decades. It is clear, disciplined and righteous. I think he was from Pereyaslav, but that's all I know about him."

    This must be a sign, thought Andrei. He looked at the text closer and finally saw something at the edge of the page. Two tiny letters were written by a colorful illustration, as if the chronicler wanted to leave some trace about himself as a small act of vanity.

    Two hardly visible letters.

    A and M.

    'Clear, disciplined and righteous', thought Andrei. And at the same time, a bit hardheaded who thinks he knows exactly what is right, because he was in fact right for most of the time. He knew that man. The letters stood for no other but Alexios Miloslavich.

    Andrei continued to turn the pages, and the words he picked up told the condensed history and glory of the Rus. Zhytomyr... the Black Sea... the Holy Grail... the battle at Smolensk... the defense of Pereyaslav... the Cuman wars... the conquest of Azaq... war with Poland... the graves of Lithuania... the oath of Zhirovit... Yurii and the Romans... the siege of Baku... Yaropolk the Conqueror... the Holy Land... Riga and the Teutons... the Golden Horde... the fall of Novgorod... It was all there.

    Then he remembered the words of Sbyslav Yaroslavich before the Grand Duke's final battle.

    I believe that there is some divine protection on you and your family. Your father has escaped from slavery. Your chronicler uncle has escaped from Acre when it was sacked. And God knows how many dangers has your warrior uncle escaped from. Your family has a gift.

    Your father and his brothers were much more important persons than you might think. Over the past many years, they were in the center of many things that have happened in Kiev and Azaq. Strange, isn't it?
    The sign was clear. One man can make a difference, if that man is in the right place at the right time and if that man clearly sees what he has to do.

    "This is most remarkable," he said as he gave the book back to the monk. "Thank you for letting me take a look at it." He turned back to the fire and knew exactly what he was going to do. His thoughts made perfect sense.

    Komnenos is the enemy, and I will prove it to the Council. I will make a deal with Khotimir so he could have the rich western provinces where the Catholic threat is the greatest - that will keep him occupied. If he wants more, I will spread rumors that he allied with Komnenos to kill Predislav. Then I will pressure Basenok to support us in exchange for the Lithuanian provinces. He will do it because he is a coward who has not come to help Predislav in battle. I will show the Council that Oslyabya is the only capable person leading the Rus, moreover he is the right choice. His marriage with Akulina reunited the two branches of the Yaroslavich family without their knowledge, and that will be the key for reuniting Kiev and Azaq under one banner once again. We need that because this is the only way how we can fight the Romans if that time comes.

    We have become great and then we have become our own enemy. So much treachery and distrust, and so much hunger for power. Oslyabya is the only person who can end this, because he never wanted this title. He is the right choice who can unite us. But only if I give him the opportunity first.

    And I will do it for many reasons, but mostly because I believe that what my uncle has written down these long years ago is the truth. The Rus is the light. This light was followed by my father and my uncles during their times. This had been their destiny since they were rescued either by chance or by divine intervention.

    Now it is my turn to carry on their work.

    This is my destiny.



