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Great tale - got my vote. The adjectives were perfect and you really pulled me in with the faint hints of who they were and what they were doing. Original, interesting, and all wound up very well at the end. A nice exterior view of humanity.
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Nice to see a poem, but unfortunately it didnt tickle my fancy. Yes it rhymed well, but endless couplets are just too typical and samy in my opinion - something a little DIFFERENT. Otherwise, very well set out and followed through, with an excellent pace and control over the 'plot'.
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A real shame. You really know how to string together beautiful, fluent phrases that could come from William Golding, but unfortunately it was all too random. The storyline was just too vague and so strongly 'barbarian' it didn't catch me really. Good try though.
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Gritty, hard nosed, primitive stuff. Love that sort of thing. But when you see that pic its the first thing that pops into your head. Its a shame you couldnt have made a more interesting plot, and after the first paragraph or so it is a little repetitive.
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Hmmm. I really liked the whole one-two dialogue set up, and you do it well with authentic lines. But I don't understand in the end - are these characters gods or what? The last line should have tied everything up and left me glowing with satisfaction but...
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Very good actually. One big problem is that it doesnt grab you from the beginning, I had to read on to find the juice. Otherwise very rapid succesion style of events. Too short as well, but good value for what's there.
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Just the incoherent ramblings of a shattered mind.... The writer did however take pains to stay with the picture though....The review is greatly appreciated...thank you... The story is simply about a father trying to protect his family....Luthuanians against the Germanic onslaught...3-
A real shame. You really know how to string together beautiful, fluent phrases that could come from William Golding, but unfortunately it was all too random. The storyline was just too vague and so strongly 'barbarian' it didn't catch me really. Good try though.
William Golding...I'm unfamiliar with him, could someone point me in the right direction please....
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then the weight of the evidence will still fall in your favor and carry the day
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Now if I may... I'd like to say a few words on the beauty of these weekly gatherings... The Diversity...Each person bringing a different view-point on the same focus. Take my scribblings...They are mainly emotional retching and as many of you have pointed out, very unpolished. But then that is my feeling and expression style. Take this week's piece in my mind probably my best rendering here because in my mind it focused on the picture and the story. To me stayed within it's confines... Having posted it early {for me} I went back and read it several times over a few days and to me it made sense and was indeed polished....
"To each their own in their own way" So to each of you, thank you for everything you post, and in the different styles you render them in....
Last edited by Mega Tortas de Bodemloze; November 04, 2009 at 09:07 AM. Reason: grammar
A Lion serves in Winter, then perhaps a Unicorn for the Spring.
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If you cannot stand behind what you say.... then do not speak. If your words are taken out of context,
then the weight of the evidence will still fall in your favor and carry the day
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Yes, we do all indeed seem to have our personal styles. I value Mega's creativity and emotional impact, while Naz gives us enthusiastic torrents of verse (my own work in that direction produce very small results for great effort). I seem to recall Theo being the master of melodrama, while Viking Prince produces quiet, thoughtful, slightly melancholy tales.
My own stories have a tendency to be clinical and cold, laced with ironic humour, something I'd like to be able to vary... but it really is hard trying to get out of my rut.
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Bono: "Let me tell you something. I've had enough of Irish Americans who haven't been back to their country in 20 or 30 years, and tell me about the 'Resistance', the 'Revolution' 'back home'. The 'glory' of the revolution, and the 'glory' of dying for the revolution. F *** THE REVOLUTION!!!"
Ariovistus Maximus: "Google supplieth all."
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Personal Help & Advice forum
My view on the "Friend Zone"
Good things come to those who wait... But better things come to those who never hesitate.
My apologies for failing to mention SonOfAlexander's tales of high adventure and derring-do.
Looks like we have a 3-way tie for first place here. I wonder if it might be a good idea to not allow voting for oneself in the run-off - maybe that would break the log-jam.
Ya I think a little sandwhich-boarding might be in order as well. I'm sure we can do a little better than 7 votes....The run-off would last the week...no?? I can re-make my sig and make the rounds then....
Edit: Once they post the run off I'll make my sig a sandwhich board and see if I can drum up some passers by...
Last edited by Mega Tortas de Bodemloze; November 09, 2009 at 01:06 PM. Reason: Edit & Grammar
A Lion serves in Winter, then perhaps a Unicorn for the Spring.
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If you cannot stand behind what you say.... then do not speak. If your words are taken out of context,
then the weight of the evidence will still fall in your favor and carry the day
The Casual Tortoise: Mega's Guide to Fast Turtling