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    Sons of Jupiter
    This is a story I'm doing at home this is a different version of the original that I have planned.
    But first background info on this make belief chapter. The chapter is called The Sons of Jupiter,
    Jupiter short for Jupiter Prime, the planet they draw recruits from. Thats all I'm going to tell, just read and find out more during the story.


    Prologue
    A ship lumbered through space its colours, were a Pale green
    background with the rear, front and roof were a dark dull
    green. It had on it a symbol, it was a loral leaf crown,
    with two bolts of lightning stricking down from the
    two top corners, it was the symbol of the Sons of jupiter Chapter.
    They came with a purpose.


    Chapter 1
    The ship approached a planet, a planet called Isis III. It soon
    began to move faster, but you can't see it properly in
    space. It progressed to the planet, soon reacjing orbit and
    looking down at the planet of Isis III. The continents were
    tropical green, all of them except the poles who were ice
    blue and looked lifeless as Luna.

    Then five more ships sped from behind the battle barge,
    and then took orbital positions and awaited orders. These
    were ships of the Inquisition and Imperial navy. Three were
    were from the Navy, one from the Adeptus Mechanicus and
    one from the Inquisition its self including the Space Marines
    battle barge.

    Then landing craft and drop pods decended to the planet
    ready for war. Inside one of the drop pods was Brother
    Captain Marius Laebinus, sat strapped to a seat and
    ready for battle. He wasn't scared. A Space Marine
    knew no fear. He still saw men muttering prayers to the
    God-Emperor of Mankind and their Primarch. Marius turned
    to one of his brother's and said, "Varus how much longer till
    planet fall?" Varus turned his head, "Fifty seconds until we
    reach Isis III my lord," he replied. "Good," said Marius and
    he looked away and started praying.

    Time went by as the drop pod drew nearer and nearer to
    the surface, of Isis III. "Thirty seconds everyone," called
    out Varus, he took his plasma gun and placed it on his lap,
    it didn't harm him. Yet. But he hoped it wouldn't explode and
    stop him fighting for good, yet, it never did. "Ten seconds
    brothers." Then 5...4...3...2...1. The drop pod crash landed
    as it was supposed to do. "By the Emperor, that was rougher
    than usual," swore Gaius, as he took his straps off. "GO! GO!
    GO!" shouted Marius, and the Space Marines lept out of the

    entrance and touched the ground of Isis III...
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    Any comments.
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    Default Re: Sons of Jupiter

    Lookin good man, although i dont think a Space Marine would say 'Emporers Arse!'.

    A guardsman yeah, but not a Marine.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Magic Man View Post
    Lookin good man, although i dont think a Space Marine would say 'Emporers Arse!'.

    A guardsman yeah, but not a Marine.
    Well I was just being creative. I'll edit it to something else.

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    Default Re: Sons of Jupiter

    Quote Originally Posted by bomberboy View Post
    Well I was just being creative. I'll edit it to something else.
    Yeah fair play. Maybe change it to 'By the Throne!'

    Or 'Golden Throne!' or something.

    Just imagine saying 'By the Emporers Arse, look at that!' in front of a Marine.
    I think he'd kill you

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    Chapter 2


    Chaplain Julius was the first out. Bolt pistol and Crozius Arcanum
    in hand.But there was nothing there, nothing but trees and
    tropical scrubs. Next came Sergeant Gaius, then Techmarine
    Varus and others, before finally Marius ran out and took
    his position. "Men, once the other drop pods have landed we
    move out," he voxed. The company acknowledged and spread
    out to find what cover they could find, in the massive open field
    they were in.

    Soon all the drop pods were down and Sergeants Gaius and
    Titus linked up with their fellow squads and awaited orders.
    Librarian Lucius walked up to Marius. "Looks like the traitors are
    not here," he said, "But I feel something, somrthing wrong like we
    are being followed." "Brother Librarian we will root out the danger
    and destroy it before they can harm us," said Marius, "But for now
    we must move. Everyone stay vigilant and look for danger. Move
    out." The entire company moved out walking trough scrubs that
    were chest height to a normal man, but not to a Space Marine.

    They advanced an sighted a huge bush that had several minor
    trees making it with bushes at the bottom. "It looks like a new
    jungle is growing," said Brother Julian. "No brother it looks more
    like an ambush. The trees branches drooped very low making it
    this small 'jungle' an ideal place for an ambush. "I feel a disturbance
    its..." several shots rang out from the bush and bounced off
    Librarian Lucius' armour. "Ambush!!" shouted a Space Marine. There
    was few cover but the Space Marines knew they woild be protected
    from the futile Las shots by their Power Armour. The Space Marines
    fired back, their Bolters spitting out bullets rapidly like venom from a
    snake, pierced the foilage that concealed the traitors. Screams rang
    oyt as men died, blood splurted out one like a volcano shooting out
    deadly lava, one had two arms shot off, another his head decapitated.
    But the fire was still too much and Marius wanted it neutralised.
    "Brother Lucius! Take men armed with the flamers and destroy that bush!"
    shouted Marius. "Yes my Lord!" replied Lucius. He and the flamers rushed
    up to the front. Lucius concentrated hard. The flamethrowers let out a
    huge burst of holy flame into the bush. The flame enveloped an entire
    section of the bush in flames. Then Lucius unleashed a storm of flame
    from his hands, like a tidal wave engulfing the land it attacked the entire
    foilage burning any of the unfortunate souls who stood in its way.

    "Forward! For the Emperor!" shouted Marius. The Space Marines drew
    their melee weapons, and charged through the foilage, cutting down
    branches and even the charred remains of the traitors who were
    unlucky to have been engulfed by flame or bullet. They reached a
    a small clearing and killed some stragglers, Marius cut down one and
    crushed another man's skull. The rest were either gunned down or
    sliced to death. They entered a wood chasing down more stragglers.
    They entered another clearing, and shots rang out...
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    Default Re: Sons of Jupiter

    Hey Magic Man I changed it to by the Emperor. But your right if I said that he probably would.
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    Default Re: Sons of Jupiter

    I'll update it everytime I complete a chapter so I may be a while. I'll try and do at least two updates at any time.
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