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    Appendix

    The family tree


    Character biographies

    Grand Prince Vladimir Yaroslavich
    The first Grand Prince, leading the early expansion of the Rus, annexing several independent cities and fighting against both the Cumans and the Catholics. He uncovered the Holy Grail after taking Oleshe, and established the tradition in which the Grail is kept by the Prince to guide him. At the end of his life he retired and transferred the power to his oldest son and heir, Mstislav. He lived a long life and died peacefully in Kiev.
    Grand Prince Mstislav Yaroslavich
    The second Grand Prince, and the oldest son of Vladimir. He held power for long as a Prince. He fought against the Cumans in the east, and conquered Smolensk in the north overthrowing the Novgorod-friendly council. He was a skilled politician and determined leader with a vision to expand toward the Baltic Sea. He established the Rus as a major power, although at the end of his reign he had difficulties with his two brothers who wanted to go on their separate ways. He died peacefully in Kiev.
    Grand Prince Gostislav Yaroslavich
    The third Grand Prince, Mstislav's oldest son. Quite unremarkable as a child, he had a lot to prove. His decisions were not without controversy, but he did what he could to keep the Rus intact. He was somewhat successful with Yaropolk's sons in the west keeping at least their formal allegiance, but could not contain his other uncle, Yurii, who set up his own principality in Azaq. His rule was often compared to the rule of his father, in which comparison he did not fare well, especially about his foreign policy. He died unexpectedly, shortly after a victory against Poland.
    Grand Prince Nikifor Yaroslavich
    The fourth Grand Prince, Gostislav's first son. His marriage to a Venetian princess was supposed to build good connections to Catholics, but the alliance was short-lived. He was considered to be a talented leader and a capable general. He launched the long awaited war against Novgorod, which he carried out ruthlessly. His personal tragedy was the alleged affair between his wife and his brother, which led to the Venetian war after the loss of Halych. At the same time, he was caught in the conflict between the boyars and Prince Halstan. At the end of his rule he tried to reestablish the succession line of the Yaroslavich family, favoring his only son. He died in Kiev shortly before marching against Venice to retake Halych.
    Predislav Yaroslavich
    Nikifor's only son. A talented military commander, but a man with a temper, similar to his uncle, Rostislav. He felt that he was robbed of the Grand Prince title after Nikifor named the Norwegian noble, Halstan as his successor. After the death of his father when Halstan refused to name him as the successor, he allied with his brother-in-laws to defeat Halstan on the battlefield triggering the civil war. He died in the battle of Djerev, as a victim of an assassin hired by his Roman brother-in-law. With him, the senior line of Vladimir has ended.

    Apokavkos Komnenos

    Member of the Roman royal family, who married Nikifor's second daughter. For some time he was a loyal supporter of the House of Yaroslavich. Some suspect that he was working behind the scenes to establish his own rule amidst the political chaos following Nikifor's death. He was responsible for the killing of Predislav. His plot was discovered and he had to flee to Constantinople. Soon after he tried to return to Kiev and waged a war against Sbyslav Oslyabya, the new Grand Prince. After some initial success, he was killed by an assassin. It has never become known whether his killer came from Kiev, Azaq or Constantinople.

    Khotimir Kievskii

    Kievan boyar who married Nikifor's youngest daughter. He was Predislav's follower and fought on his side in the battle of Djerev. After Predislav's death in the battle he tried to establish himself in power but eventually made a pact with the new Grand Prince, gaining considerable power in the Council. Later he fought against the Catholics and became one of the richest boyars. He died peacefully in Halych.
    Rostislav Yaroslavich
    Gostislav's second son. He lived the life of the younger prince in the Court, where according to the rumor he seduced Nikifor's wife. He led the attack on Novgorod, taking Polotsk, but died shortly after that in the plague. Despite his short life, his impact on the history of the Rus cannot be understated. The alleged affair with Florentia made Nikifor to elect Halstan as his successor, feeling the need for immediate political help (Predislav was only a child then). Rostislav died, but Halstan's appointment eventually led to the civil war and the rise of the Azaq branch of the Yaroslavich family.

    Grand Prince Halstan Svendsen

    Norwegian noble who married Princess Evfrosinia, Gostislav's daughter. Shortly after arriving to Kiev he was chosen by Nikifor to be his heir to counterbalance the political ambitions of Rostislav, Nikifor's brother. After some conflicts in the Court, Nikifor sent him to conquer the city of Novgorod, which he took easily and later defended against Denmark. After Nikifor's death, he became the fifth Grand Prince. Many say that he should have resigned or at least choose Predislav as his heir. However, the sometimes unjust political attacks made him determined to rule the Rus his own way. His vision was to break the political power of Kiev and move the capital to Novgorod. He took Predislav's challenge and met him on the battlefield. He died in the second day of the battle of Djerev, and according to the legend it was Predislav himself who killed him.
    Tvorimir Runo
    Halstan's older son, who was the governor of the Pskov fortress. He was named as the Prince by Halstan. He led the cavalry alongside his father in the civil war. He disappeared in the battle of Djerev and his body was never found. Following the battle, the Council annulled the succession of his family.

