[AAR] The Mere Scum Of The Earth.

**Amaz** · July 09, 2009, 10:18 PM

he could probably edit and reword it though...

**Chesh** · July 10, 2009, 12:43 AM

Wait would the heathens not fit with the wording of the times thou, authentically it would be correct. I've called Native Americans savages all though mine and no one has said a thing.

**Stildawn** · July 10, 2009, 01:12 AM

Its cause no one that Ive heard of is Native American lol.

**Amaz** · July 10, 2009, 01:29 AM

"them heathens" sure started off boche though lol...

**Chesh** · July 10, 2009, 01:53 AM

Well lets see if Boche says anything else.

**Amaz** · July 10, 2009, 01:57 AM

you never know... but it's better to be safe than... than...

**The Donz** · July 10, 2009, 02:53 AM

I don't see a problem with your writing as long as you try to build an athmosphere and not realy try to denigrate irish foks. Witch I know you don't whant to and wouldn't do. So no problem from my side.

And now: lets dicuss the story.

**Stildawn** · July 10, 2009, 08:18 AM

UPDATED!!!!

**The Donz** · July 10, 2009, 08:31 AM

“Britain hasn’t been invaded by a naval force since post patch 1.3, I believe we’ll be perfectly secure for the time being”

The Secretary of War looked puzzled by Lord Haven remark, what was this “post patch 1.3” the Prime Minister was talking about??? He put it off as some inside joke or something.

I realy like how the story has been split to give us another view now. Good Job!

EDIT: rep is coming as soon as I can again.

**Stildawn** · July 10, 2009, 07:07 PM

Yeah those are the only main characters now. A solider and a prime minister...

Man it was like 3 or 4 am when I finished that update.

Lol so you saw my little joke Donz hahaha, didnt know quite how to word it lol.
“Britain hasn’t been invaded by a naval force since post patch 1.3, I believe we’ll be perfectly secure for the time being”

The Secretary of War looked puzzled by Lord Haven remark, what was this “post patch 1.3” the Prime Minister was talking about??? He put it off as some inside joke or something.

**Amaz** · July 10, 2009, 07:16 PM

lol post patch 1.3...

like the Donz I"ll try to give you a rep as soon as I can again...

**Stildawn** · July 11, 2009, 08:22 PM

UPDATED!!!

In the first post lol.

**Amaz** · July 11, 2009, 10:28 PM

lol... you were pretty creative taking those pictures of inside the fort lol... nice so far!

**Stildawn** · July 12, 2009, 01:07 AM

Yeah I tried some lighting effects to try make it look like sun set, kinda worked, kinda didnt lol.

**Amaz** · July 12, 2009, 01:11 AM

looked more like brink of dusk.. but good enough anyway lol

**Stildawn** · July 12, 2009, 02:08 AM

Yeah dusk/sunset sorta thing was what I was after lol so yeah good haha.

**Amaz** · July 12, 2009, 02:15 AM

well... looking forward to a future chapter of battles and naval action maybe...

**Stildawn** · July 12, 2009, 02:27 AM

Yep, the next part im working on now ish has two naval battles (dont expect much ahah I kinda suck at naval battles)

**Blackshamrock.** · July 12, 2009, 09:47 AM

Well done Stildawn. Not bad reading at all. I was just saying to my friend that looking at arrs like this gives some sence of writting. I at the moment have wrote a short story about a Prussian General. I still need to edit and prove read it. And My friend reckons I should publish it. Bout I don't think so to be honest. I'm not a writer by nature. But ya man well done. It was a grate read and I'm definitely looking forward to your next up date. I have to be kind of odd now just for one sec. Being Irish I didn't like the remark he dons. But in away its telling history as it was. No offence to my English friends here and not to be opening old wounds or anything. In realty we didn't have a lot of rights back then and we where treat'd pretty much like dogs book like I said that's in the past where all friends now

. Anyway me as persion I'm not that sensitive. And it takes a lot to get me going but My point is simple just choose your words wisely. Some people are a lot more sensitive than me so just be careful. But ya man a grate read and a grate story I really enjoyed it and as I've said already I'm relay looking forward to your next up date. Well done and to top it off just cause I'm me here's some rep for ya

. Well done man very well done indeed.

**Stildawn** · July 12, 2009, 04:12 PM

Cheers Blackshamrock... Yeah I got in a bit of trouble with that line... No disrepect intended though, Im part Irish too, plus they were excellent soliders. Just trying to get the atmosphere of the time... Im not about to write a "Hate on Irish" AAR... He will be respected for Irish bit later on dont you worry.

But cheers for the feedback, Im learning as I go... liking the AAR experience makes playing my campaign more fun as you really get into it... Im at work now but expect a killer update tonight with the first action lol.

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