Gosh, obviously I need to comment more since today's chapter blew me out of the water again! Nice to see such a unique aspect of the events during a campaign, and I'm definitely loving the intrigue parts. Keep it up!
Gosh, obviously I need to comment more since today's chapter blew me out of the water again! Nice to see such a unique aspect of the events during a campaign, and I'm definitely loving the intrigue parts. Keep it up!
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Last edited by Thokran; August 26, 2013 at 07:31 PM.
Wooo!! Gilbert is alive!!
Intriguing indeed - and unexpectedly chivalrous of Marcel there, however unintended it may have been
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Indeed, Gilbert's return was surprising but welcome!
I have to tell that I sense a shift in your storytelling angle.
Makuria was quite campaign-based, the Teutons were more character-based, but still a lot of campaign, then Aragon was very much character-based with hints about the campaign and now this is almost no campaign! And excellently written in that! If not many questions are asked about the campaign, it means that people are drawn in by the story itself. Very good job!
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Last edited by Thokran; August 26, 2013 at 07:32 PM.
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Last edited by Thokran; August 26, 2013 at 07:33 PM.
Sublime. I love the way you mould the characters as the story progresses. Much intrigue clearly awaits
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Last edited by Thokran; August 26, 2013 at 07:33 PM.
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Last edited by Thokran; August 26, 2013 at 07:35 PM.
Excellent plot and character development! I also like the pace of the story, slowly rolling on in the eastern Mediterranean... very nice.
But I think one of the greatest elements of this story is the role of Isabella. It is not easy to find a central role for a woman in such stories, so that is a special feat!
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Last edited by Thokran; August 26, 2013 at 07:36 PM.
Wonderfully satisfying after the trials and tribulations of the last few chapters. I loved the sudden turn in Marie's character, as well as Philip's moment of aggression
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That's more like it, princess.
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Last edited by Maltacus; February 10, 2012 at 10:10 AM.
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Inspired by Maltacus, here is my representation of Princess Marie:
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Eventually upon Thokran's consent to be....
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Last edited by Robin de Bodemloze; February 10, 2012 at 12:49 PM.
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Last edited by Thokran; August 26, 2013 at 07:36 PM.
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Last edited by Thokran; August 26, 2013 at 07:38 PM.
Great update as always! I thought the tension between Gilbert and Marie was very well done.
And then he took an arrow to the knee.
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An Aragonese hideous princess... So, from the previous descriptions I gather that she probably is said to have shining eyes and the softest of silk hair among the people of her own court? But alas, when the writer is from the more shallow and less understanding Crusader States such qualities are sadly overlooked...
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Your adventuring party are really hardcore diplomats. Nobody even contemplates retreating home to Cyprus for a while. Keep writing your very entertaining story
Oh yes, about the princess card (WHY is it that your stories seem to end up in, and result in, obsession with princesses as soon as you pick Mediterranean factions? The "jewels of the Meditteranean", indeed): It's actually nothing grander than simple copy-pasting of a line and some stars from one of your other pics. It looks like robinzx pasted individual letters to form the hitherto unknown trait Master Swordswoman . I use GIMP for picture editing, if that matters. If you would want to have many (existing) traits it can be really worth it to mod a princess or whatever with those in the descr_strat - it is much easier to copy a longer list of traits than pick one from each of several pictures and get the same good result.
If you really overdo this kind of thing it can end up as something like this :
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Last edited by Maltacus; February 12, 2012 at 05:29 PM.
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Home to Midgard, a Third Age AAR about two dwarves, a spy and a diplomat - Completed (pictures remade up to chapter 19).
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Another excellent chapter! The escape was masterfully written, and the last scene with Gilbert on the boat did really capture the feeling of it. I like the sky pic you added - and actually I have to say that while I am usually not a great fan of out-of-game pics, the plot-heavy way how you write this makes their inclusion very smooth (and of course you pick the right pictures too).
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Last edited by Thokran; August 26, 2013 at 07:39 PM.