    Derzhislav Cheshko

    Halstan's second son. When Tvorimir became the Prince, Derzhislav was appointed as the governor of Novgorod. He helped his father to summon troops from Norway to aid Halstan in the civil war. He died in the night assault during the battle of Djerev when his Bergen troops attacked the army of Azaq. Some say that this attack was a result of poor communication, but it led to the intervention of Azaq on Predislav's side, deciding the final outcome of the battle.
    Petr Yaroslavich
    Mstislav's second son, the governor of the eastern Rus territories. He was trained by his uncle Yaropolk, and he took Serdobinskaya from the Cumans, establishing the rule of the Rus on the eastern steppes. He led the royal troops the Caucasus campaign. He took Baku and sailed across the sea to fight Khwarezm at Gorgan. The riches of Baku and Gorgan made him wealthy, although he was not successful to counterbalance Yurii and his sons' rule in Azaq. He died shortly after a raid on Astrakhan.
    Dmitrii Yaroslavich
    Petr's son. He was young when his father died and was raised in the Kievan Court. He was a friend and supporter of Prince Halstan, and married Halstan's daughter. He worked to avoid the conflict between Predislav and Halstan. Since he was not willing to side with Halstan when he became the Grand Prince, he was taken as a hostage before the battle of Djerev. The circumstances of his death during the battle are still unclear, likely he was murdered in cold blood by Halstan or his sons.
    Oleg Yaroslavich
    Mstislav's third son, the governor of Kiev. Although talented, he was a quiet member of the family, satisfied with administering the capital. Many saw him as the man guarding the political legacy of Mstislav, mitigating the debates and conflicts in Kiev during Gostislav's and Nikifor's rule. He died peacefully in Kiev. The significance of his person has become obvious after his death when the royal family faced crisis after crisis, leading to the civil war.

    Danislav Severskii
    A noble originally from Novgorod who
    became the leader of the pro-Kiev faction in Smolensk. During the siege of Smolensk by Mstislav, he supported the Prince to overthrow the Novgorod-friendly council and annex Smolensk to the Rus. As a reward, he was adopted by Mstislav and appointed as the governor of Smolensk. He died in battle against the Lithuanians.
    Dobrozhir Severskii
    The only son of Danislav. Shortly after his father's death, he went to battle against Lithuania but was ambushed and defeated. He could hardly escape, but in the following years he became an experienced commander and revenged his father. In a daring raid he killed the Grand Duke of Lithuania, but on the way back he was ambushed and died in battle.

    Stroislav Kubenskii
    A Kievan noble who married Dobrozhir's oldest sister. He inherited the large Severskii estates and was also appointed as the governor of Baia. As one of the richest boyars, he was a loyal follower of the Grand Prince, and his support was especially important for Nikifor. He died under Halych when the fortress was taken by the Venetians.
    Yaropolk Yaroslavich
    The second son of Vladimir. Legendary commander, the hero of many wars, and the conqueror of Lithuania where he acquired territories for his sons. His personal tragedy was that during his life only his youngest son, Volodislav loved him. He was a loyal general and had done much for the Rus both by fighting its enemies and by containing his sons. He died shortly after his last victory against Poland, as the most decorated general of the Rus. At his funeral, his sons finally realized what their father has done for them.
    Zhirovit Yaroslavich
    Yaropolk's oldest son, the governor of Vilnius. A violent, dreaded and unpredictable character, he fought in Poland to revenge his brother's death. He hated Catholics and pagans alike, and had plans to restore the political power of the house of Yaropolk. Yet, after so much success on the battlefield, he could not taste the political victory. He died peacefully in Vilnius, plotting until the end of his life to rule Kiev.

    Moimir
    Yaroslavich
    Yaropolk's second son, governor of Mensk. He helped financing Zhirovit's campaigns. He was a city politician, satisfied with his position as a governor enjoying its comforts. He had no political ambitions and was not notable as a general either. He lived a long, but politically uneventful life. He died peacefully in Mensk.
    Svyatoslav Basenok
    Moimir's only son, or at least the only one in the chronicles. He was an unremarkable character and a bastard. After Moimir's death, his uncle Volodislav adopted him as there was no other who could carry on the family line. He had the political and military power of the Yaropolk estates, but decided to stay away from the civil war. After the battle of Djerev, his loyalty was bought by the new Grand Prince. He was kept on a short leash from Kiev, and after his death the Yaropolk estates reverted back to the Grand Prince.
    Tikhomir Yaroslavich
    Yaropolk's third son. He was considered as a talented commander, but died young in battle against Poland at Mensk, saving the city and probably Moimir's life. His brothers swore to revenge his death and waged a bloody, but largely unsuccessful war against Poland.

