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    This is a one part story, took me a while. Sorry about the layout, it seems to be happeneing when I copy and paste from wrod


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    I T WAS a simple job:
    just go in shoot the
    bastards, blow it half to
    hell, and walk out. It was
    a key part of the Phoenix
    Program. There was
    never gonna be any
    resistance; none was
    expected and none came.
    We had visited the place
    before. They all seemed
    alright. They gave us
    some of their water, even
    fed us something. Village
    seemed just like any
    other. They didn’t seem
    to have any weaponry, or
    any kind of way of
    communicating with the
    enemy rebels, so they was
    no threat to us or anyone
    at all. Will had told us in
    the briefing to make it
    quick and that it was a top
    secret mission and that
    nobody was to know
    about this mission back
    home. He also said that “If
    you refuse to obey
    orders, then, hell, I’ll
    blow your brains out
    myself”.
    When we got the order
    nobody seemed to give a
    damn – just another
    bunch of Vietnamese as
    far as we was all
    concerned. We was
    walking up the goat path
    to the village. I could
    smell the boiled pork a
    mile off, and it smelt just
    like my momma’s just
    like we used to spit roast
    it. My momma would
    have thrown a Texan fit if
    she saw them ruining such
    a “fine” pig. As we drew a
    little nearer to the village,
    a few of them kids started running up to us.
    One of them had some
    kind of a bike, with no
    tires on it, though. I guess
    they were just glad to see
    us. I recognised one or
    two of them, not that it
    mattered: Todd was
    always gonna shoot
    them’s brains out,
    anyways. Sick bastard he
    was. Always getting such
    a... such a thrill out of it
    all, he was never right in
    the head. I’ll never forget
    the way he kicked the kid
    off the bike, like it was
    some kind of rat. Didn’t
    stop me liking him, mind;
    he wasn’t too bad. He
    reminded me of the kid
    that was always getting
    told off at school, the one
    everybody sort of liked,
    but no more than that.
    Them Villagers must have
    heard the shots because
    all of a sudden it was one
    big old game of hide and
    seek, and USA don’t like
    to lose. First off, we
    played their little game –
    went into those straw
    things they called home
    and blew the hell out of
    anything and everything
    that was in them. Those
    peasants just never know
    when to shut the hell up,
    they screamed and
    screamed like there was
    no tomorrow: then again
    I suppose there weren’t
    never gonna be a
    tomorrow for them.
    There was blood
    everywhere; I got at least
    a barrel load of it over my
    uniform. Takes a whole
    age for that crap to come
    off. Stevo, that sicko,
    kept on playing around
    with this arm that he blew
    off a kid no more than 11
    – kept on tapping poor
    old Jay’s ear with it. Jay
    was a sensitive guy:
    refused to kill them. He
    always said, “If they ain’t
    gonna hurt me, my
    family, or any of you
    fellers, then I sure as hell
    ain’t gonna kill them.” He
    started to lash out at us,
    then soon him and two
    others (Phil and Tony)
    were trying to stop...
    they was trying to protect
    him. Todd didn’t like that
    at all so he knocked him
    clean out, poor fool.
    Can’t remember a thing
    to this day. Still went
    down for it though. Some
    of the boys never forgave
    Jay and the boys for that,
    not that he apologised.
    But, after that, there
    were constantly fights
    between them. Soon they
    were calling them the
    “Charlie bunch” and they
    was always pulling pranks
    on them and bullying
    them about their
    mommas, and stuff like
    that.
    The killing wasn’t the
    only thing that upset Jay
    and his boys. According
    to them they saw Todd
    forcing a fifteen year old
    girl into one of them us came out on that day,
    but it wasn’t something
    that we really felt bad or
    stupid about afterwards.
    Though I regret it, I
    didn’t believe we were
    completely wrong. For
    us, I guess, it was just
    another day in the pits of
    hell. Some of the boys
    could never let it go, and
    there were also the men
    like Steve, Todd and Will
    that loved every Godforsaken
    minute. As they
    blew every inch of that
    village apart they felt a
    real sense of Patriotism.
    They still think that
    they’re all a bunch of Mr.
    America superheroes.
    Myself, at the time, I felt
    no remorse, but now ten
    years later I am a different
    man, and now I can’t stop
    thinking about what I did.
    It is always there: the
    guilt; the hatred. I don’t
    know how much longer I
    can take this.
    Me, well if I am
    completely honest with
    you, I was there. I shot
    who I saw. I left the kids
    to the others, but I did
    my share of the dirty
    work. I must’ve thrown
    grenades into at least
    three of those huts, shot
    about fifteen of the men
    and the women, and then
    I must have gone and
    burnt about another five
    of them,... I guess that
    that makes me a sick
    bastard, but I suppose
    that’s what you get when
    you take orders from the
    sick bastard with all the
    medals in charge.
    If only I could go back
    and change what I did,
    you could bet your life—
    and mine—I would.

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    Katsumoto's Avatar Quae est infernum es
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    That was great, really well written. Nice play on the title too Just make sure the sentences are coherent, I think Word may have messed up the order to some of them or something, like this one doesn't make a lot of sense: According to them they saw Todd forcing a fifteen year old girl into one of them us came out on that day,but it wasn’t something that we really felt bad or stupid about afterwards.
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    Word has been messing up all my copies to TWC like my Helios articles.... Ugh!

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    Yeah, interesting piece to write about. Definitely a tragedy and a black mark on the US military's history.

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    I like it. Shame about what word did though!
    Bitter is the wind tonight,
    it stirs up the white-waved sea.
    I do not fear the coursing of the Irish sea
    by the fierce warriors of Lothlind.

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    As Autocrat of All the Fictions, under the Grace of the Hexagon Council, I hereby declare this story finished. It shall be cataloged in the Gilded Hall for all time!
    Last edited by Monarchist; March 26, 2010 at 12:33 PM.
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