    Volodislav
    Yaroslavich
    Yaropolk's youngest son, the governor of Riga. A smart politician and talented commander who defeated the Teutons and repelled several Danish invasions. He was widely considered as the real successor of Yaropolk's legacy. Later in life he gave up most of his ambitions. He died from a wound after a battle against Denmark, shortly before the civil war.
    Yurii Yaroslavich, Grand Duke of Azaq
    The third and youngest son of Vladimir, and the first Grand Duke of Azaq, the duchy he declared independent from Kiev. It was difficult for him to be in the shadow of his two brothers. He was not satisfied with the governor position of Caffa where he was supposed to live the quiet life of a young prince, and made an alliance with the Patrikeev clan in the east. He married the clan leader's daughter, Natalia and started to build his own princedom. He fought the Cumans for the control of the Azaq region, and later attacked the Muslims in the Caucasus. He was considered as the main conspirator in the royal family, constantly plotting to get closer to power. After Natalia's death he decided to go on a pilgrimage to the Holy Land. The pilgrimage ended with taking Acre, but became a political failure after mutual betrayals by the Roman allies. Yurii died in the siege when Acre fell to the Fatimids. The hatred between him and the Komnenos family was a decisive factor in the fall of Acre where the Romans decided not to help him, and later it has become a political factor in the civil war following the intervention of Azaq.
    Grand Duke Ostromir Yaroslavich
    Yurii's older son. An unremarkable person in his early life, and withdrawn from the public ever since he survived an assassination arranged by Gostislav. While his brother, Sbyslav was fighting in the Holy Land to revenge their father, he had to defend the Duchy of Azaq from the first Mongol invasion. He was the governor of Sarkel, the border stronghold. Following the death of his brother, he became the third Grand Duke of Azaq. Shortly after that he was ambushed by the Mongols and killed in battle.
    Ratimir Muromskii
    A soldier in Sarkel who has shown exceptional bravery against the Mongols and was thus adopted by Ostromir. He was sent to Tbilisi to raise an army for Azaq. He tried to defend the Caucasus pass to prevent the Mongol attack on Tbilisi. He was captured in battle and executed by the Mongols.
    Grand Duke Sbyslav Yaroslavich
    Yurii's second son, commander of the Caucasus and Holy Land campaigns. He was talented in both politics and war, and succeeded Yurii as the second Grand Duke of Azaq. After revenging his father's death against the Fatimids, he returned to Azaq and fought against the Mongols. He was an exceptional leader as well as military commander. He died in battle after many victories during a failed campaign to take Astrakhan from the Mongols.
    Grand Duke / Grand Prince Sbyslav Oslyabya
    Grand Duke Sbyslav's illegitimate son, who did not know about this relationship until his father died. He was adopted by Ostromir and made successor of the Duke title. He conquered Astrakhan, and after Ostromir's death he became the fourth and last Grand Duke of Azaq. He married Grand Prince Nikifor's daughter, although he was not aware of his wife's political position until the wedding. This marriage made him a contender for the Grand Prince title after the civil war and Halstan's death. He became the sixth Grand Prince of the Rus after the involvement of the army of Azaq in the civil war. With that the branches of Mstislav and Yurii Yaroslavich were united again.
    Milogost Fominskii
    A Kievan noble who married Princess Eupraxia, Vladimir’s only daughter and thus became a member of the royal family. He was the governor of Zhytomyr. He saved Kiev from two Polish invasions, and was killed in the first battle of Halych.
    Georgii Patrikeev
    A local warlord who was the former governor of Tmutarakan in the east, and an ally of Yurii who married his daughter. The support of his clan has meant a lot to the rulers of Azaq. He died peacefully after taking Sarkel.


    The legend of the three brothers

    Many years ago, during the reign of Vladimir II, three young boys were rescued after a Cuman raid. The oldest, Alexios has become a cleric and a chronicler in the Court, and followed the politics during the early expansion of the Rus. The second boy, Rurik has become a bodyguard in Yaropolk's escort. But the third one, Oleg was kidnapped again and sold to slavery. Alexios and Rurik searched for him for many years in the eastern steppes and the Black Sea, during which Alexios was captured by the Seljuks. He then found out that Oleg was eventually freed and has become a trader. It was Oleg who found him and paid the ransom, after which the three brothers were reunited but caught up in the siege of Trebizond where Rurik was wounded.

    Later Alexios was sent to negotiate with Yurii Yaroslavich who established Azaq as an independent Duchy. Alexios followed Yurii to the Holy Land where after many adventures they were besieged by the Fatimids in Acre. Yurii died in that battle, and Alexios was thought to be dead for some time too. He escaped though and returned to the Rus for his old days.

    After recovering from the wounds from the battle of Trebizond, Rurik decided to return to Yaropolk's service. He met the old general shortly before his final battle against Poland. After the death of Yaropolk, Rurik put down his sword and retired to train his younger brother's son. Some say that he was instrumental in making Yaropolk's sons understand how much their father has done for them.

    After the reunion with his brothers, Oleg followed Alexios to the Rus and became the chief supply officer for the Court. He wrote the Miloslavich Diary in which he recorded the Catholic wars and the start of the campaign against Novgorod. Shortly after taking Polotsk, he disappeared in enemy territory. His son found him in a prison after the fall of Novgorod. Oleg tried to convince Grand Prince Nikifor to end the war against Novgorod, for which he was released from service. He retired to Pereyaslav living in the farm where he was raised.


    While neither Alexios nor Rurik had any children, Oleg had two. Not much is known about his daughter, but his son, Andrei played an important role in both Kiev and Azaq. He started his service as a soldier in Grand Prince Nikifor's druzhina. Later, he was in Prince Halstan's army fighting against Novgorod. After the battle of Pskov, he was also dismissed from Kievan service by Nikifor. He went to Azaq and had a notable military career under Grand Dukes Sbyslav and Ostromir, fighting against the Mongols. Later he became the commander of the army of Azaq and fought in the civil war. After the battle of Djerev he played a key role in Kiev to elect Sbyslav Oslyabya as the new Grand Prince. His later years are less known, but legends are on no short supply about his deeds.

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    Well, all in all, I'm gonna say this is the best one I've read from beginning to end thus far. As far as tales of the Rus go, I've got my work cut out for me... well done!
    Please read my current AAR, The Tale of the North!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mr. Bean Laden View Post
    Maybe I'm a little late (as always ), but I'd like to comment myself, this work of AAR was something that I really, really enjoyed reading and keeping up with it! Some tweaks and you could publish it as a book.

    The chapters about the brothers, Andrei, the royal family's affairs, I liked and enjoyed reading all of them, a masterpiece regarding plot, writing, characters and pictures, but I guess it's your trademark now, and of course I expected only this quality from you! I can't wait for the epilogue, and of course, your next project!
    Thank you, and you are way too generous, my friend. But I am glad that all pieces got together nicely at the end. And I am considering the idea of turning this into a book. That would be an interesting experiment as probably more things would need to be changed than it seems, but I like challenges.

    Quote Originally Posted by Geoffrey of Villehardouin View Post
    Impressive final battle and surely the first AAR to end with a cliffhanger.
    Thanks, and well, yes and no. It was a cliffhanger, but not a permanent one. It would have been interesting (but I guess also cruel).

    Quote Originally Posted by la coupe est pleine View Post
    Well, chapeau bas mon ami.

    For more than one year, you entertained us with your brilliant story.
    I consider it was much more difficult than for you first one (Hungary), since you wrote about more than 3 generations.
    It is very hard to keep the readers focused with not a single heroe, and you succeeded that bet.

    It is like an entire chronicle of an Empire, where family stories mix with Royal plots.
    Even if sometimes, we switched the main characters, the storyline kept clear and finally make a loop with the beginning.

    Your last chapter was amazing, mostly because of the cliffhanger, but also because of the battle, the strategic maps (wonderful), and the pictures...
    I liked how the battle was complex and divided in three parts.
    It is one of the best I ever read.

    And your pictures, your reached the top of the art there. And it is not lost words to say that, given the thousands you made and edited.


    Radzeer, more than a story, you did a master work with the Rus.
    And you finished it. Woaw...
    It means a lot (Most particularly for me ).
    Still dedicated, still hard work, still top quality (writing and editing).


    It has been a pleasure to follow your second tale, and I'm eager to read the "behind the scenes", as I'm already waiting with anxiety to know if you are going to write more.
    I will be there...

    Bravo, mon ami...
    Thank you very much, my friend, and I am very happy that you were around for the whole journey - in fact you gave the very first comment on this AAR. Your generous support has meant a lot in the past year, and I can't tell how amazed I was when you gave chapter by chapter comments when you were away for more than one update. It is the dedicated readers like you that make this worth the effort.

    Quote Originally Posted by nine-o View Post
    Well, all in all, I'm gonna say this is the best one I've read from beginning to end thus far. As far as tales of the Rus go, I've got my work cut out for me... well done!
    Thank you, and I'm happy that you carry the tradition of writing tales of the Rus. (I was glad to caught up with that.)

    ---

    So this is really the end. Only one more item remains, the 'behind the scenes' part. I am working on it already, but it will take about a week to post (it's hard to let this story go ).

    Thank you everybody for the comments and the support for these long months! I am truly honored by all this: 34,000 views and more than 300 comments testify to your dedication to this story. Frankly, I have not expected this much, and I am glad that apparently many people enjoyed this story - hopefully as much as I did when I was working on it.

    If you have not left any comments yet, maybe this is the time to do so.
    Also, I would appreciate any feedback about the technicalities as I plan my next project. Were the chapters too long? Would shorter but more frequent be better? Spoilers? Picture size? Additional information you think I should include? Text/picture ratio? Things I missed? Or those that you missed?

    So thank you again for bearing with me along this journey, and hope to see many of you in my next project! (Still to be revealed to keep some of the suspense...)

    Cheers,


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    I think Primus Inter Pares is the best AAR of them all. Splendid work writing all this
    If I re-read it I hope get at least half the names and relations right. If I am lucky...

    Did you ever manage to get any Palace Guard before the story ended by the way?

    Also, what happened to the UMT? I understand there was some sort of conspiracy against their leaders some updates ago. Dubious indeed...

    And yes, put each chapter inside a spoiler next time please. The family info at the start is a great idea when so many characters exist. Sometimes I thought it would be interesting to see more overview of your battle tactics but that may take away from the feeling of suspense when something is told from a first persons perspective and so on. I'm nevertheless curious.
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    There really isn't much left to say that hasn't been said, and there's only so many ways to say the word epic, but this has been a colossus of AAR writing - a true masterpiece. It fills me with sadness that it's ending, but that could only mean Radzeer has new tricks up his sleeve

    I would say the massive cast of characters made it slightly hard to follow at times (Russian names aren't a strong point of mine admittedly) but the family tree and character bios have helped much in that regard. I will read the story from the beginning again just to make sure I understand all the political nuances

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    What more can be said that hasn't already been said! Just an absolutely amazing job! It was great to see Andrei was still alive and playing a part in the Rus' government! + rep

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    Agreed with Scottish King, everything has been said before, awaiting the behind the scenes, and of course details about your next project. But I can understand it if you want to a have a little "rest" before it!

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    A fitting end to such a spectacular story! You really managed to bring all the story's many plots and characters and stories together, bringing the epic full circle to a wholly satisfying conclusion. Just as we saw the Rus expand and divide, we saw them come together, and it was all done to perfection.

    Bravo!As you can tell, I definitely look forward to seeing what's next, asI can always expect a quality story to enjoy from you. Thank you for the amazing read!


    EDIT: Andrei the Kingmaker sounds and looks like a total badass!!

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    that's all there is to say, plus what everyone else has already said... well okay maybe a bit more

    I know I haven't been following this ARR as intently as most other people , but after sitting down and spending time reading through it (I'm not going to say how long ) I just have one word to say: A Masterpiece (well two then ) I regret not following this religiously , but it's safe to say that for the next AAR you (there will be one!) do I will glue myself to it.

    Upwards and Onwards.

    Radzeer's Next AAR

    One last thing...

    +rep
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    I have said all I can possibly say about this AAR. So I'll simply say this, bravo my friend! Bravo!

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